Two Strangers
An Empat Empat poem24 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a good Empat poem Yvonne and I love the
two total strangers sharing sky
line. That's a great description of the sun/moon the satellite/a flaming star all moving around up there in never never sky. Good write.
Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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This is a good Empat poem Yvonne and I love the
two total strangers sharing sky
line. That's a great description of the sun/moon the satellite/a flaming star all moving around up there in never never sky. Good write.
Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 18-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Valda.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is truly excellent in every respect--skillfully and creatively written in an appealing style and vividly descriptive of two powerful "entities" that never meet. I wonder if this might also be called a quatern.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Your poem is truly excellent in every respect--skillfully and creatively written in an appealing style and vividly descriptive of two powerful "entities" that never meet. I wonder if this might also be called a quatern.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Thank you for a great review. It is sort of like a quatern, isn't it?
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I was unfamiliar with this style of poetry, thanks for enlightening me.
This is written with imagination, creativity and vision.
I appreciate the presentation. The artwork is not only visually appealing but it enhances your writing beautifully.
Your phraseology is excellent!
You have penned a verse that explores the duality of the sky and it's powerful energy.
Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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I was unfamiliar with this style of poetry, thanks for enlightening me.
This is written with imagination, creativity and vision.
I appreciate the presentation. The artwork is not only visually appealing but it enhances your writing beautifully.
Your phraseology is excellent!
You have penned a verse that explores the duality of the sky and it's powerful energy.
Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Thank you for a lovely review.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
This is an excellent example of the Empat Empat poem. I especially liked the line you chose for your stair case refrain. It set the back story to the poem very well. Kate xx
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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This is an excellent example of the Empat Empat poem. I especially liked the line you chose for your stair case refrain. It set the back story to the poem very well. Kate xx
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Thank you for saying that. Much appreciated.
Comment from aryr
This was fantastic damommy. I am so glad you came up with the Empat Empat. The picture was perfect for your words because it showed the sun and the moon. I agree that they never ever saw each other because each was part of what was opposite. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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This was fantastic damommy. I am so glad you came up with the Empat Empat. The picture was perfect for your words because it showed the sun and the moon. I agree that they never ever saw each other because each was part of what was opposite. Very well done, greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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You are so very welcome, Yvonne.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Yvonne, what an interesting form and I can see why it would be an early form of a rhyming verse. Now, it comes from Indonesia. I find that very interesting. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Hi Yvonne, what an interesting form and I can see why it would be an early form of a rhyming verse. Now, it comes from Indonesia. I find that very interesting. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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I did, too. Thanks, Ulla.
Comment from BethShelby
This is nice poem about the sun and moon. I never thought of them as strangers, because I thought the moon was borrowing it's light from the sun, but they are a long way apart so I guess they've never met. This was nicely rhymed with the correct sequence of rhyme for this type poem.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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This is nice poem about the sun and moon. I never thought of them as strangers, because I thought the moon was borrowing it's light from the sun, but they are a long way apart so I guess they've never met. This was nicely rhymed with the correct sequence of rhyme for this type poem.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
This is a well-written poem. The font could be for me a tad larger, but it is okay. I like how colorful your presentation is. This line ~"on the fly" for me is slang and doesn't fit the vernacular of the rest of the poem. The repeated refrain~ two total strangers sharing sky is great in the poem. Overall, well-done!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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This is a well-written poem. The font could be for me a tad larger, but it is okay. I like how colorful your presentation is. This line ~"on the fly" for me is slang and doesn't fit the vernacular of the rest of the poem. The repeated refrain~ two total strangers sharing sky is great in the poem. Overall, well-done!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Thank you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Wendy G
How different and interesting! i would never have thought of that - two strangers sharing the sky, never meeting, alternating their reign. Very original and very cleverly done, with the staircase line repetition, which you used effectively.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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How different and interesting! i would never have thought of that - two strangers sharing the sky, never meeting, alternating their reign. Very original and very cleverly done, with the staircase line repetition, which you used effectively.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much for that.
Comment from Raul1
This is a different approach to writing poetry. I like it because you are an expert writing this poetry. It is difficult to write poems. Some different styles are hard to master for they require time. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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This is a different approach to writing poetry. I like it because you are an expert writing this poetry. It is difficult to write poems. Some different styles are hard to master for they require time. Excellent work! Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the wonderful compliment, but you give me too much credit. What a great review, and I truly appreciate it.
