Aww, Damn!
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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Brilliant! I love this one and can understand how you won the contest! It was a typical banter, and I could really see this taking place. Totally loved the ending!! LOL! Well done and congratulations. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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Brilliant! I love this one and can understand how you won the contest! It was a typical banter, and I could really see this taking place. Totally loved the ending!! LOL! Well done and congratulations. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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thank you, Sandra!
Those are lovely things to say, and they are much appreciated!
Katharine
Comment from Jay Squires
Wow, Katherine -- how the heck did I miss this! You are the new mistress of dialogue -- the best of the best if we had a degenerdized term. This was dialogue at its best, and it's no freaking wonder it won the contest! Congratulations, my dear!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Wow, Katherine -- how the heck did I miss this! You are the new mistress of dialogue -- the best of the best if we had a degenerdized term. This was dialogue at its best, and it's no freaking wonder it won the contest! Congratulations, my dear!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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and you're a sweetie for saying so! thank you and for the "loverly" 6!!
especially coming from you.
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Katharine,
I enjoyed your "dialogue only" story. Not easy to pull off, but I see you won the contest... Congratulations!
Many people have neighbors that borrow things, break things, and basically have no idea how to keep their property in order.
But I have to admit, it was a bit difficult to keep the characters separate. I am thinking you have "Jim" as the same man... the sufficient neighbor as well as the idiot.
"Hey, Jim, can I borra your lawnmower?" ... Here, Jim is the sufficient one. The "idiot" wants to borrow his lawnmower.
"That idiot! Hey, Jim! You're killing your grass with kerosene?" ... Here, Jim is the "idiot", spreading kerosene on the grass and lighting it so he doesn't need a lawnmower.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Hi Katharine,
I enjoyed your "dialogue only" story. Not easy to pull off, but I see you won the contest... Congratulations!
Many people have neighbors that borrow things, break things, and basically have no idea how to keep their property in order.
But I have to admit, it was a bit difficult to keep the characters separate. I am thinking you have "Jim" as the same man... the sufficient neighbor as well as the idiot.
"Hey, Jim, can I borra your lawnmower?" ... Here, Jim is the sufficient one. The "idiot" wants to borrow his lawnmower.
"That idiot! Hey, Jim! You're killing your grass with kerosene?" ... Here, Jim is the "idiot", spreading kerosene on the grass and lighting it so he doesn't need a lawnmower.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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I added a space between the speakers.
thanks for reading and for your comments.
Katharine
Comment from Tyletta Staton
That was too funny. I read it to my husband and he laughed too. We live in the South, so I read it with a country drawl. I don't know if you meant your characters to sound that way, but it felt good to read it like that. You could almost make it into a comic strip or something.
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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That was too funny. I read it to my husband and he laughed too. We live in the South, so I read it with a country drawl. I don't know if you meant your characters to sound that way, but it felt good to read it like that. You could almost make it into a comic strip or something.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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I am originally from Ga. And now, TX, so you bet - Southern accent can only improve things! :)
Thank you so much for the 6!!!
Katharine
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
Well, I can see how this won the competition. It's really well put together. It's also funny, which isn't easy to write.
Sad thing is, I know folk just like this! lol
Great job
G
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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Hi there,
Well, I can see how this won the competition. It's really well put together. It's also funny, which isn't easy to write.
Sad thing is, I know folk just like this! lol
Great job
G
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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well don't lend them anything. :)
Thanks for your very nice comments!
Katharine
Comment from Fleedleflump
lol, I thought I'd check out the winner of this contest and glad I did - what a great fun bit of neighbourly tomfoolery! I love that het gets what he wants in the end, by playing off the other's fears and assumptions.
Mike
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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lol, I thought I'd check out the winner of this contest and glad I did - what a great fun bit of neighbourly tomfoolery! I love that het gets what he wants in the end, by playing off the other's fears and assumptions.
Mike
Comment Written 30-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2022
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thanks, Mike. I'm glad you liked it.
I think "the other's fears and assumptions" are because of past experience with the guy, but, he got tricked once again.
Katharine
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
LOL! What a great, funny dialogue story. It was a great build-up from one simple question about borrowing a lawnmower. I liked the pacing and the twists and turns of the dialogue. The visual was good too. I watched that show. Good luck in the contest. You have a good entry.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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LOL! What a great, funny dialogue story. It was a great build-up from one simple question about borrowing a lawnmower. I liked the pacing and the twists and turns of the dialogue. The visual was good too. I watched that show. Good luck in the contest. You have a good entry.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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thanks, Sandra. Your comments are much appreciated.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Ashley Redman
That was an Interesting read.I laughed, mowing gravel? Sounds like a difficult person. Wonderful descriptive and creating the story. Excellent job. Keep it up.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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That was an Interesting read.I laughed, mowing gravel? Sounds like a difficult person. Wonderful descriptive and creating the story. Excellent job. Keep it up.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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thank you
Comment from Alyssa Weisbrod
This piece did a good job of telling a story with only dialogue. While reading it, I found that it was easy to picture the classic image of two neighbors chatting over their shared fence.
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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This piece did a good job of telling a story with only dialogue. While reading it, I found that it was easy to picture the classic image of two neighbors chatting over their shared fence.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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thank you
Comment from MissMerri
This is a very funny and cute story, cleverly written so that it is always easy to tell who is speaking. My only suggestion would be to put spaces between each new paragraph. It will look better and be even easier to read. I found no typos at all, so congratulations for good editing. Well done and a sure vote-magnet in this contest, I'm thinking. MM
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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This is a very funny and cute story, cleverly written so that it is always easy to tell who is speaking. My only suggestion would be to put spaces between each new paragraph. It will look better and be even easier to read. I found no typos at all, so congratulations for good editing. Well done and a sure vote-magnet in this contest, I'm thinking. MM
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2022
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thank you, ma'am. I'm afraid to change it while the committee is doing whatever they're doing, but it's a good suggestion. Maybe I'll try, anyway. thanks
