Comment from Dawn Munro

Excellent

Oh my, this is simply too ironic -- I love your poem, and your title is the first line of the one I wrote this (very) afternoon:

Procrastination
by Dawn Munro
(not exactly Shakespeare, *smile)

I coulda, woulda, shoulda
but I didn't - now she's dead.
I wonder if the words "I woulda"
ever should be said.

Procrastination leads us to
a place we dare not live -
a fool believes in promises.
Much better we just give.

It's not for us to judge the way
another person thinks.
Instead, we SHARE our blessings -
being helpless truly stinks.

Together we can make the world
much kinder than it is -
a hand UP truly is God's love,
and EVERYBODY'S 'biz'.
~~

 Comment Written 01-Aug-2022

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reply by the author on 01-Aug-2022

Thanks for the review, Dawn. Your poem is a good one.

reply by Dawn Munro on 01-Aug-2022

Always a pleasure. Thank you too. :)

Comment from royowen

Excellent

If the first real disaster and judging of mankind by God is anything to go by, then it will be nothing to the second coming, like "A thief in the night" we're, let's not be like the five unwise virgins, beautifully written Pan, good luck, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022

Thanks, Roy. You are right. The second coming should be a doozy.

reply by royowen on 15-Jul-2022

Well done

Comment from amahra

Exceptional

That was so cool. I love the image, btw; Jesus looks like a rock star with that long hair. And in a way, He is a rock star--the Rock of our salvation. Best wishes in the contest, Paul.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022

Once again, thanks. There's going to be a lot of people standing in that line.

Comment from C. Gale Burnett

Excellent

Excellent one-liner; beautiful choice of artwork;
you created the perfect title, accentuating your one-liner;
and I personally love the message.
Gale

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022

Thanks, Gale. I've gotten positive and negative feedback on this one.

Comment from the13thpoet

Excellent

Hello Paul a good day to you, I hope this finds you well. I liked your 1 Line Poem contest entry, you executed it well. Good job and good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022

Thanks for the review. Some liked it, and some did not.

Comment from rama devi

Excellent

While I don't agree with the premise, I absolutely applaud the delivery. Clever punning on coming and bumming! nice artwork choice too. Even though Jewish, I do love Jesus and his teachings (I just consider them different than the church's interpretations!)

The flippant title has fine ironic contrast with the weight of the message. Well done!

Warmly,
rd

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022

Thanks, Rama. Jesus was a great man, no matter what religion looks at Him.

reply by rama devi on 16-Jul-2022

Totally agree! xxoo

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Compelling and thought-provoking. Our Aussie understanding of "bumming" is "slacking around, not doing anything worthwhile" - I think it must be the same for US? That would tie in with the title and the tones of regret contained in the title. Might ruffle a few feathers! But best wishes for your clever entry.
Wendy

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022

Thanks, Wendy. I did ruffle a few feathers.

Comment from Aussie

Exceptional

Well, they certainly won't be humming. I liked your one line poem. The Second Coming is getting closer (can't wait) to look upon His face is the most beautiful thing to do. Bumming is a free ride in American, isn't it?
No free loaders in heaven. K xx

 Comment Written 15-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Jul-2022

Thanks, Aussie. That's a great first line in your review. One of he meanings of bumming is feeling bad about something that has happened.

Comment from Mary Vigasin

Excellent

A very thought-provoking one-line poem. Also, I like the unique wording. I imagine the Second Coming will be a bummer for some.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes and regards,
Mary

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022

Thanks, Mary. Those one liners are tough.

Comment from jake cosmos aller

Excellent

hmm I liked this short poem about the second coming. I don't share your Christian faith but I appreciated this one for its humor and its snarky attitude.

 Comment Written 14-Jul-2022

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reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022

Thanks, Jake. The reviews for this one have been all over the board.