The Maelstrom
In chaos lies the truth we cannot speak40 total reviews
Comment from Alyssa Wilson
This writing is excellent. I admire your vocabulary and I am always grateful when I read a piece that helps me build mine. I truly feel underqualified to critic this writing in any way, but I wanted to review it to share how much I thoroughly enjoyed your work. I loved the expression of "that only those familiar with the pain decode the desperation in our verse." Because truly, sometimes it feels like only those who have shared experiences truly understand our work. Amazing work, thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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This writing is excellent. I admire your vocabulary and I am always grateful when I read a piece that helps me build mine. I truly feel underqualified to critic this writing in any way, but I wanted to review it to share how much I thoroughly enjoyed your work. I loved the expression of "that only those familiar with the pain decode the desperation in our verse." Because truly, sometimes it feels like only those who have shared experiences truly understand our work. Amazing work, thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Alyssa :-). This one cuts to the heart of how I feel about creativity and the urge to write and express. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it.
Mike
Comment from C.A.Currie
You spoke the truth with this one! Very nicely done! I love these lines: 'Although the maelstrom isn't what we seek,
in chaos lies the truth we cannot speak.'
Where did you find that picture? It is awesome!
Thanks for sharing!
Hugs and sunshine from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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You spoke the truth with this one! Very nicely done! I love these lines: 'Although the maelstrom isn't what we seek,
in chaos lies the truth we cannot speak.'
Where did you find that picture? It is awesome!
Thanks for sharing!
Hugs and sunshine from my heart to yours
~ Christine ~
Comment Written 06-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Christine :-). I think that one was from Deposit photos. You have to pay for them, but you do get some good stuff. I'm so glad you liked my poem!
Mike
Comment from RaynaHarleenQuinns
The words were delicious, and I love what I read just know.
Especially the last two lines and the picture reminded me of a hitchcock movie. A very good one indeed
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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The words were delicious, and I love what I read just know.
Especially the last two lines and the picture reminded me of a hitchcock movie. A very good one indeed
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it :-)
Mike
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
"But steam escapes when ink-based vents permit" - in the chaos that we face daily, some internal and some external, our writing can help us to make sense of what we hear and see and feel. It allows us to "walk in sun" again.
Your image goes well with this wonderful poem of coping in chaos. I had to read it twice, but I enjoyed it.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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"But steam escapes when ink-based vents permit" - in the chaos that we face daily, some internal and some external, our writing can help us to make sense of what we hear and see and feel. It allows us to "walk in sun" again.
Your image goes well with this wonderful poem of coping in chaos. I had to read it twice, but I enjoyed it.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Pam. I'm really happy you liked this one :-)
Mike
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
I loved reading this! I, too, use writing as an escape route, a pressure vent valve. It helps, but we still must do the work, confront the maelstrom and chaos, as you so nicely put it. But the first stanza is what really speaks to me. I am a tea connoisseur, and your metaphor is so apt and kind of profound! Great poem. It looks like you don't need it, but I am giving you a 6 star rating for this because it moved me. Awesome!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I loved reading this! I, too, use writing as an escape route, a pressure vent valve. It helps, but we still must do the work, confront the maelstrom and chaos, as you so nicely put it. But the first stanza is what really speaks to me. I am a tea connoisseur, and your metaphor is so apt and kind of profound! Great poem. It looks like you don't need it, but I am giving you a 6 star rating for this because it moved me. Awesome!
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you so much, Donna :-). I got a bit of stick over 'tisane' but I thought it was a pretty normal word. As for sixers, my fragile ego always needs them! Most importantly, I'm really happy you liked and could relate to it. This one was very personal, so it's good when that rings true for others.
Mike
Comment from Janet Foor
I enjoyed reading your poem. Since my mind has been chaos lately, it all seemed to make sense to me.
Great artwork to add to the message.
Well done.
blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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I enjoyed reading your poem. Since my mind has been chaos lately, it all seemed to make sense to me.
Great artwork to add to the message.
Well done.
blessings
Janet
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Janet - so glad you liked it :-)
Mike
Comment from Paul McFarland
That's a good one, Mike. Nice sonnet. "a supermodel driving beauty's hearse" is a great line. Nice finishing couplet - especially the repeated first line.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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That's a good one, Mike. Nice sonnet. "a supermodel driving beauty's hearse" is a great line. Nice finishing couplet - especially the repeated first line.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you :-). I 'felt' this one so I'm really glad you liked it!
Mike
Comment from Scott Rhodie
Really like this and talks of what may be inside us all physically and emotionally. Love the picture that goes with it. Poetry to make you think is what you want. Well done.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Really like this and talks of what may be inside us all physically and emotionally. Love the picture that goes with it. Poetry to make you think is what you want. Well done.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Scott :-). It definitely feels true much of the time, but that's what artistic expressing is all about.
Mike
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No problem
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your poem gave readers much to think about in their own
lives while the world spins in chaos with things writers can't
control, s/he can write about it after sorting through their
minds to find the truth and a way to share it with others.
Your lines were smooth, the rhymes worked well, and the
message is there if one stops to ponder what is written, Mike.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Your poem gave readers much to think about in their own
lives while the world spins in chaos with things writers can't
control, s/he can write about it after sorting through their
minds to find the truth and a way to share it with others.
Your lines were smooth, the rhymes worked well, and the
message is there if one stops to ponder what is written, Mike.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Jan :-). I think, as writer, ordering the chaos is a big part of what we do.
Mike
Comment from jake cosmos aller
well done poem about insanity, chaos, inner thoughts, nightmares, dreams and hopes and fears all rolled up together in a traditional sonnet form. loved it.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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well done poem about insanity, chaos, inner thoughts, nightmares, dreams and hopes and fears all rolled up together in a traditional sonnet form. loved it.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Jake :-). There's order in there somewhere if we write enough poems!
Mike