My New Pet
A cold hearted friend11 total reviews
Comment from joann r romei
What a wonderful story told in a poem. I love the mysteriousness of the new pet and the intrigue. This should make a unique entry for the contest, good luck, i did not see any errors.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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What a wonderful story told in a poem. I love the mysteriousness of the new pet and the intrigue. This should make a unique entry for the contest, good luck, i did not see any errors.
Comment Written 20-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2022
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Dear Joann, Thank you for the review and the five stars. I have often wondered about the difficulties involved in keeping a dragon. It would be QUITE a task, a life-long commitment, but Oh so much fun.cheers Cass
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Cass a good day to you. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Hello Cass a good day to you. Thank you for sharing your poem, I think you executed well within the rules of the writing prompt. Good job and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2022
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Dear Friend, Thank yo for your review and the five stars.A dragon would be an AWESOME creature to have as a pet.
Fortunately, there are rules of lore which rigidly govern a dragon's conduct towards their human master or mistress. I have never heard of a dragon going "rogue". Have you? cheers Cass
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I loved this inventive story and the chance you took in this shop! Such a magical write and I hung on your every word here. A new pet in the family with a dash of mystical power, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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I loved this inventive story and the chance you took in this shop! Such a magical write and I hung on your every word here. A new pet in the family with a dash of mystical power, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 17-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Dear Dolly, Thank you for your review and the five stars.I have always been intrigued by the idea of having a dragon for a pet. Moonlit flights across the night sky! Telepathic conversations! A glimpse into a dragon's mind! Ooh, lovely! Alas, all moonlight and cobwebs! Ah well 'tis just as well I suppose. cheers Cass
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed this story very much!!
I am rather new to the fantasy genre but I am glad I did not skip over your story.
This is written in a poetic rather then prose manner, but as a poet, I appreciate that presentation.
This is a well rounded story. It has intrigue, mystery, suspense, and humor, what more can a reader ask for?
Well done!
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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I enjoyed this story very much!!
I am rather new to the fantasy genre but I am glad I did not skip over your story.
This is written in a poetic rather then prose manner, but as a poet, I appreciate that presentation.
This is a well rounded story. It has intrigue, mystery, suspense, and humor, what more can a reader ask for?
Well done!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Dear Friend, Thank you for your review and the five stars.
Your words are generous and most welcome. This is the first time my fascination for the Dark Ages and the Medieval Era has got the better of me and provoked a poem about something belonging to those times.It was fun. I loved doing it, so there's more than half a chance of other pieces in the future. cheers Cass
Comment from Shirley McLain
I loved your dragon for a pet poem. It was quite the tale. I liked the ending that you wouldn't be leaving each other. You did a great job. Have a wonderful evening. Shirley
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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I loved your dragon for a pet poem. It was quite the tale. I liked the ending that you wouldn't be leaving each other. You did a great job. Have a wonderful evening. Shirley
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Dear Shirley, Thank you for your review and the five stars.
The ending took me by surprise, 'cos when I realized he would be alone for the major part of his life, I felt obliged o do something about it. So I did. cheers Cass
Comment from royowen
We never thought that we would have anymore animals, we've owned 12 cats and four dogs over the years, and thought another one would outlive, but we've become foster carers for a young Moodle, a cross between a Maltese terrier and a poodle, very dependent, "the best laid plans"etc. thanks for sharing Cass, beautifully written, a clever epic, poetic journey poem, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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We never thought that we would have anymore animals, we've owned 12 cats and four dogs over the years, and thought another one would outlive, but we've become foster carers for a young Moodle, a cross between a Maltese terrier and a poodle, very dependent, "the best laid plans"etc. thanks for sharing Cass, beautifully written, a clever epic, poetic journey poem, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Dear Roy, Thank you for your review and the five stars. My pets have all gone to Pussycat Heaven.Now I live in an aged care facility where pets aren't allowed. So, I live with memories of soft furry bodies, sweet purring songs and leaf chasing, ridiculous games out under the apricot tree.
We had nineteen cats throughout our fiftyfive year long marriage,several guinea pigs, a few birds and more than one yardful of chickens. They grew from a couple of rescued bantams to 43 birds at one stage.( limit according to council statutes) was 10 hens and one rooster. I've forgotten to mention the canaries, the zebra finches and the quail.Yup! I sure had a whole lot of fun back in the day. Pets are a Godsend, and I imagine your cossetted "Moodle" lives in the lap of luxury. Lucky pooch. cheers Cass
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Wow! You are a true Mrs. Noah, the world needs people like you Cass, lovers of animal are true lovers.
Comment from lancellot
This is interesting but there some things to clean up. Also, you use sentence punctuations in the first stanza, then abandon them later at times.
notes:
There were guinea pigs, dogs,tame rats and green frogs
-There were guinea pigs, dogs, tame rats, and green frogs
Lay an emu -sized egg in a bowl
-Lay an emu-sized egg in a bowl
A strange yellow bird shrieking profanous word
-A strange yellow bird shrieking profane words
i asked him "How much?" But he answered "Don't touch
Or you never again will be whole"
-I asked him, "How much?" But he answered, "Don't touch,
or you never again will be whole."
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reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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This is interesting but there some things to clean up. Also, you use sentence punctuations in the first stanza, then abandon them later at times.
notes:
There were guinea pigs, dogs,tame rats and green frogs
-There were guinea pigs, dogs, tame rats, and green frogs
Lay an emu -sized egg in a bowl
-Lay an emu-sized egg in a bowl
A strange yellow bird shrieking profanous word
-A strange yellow bird shrieking profane words
i asked him "How much?" But he answered "Don't touch
Or you never again will be whole"
-I asked him, "How much?" But he answered, "Don't touch,
or you never again will be whole."
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2022
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Thank you for your review and the four stars.The word "profanous" is a bit of "Poet's licence", just to clinch the rhyme. I have addressed the other corrections and thank you sincerely for your interest. cheers Cass
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Nicely written. Not being a poet, I don't know the lingo for your rhyming within the line - "I decided to 'get' myself a new 'pet'".
This puts a lot more pressure on the writer, I would guess.
Good work and best wishes.
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Nicely written. Not being a poet, I don't know the lingo for your rhyming within the line - "I decided to 'get' myself a new 'pet'".
This puts a lot more pressure on the writer, I would guess.
Good work and best wishes.
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Dear Wayne, Thank you fo your review and the five stars.The lines with the "inner"rhyme were originally written as two short lines rhyming in couplet.The poem ended up looking as long as Bismark's tail, so I made them into one line which works just as well poetically.
cheers Cass
Comment from lyenochka
This is a very unique entry and you wrote it in rhyme! I appreciate the notes about the longevity of dragons and the elixir that can help the dragon keeper! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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This is a very unique entry and you wrote it in rhyme! I appreciate the notes about the longevity of dragons and the elixir that can help the dragon keeper! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Dear Helen,This is something I've been "cooking up" for a while now. Medieval times have always held a fascination for me and today it finally got the better of me. With this result. Stay tuned there will be more. cheers Cass
Comment from Wendy G
What a fun piece! Apart from a couple of unnecessary capitals, this was well-written, and very imaginative and definitely quite original! Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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What a fun piece! Apart from a couple of unnecessary capitals, this was well-written, and very imaginative and definitely quite original! Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 16-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jul-2022
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Dear Wendy, Thank you for your review and the five stars.
Thank you also for the heads up on a couple of missed capitals. They have been taken care of and now it's all tidy and "bootiful". The so-called "dark ages" and the Medieval era have always held a fascination for me. So, it's no surprise to me to have it finally overspill into FanStory territory. There is a lot more of this, so stay posted. cheers Cass
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Well done, my fellow Aussie mate! I'll stay posted.
Wendy
