Heart Crafted Poems - 2022
Viewing comments for Chapter 108 "Impossible dreams"Musings of an old man - 2022
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Comment from Heather Knight
I love your poem even though it's possibly too high-brow for me.
My favourite verses are the first and the last for two reasons:
- they create a sense of completeness, the poem comes full circle.
- I can relate. The first stanza describes a big part of my personality.
Very well written. Thanks so much.
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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I love your poem even though it's possibly too high-brow for me.
My favourite verses are the first and the last for two reasons:
- they create a sense of completeness, the poem comes full circle.
- I can relate. The first stanza describes a big part of my personality.
Very well written. Thanks so much.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Heather, thank you for your honest and tender reply. Your six stars are so meaningful.
Comment from dragonpoet
Jim,
This is a good club entry about how dreams can cause pain if they don't come true of if those in your dreams betray you. It seems this has happened in this poem. The quest for love is an ongoing one and should not be given up on.
Keep writing and stay heatlhy
Joan
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Jim,
This is a good club entry about how dreams can cause pain if they don't come true of if those in your dreams betray you. It seems this has happened in this poem. The quest for love is an ongoing one and should not be given up on.
Keep writing and stay heatlhy
Joan
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Joan, thank you for your review and comments,
Comment from lyenochka
You're so efficient to use the Potlatch Club challenge for the Picture Club poem! I don't know that form well but it seems you repeated the word itself and repeated two lines from the first stanza which gives it a feeling of completion. A very impressionistic poem about dreams and love that fits the picture!
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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You're so efficient to use the Potlatch Club challenge for the Picture Club poem! I don't know that form well but it seems you repeated the word itself and repeated two lines from the first stanza which gives it a feeling of completion. A very impressionistic poem about dreams and love that fits the picture!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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lyenochka, thank you for commenting on the poetic license I employed to merge the two club prompts.
Comment from royowen
It's almost like a blank verse, but with the exception of rhymes from previous stanzas working their way progressiingly through the poem, cleverly keeping the author on his toes, you've done it commandingly Jim, well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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It's almost like a blank verse, but with the exception of rhymes from previous stanzas working their way progressiingly through the poem, cleverly keeping the author on his toes, you've done it commandingly Jim, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jul-2022
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Roy, thank you so much!
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Most welcome
Comment from Goodadvicechan
Impossible dreams...,
Everyone has dreams. When dreams are delivered, people are excited and happy.
Only practical dreams can be delivered. Impossible dreams are Impossible to deliver.
I agree with you that Dreaming impossible dreams can hurt tender hearts.
Thanks for sharing
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Impossible dreams...,
Everyone has dreams. When dreams are delivered, people are excited and happy.
Only practical dreams can be delivered. Impossible dreams are Impossible to deliver.
I agree with you that Dreaming impossible dreams can hurt tender hearts.
Thanks for sharing
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thank you~
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
This required two readings to figure out the cool thing you did in the last stanza. I read the requirements for a Domino Rhyme, which was difficult enough - but ending with a stanza that used a line from each previous stanza (AND STILL MAKES SENSE) is truly inspired. Your theme is relatable, your rhyme scheme matches the requirements, and this is an overall outstanding poem!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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This required two readings to figure out the cool thing you did in the last stanza. I read the requirements for a Domino Rhyme, which was difficult enough - but ending with a stanza that used a line from each previous stanza (AND STILL MAKES SENSE) is truly inspired. Your theme is relatable, your rhyme scheme matches the requirements, and this is an overall outstanding poem!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Donna G, thank you for catching my little nuance at the end. I am honored with your six star validation.🙏🙏🎈🎈 JLR
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. Also thank you for the author's notes. I was not familiar with this poetic form, but in my humble opinion you nailed it with this beautifully written poem.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. Also thank you for the author's notes. I was not familiar with this poetic form, but in my humble opinion you nailed it with this beautifully written poem.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Barbara, thank you so very much for your validation!
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with this complex style for the club, JLR.
You expressed your thoughts and feelings well about impossible
dreams. Those dreams can, and do, cause issues--sometimes
unintentionally. You adhered nicely to the rhyme scheme. The
repeated lines in the last verse worked.
Thanks for participating, Jan
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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You did a great job with this complex style for the club, JLR.
You expressed your thoughts and feelings well about impossible
dreams. Those dreams can, and do, cause issues--sometimes
unintentionally. You adhered nicely to the rhyme scheme. The
repeated lines in the last verse worked.
Thanks for participating, Jan
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Jan, thank you for your gifts, keep them coming! Fondly, Jim
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are thought provoking, interesting, clear, descriptive
and creative. I like how the author leads the reader to the last stanza of stating "Dreaming impossible dreams can hurt tender hearts". So True! These words flow and connect well. The artwork is awesome! Great Poem!
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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The author's words are thought provoking, interesting, clear, descriptive
and creative. I like how the author leads the reader to the last stanza of stating "Dreaming impossible dreams can hurt tender hearts". So True! These words flow and connect well. The artwork is awesome! Great Poem!
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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harmony, I am so grateful for your review and comments. Thank you to you, in abundance!
Comment from Scott Rhodie
I'll be honest the technicalities of this particular piece is a little beyond me, but the bottom line is that I've enjoyed the poetry. It's romantic poetry I hope about possibly never achieving those impossible dreams, but we must always try.
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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I'll be honest the technicalities of this particular piece is a little beyond me, but the bottom line is that I've enjoyed the poetry. It's romantic poetry I hope about possibly never achieving those impossible dreams, but we must always try.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2022
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Scott thanks for your review and comments.
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No problem.
