Harmony
the way things should be21 total reviews
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is excellent, G. I'm so glad I scrolled down otherwise, I would have missed this. It is, to no surprise, beautifully written, and the concept of starting over is terrifying but perhaps necessary. Loved this! Best, JohnC.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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This is excellent, G. I'm so glad I scrolled down otherwise, I would have missed this. It is, to no surprise, beautifully written, and the concept of starting over is terrifying but perhaps necessary. Loved this! Best, JohnC.
Comment Written 11-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Many thanks john, yeah, mine are usually further down the lists. i refuse to pay out silly money! lol Many thanks. G
Comment from rspoet
Hello G,
I enjoyed your clever story.
It's good to have a name beginning with the letter "A".
Perhaps the young woman is Emily.
You developed the theme very well with small bits of information,
often not complete.
I think Aaron will need a wise, beautiful young woman.
But then again, it appears he has God on his side.
Well done.
Robert
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Hello G,
I enjoyed your clever story.
It's good to have a name beginning with the letter "A".
Perhaps the young woman is Emily.
You developed the theme very well with small bits of information,
often not complete.
I think Aaron will need a wise, beautiful young woman.
But then again, it appears he has God on his side.
Well done.
Robert
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Many thanks for the great response. I very much appreciated it.
G
Comment from LJbutterfly
To meditate, you begin by envisioning a scene similar to your opening paragraph. Warm sun, the sloshing of cool water, a pristine blue sky, wind whispering through foliage with birds singing, coupled with deep breaths, erases the stresses of the modern day. I was at peace until the voice interrupted. But in your beautiful story, the voice is welcomed, and can bring new life. Aaron had been watched and would now reap the benefits of his actions, as Christian beliefs say we will all experience. God forgot nothing. A beautiful woman appeared, and the world will begin again. Beautiful story.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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To meditate, you begin by envisioning a scene similar to your opening paragraph. Warm sun, the sloshing of cool water, a pristine blue sky, wind whispering through foliage with birds singing, coupled with deep breaths, erases the stresses of the modern day. I was at peace until the voice interrupted. But in your beautiful story, the voice is welcomed, and can bring new life. Aaron had been watched and would now reap the benefits of his actions, as Christian beliefs say we will all experience. God forgot nothing. A beautiful woman appeared, and the world will begin again. Beautiful story.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Yep. I have some qualification in mindfulness, although I don't really employ it much. lol I live by the sea and get my daily dose of quietness early morning. All the best G
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Loved this story G a story of rebirth. Of Aaron living in harmony with the world around him, the last one left to do so. A reinvention of the Adam and Eve story, well told and I loved the early descriptions, the sounds, the beauty. Well done. Cheers Valda
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Loved this story G a story of rebirth. Of Aaron living in harmony with the world around him, the last one left to do so. A reinvention of the Adam and Eve story, well told and I loved the early descriptions, the sounds, the beauty. Well done. Cheers Valda
Comment Written 09-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Many thanks as always. G
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Wow! You've got it all figured out! The walking on the water no ripples or anything!
Sounds good to me! I would pass this one along to anyone else. I am sure glad I read this it has put me in touch with the kinder gentler part of myself. A beautiful woman is all we need to be complete in a fantasy world!
At least that is how your story goes.
Thanks for the thrill!
Jesse
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Wow! You've got it all figured out! The walking on the water no ripples or anything!
Sounds good to me! I would pass this one along to anyone else. I am sure glad I read this it has put me in touch with the kinder gentler part of myself. A beautiful woman is all we need to be complete in a fantasy world!
At least that is how your story goes.
Thanks for the thrill!
Jesse
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Many thanks Jesse. Very much appreciated. G
Comment from royowen
Yes it would be great if we could go back and start again. They didn't get it right the first time, the only problem is they had others here to taint the perfection of couple, most imaginative, the good thing I guess is your theological training. The problem with that is the thousands of years of circularity, the humanising, my encounter had no presuppositions in them, Aaronic priesthood is still with us, with all its political intrigue, when Christ's equalised belief, He affected a non hierarchical church for those that perceive it, there are offices, but no "bosses" beautifully written G, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Yes it would be great if we could go back and start again. They didn't get it right the first time, the only problem is they had others here to taint the perfection of couple, most imaginative, the good thing I guess is your theological training. The problem with that is the thousands of years of circularity, the humanising, my encounter had no presuppositions in them, Aaronic priesthood is still with us, with all its political intrigue, when Christ's equalised belief, He affected a non hierarchical church for those that perceive it, there are offices, but no "bosses" beautifully written G, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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That's it, the problem with religion is religion, that big organised beast. G
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I agree. I don?t like it either. The cross did away with hierarchy.
Comment from estory
I thought it was a great contemporary take on the creation story, the Adam and Eve story, or the recreation story, as it were. Told with the usual wit and personality, and with that usual attention to detail that we come to expect from your work. You set that idyllic scene very well in the opening, the tranquil, pastoral scene, and you have a great interpretation of Jesus walking over the water and making Aaron his new Adam. in the end, when that woman appears, he seems quite willing. LOL estory
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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I thought it was a great contemporary take on the creation story, the Adam and Eve story, or the recreation story, as it were. Told with the usual wit and personality, and with that usual attention to detail that we come to expect from your work. You set that idyllic scene very well in the opening, the tranquil, pastoral scene, and you have a great interpretation of Jesus walking over the water and making Aaron his new Adam. in the end, when that woman appears, he seems quite willing. LOL estory
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Many thanks as always. G
Comment from damommy
This is wonderful! Wouldn't it be great to be in on the start of a new world, with only you and a companion. As always, I was hooked from the first line. I'm so glad I have a six to give you.
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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This is wonderful! Wouldn't it be great to be in on the start of a new world, with only you and a companion. As always, I was hooked from the first line. I'm so glad I have a six to give you.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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That's how I'd like to go out. Me on a raft with my loved ones. G
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
And I had a six left! I loved this, and I think it could happen that way. The world as it is at the moment is not a nice place. You have, to use one of your expressions, 'lazilly' told this story, nice and calm, drifting along the water on his raft, bringing us with you. The arrival of ... ehem, was just as we would envisage, and the fact that 'someone' else has been watching him, too, and is prepared to give it a second chance, was brilliantly done. I love, love that last line!!! This is a beautiful, well written, enjoyable story, Gareth. Well done. Love Sandra xx
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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And I had a six left! I loved this, and I think it could happen that way. The world as it is at the moment is not a nice place. You have, to use one of your expressions, 'lazilly' told this story, nice and calm, drifting along the water on his raft, bringing us with you. The arrival of ... ehem, was just as we would envisage, and the fact that 'someone' else has been watching him, too, and is prepared to give it a second chance, was brilliantly done. I love, love that last line!!! This is a beautiful, well written, enjoyable story, Gareth. Well done. Love Sandra xx
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Many thanks for the great response Sandra. i had fun writing this one. i found it quit soothing and pleasing. LOL
Comment from barbara.wilkey
This is fun to read. I can imagine something like this happening. God would not forget anything. Many believe He is coming again very soon. Only He knows.
The man shrugged. "You are." He swept a hand across the horizon. "And not just here. Anywhere."
"Well, I can't be. You're he... oh..." (two dialogues in one paragraph, they need to be separated)
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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This is fun to read. I can imagine something like this happening. God would not forget anything. Many believe He is coming again very soon. Only He knows.
The man shrugged. "You are." He swept a hand across the horizon. "And not just here. Anywhere."
"Well, I can't be. You're he... oh..." (two dialogues in one paragraph, they need to be separated)
Comment Written 08-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jul-2022
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Just a fallen out line. lol Much appreciated. G
