Drought
Summer storm.3 total reviews
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
An excellent composed 2-4-6-8. I planted grass late this spring and pray weekly for rain and even thunderstorms; makes no difference to me how the water comes.
Well chosen, strong adjectives and verb.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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An excellent composed 2-4-6-8. I planted grass late this spring and pray weekly for rain and even thunderstorms; makes no difference to me how the water comes.
Well chosen, strong adjectives and verb.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2022
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My grass is brown and I also pray for rain. Thanks for the review.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Bill Schott
This 2-4-6-8 poem, Drought, has the right setup and enters with the grim scene of the withering land, oppressed by heat, then saved by the life-giving rain. Nice.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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This 2-4-6-8 poem, Drought, has the right setup and enters with the grim scene of the withering land, oppressed by heat, then saved by the life-giving rain. Nice.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thanks for the comments.
Comment from Michele Harber
You made good use of the 2-4-6-8 syllable count, and managed to fit quite a bit of information and description into just 20 syllables. By describing the vegetation as "thirsty," "brown" and "limp," you actually made the reader feel for the grass and plants, and root for the storm and rejuvenation to arrive. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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You made good use of the 2-4-6-8 syllable count, and managed to fit quite a bit of information and description into just 20 syllables. By describing the vegetation as "thirsty," "brown" and "limp," you actually made the reader feel for the grass and plants, and root for the storm and rejuvenation to arrive. Nicely done.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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I appreciate your review.
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😀
