Sweeping the Walls
a rhymed poem56 total reviews
Comment from Michele Harber
I started out feeling like this was a sad poem about futility, then I kept on reading and realized it was a happy poem about accepting your circumstance, finding fun where you can, and being grateful for what you have. I hope I'm interpreting this properly, because it made me feel good, and hopeful and grateful. Whether or not that's what you meant to put into it, it's certainly what I got out of it.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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I started out feeling like this was a sad poem about futility, then I kept on reading and realized it was a happy poem about accepting your circumstance, finding fun where you can, and being grateful for what you have. I hope I'm interpreting this properly, because it made me feel good, and hopeful and grateful. Whether or not that's what you meant to put into it, it's certainly what I got out of it.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2022
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2022
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You got it right! Many people had interpretations, and it was fun to read them all. I would have to go with yours is what I was hoping folks would feel. It is a feel-good poem of sorts.
Thanks for the encouraging review.
Jesse
Comment from Janet Foor
Sweeping the Walls is a delightful poem. Almost whimsical as we contemplate a person without a care. How nice or would be to have no worries or cares.
Good work Jesse
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Sweeping the Walls is a delightful poem. Almost whimsical as we contemplate a person without a care. How nice or would be to have no worries or cares.
Good work Jesse
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you, Janet, for your kind comments. Yes, it would be nice to have no cares or worries.
Jesse
Comment from Terry Broxson
Jesse, a very nice rhyming poem. It is short and sweet, it could have been longer, but you made your point in a few words, and that is the work of a poet at his best! Good Job. Terry.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Jesse, a very nice rhyming poem. It is short and sweet, it could have been longer, but you made your point in a few words, and that is the work of a poet at his best! Good Job. Terry.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thank you for the kind words, Terry.
Jesse
Comment from jessizero
Congratulations on having your work Recognized and All Time Best. It was a great poem. I liked your rhyme scheme! Thank you for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Congratulations on having your work Recognized and All Time Best. It was a great poem. I liked your rhyme scheme! Thank you for sharing this, and best wishes to you.
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2022
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Thanks, Jessi, for your thoughtful review.
Jesse
Comment from godlucifer
life is made of dreams,visions,and carefree. ones life is ones dream and ones visions is ones carefree. your poem was written with a gifted talent. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
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life is made of dreams,visions,and carefree. ones life is ones dream and ones visions is ones carefree. your poem was written with a gifted talent. thanks for the read.
truly
godlucifer
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
I don't know if I've ever heard of anyone sweeping walls. I've washed walls many times, but never swept them. Maybe it's a figure of speech that I'm not familiar with. I enjoyed your poem. It flowed nicely, rhymed well, and tells a whole story. Great job!
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I don't know if I've ever heard of anyone sweeping walls. I've washed walls many times, but never swept them. Maybe it's a figure of speech that I'm not familiar with. I enjoyed your poem. It flowed nicely, rhymed well, and tells a whole story. Great job!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
Comment from John Ciarmello
I enjoyed "Sweeping the walls" It's an interesting take on a person who doesn't care much about anything at all, including sweeping the walls. A metophoric slant, I'm presuming. Loved it! Best, JohnC
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I enjoyed "Sweeping the walls" It's an interesting take on a person who doesn't care much about anything at all, including sweeping the walls. A metophoric slant, I'm presuming. Loved it! Best, JohnC
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I firstly thought this was going to be a playful poem, or even glib, but found as it progressed in that is has some wonderful deep meanings, particularly in what I consider a relatively short poem (I often write overlong poems I am told hehe). However, this people is rich in depth and imagery and towards the end it wrapped up nicely and beautifully into a neat little bundle, a really wonderful write and very profound. Very well done! Kindest regards and warmest wishes Meia xx
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I firstly thought this was going to be a playful poem, or even glib, but found as it progressed in that is has some wonderful deep meanings, particularly in what I consider a relatively short poem (I often write overlong poems I am told hehe). However, this people is rich in depth and imagery and towards the end it wrapped up nicely and beautifully into a neat little bundle, a really wonderful write and very profound. Very well done! Kindest regards and warmest wishes Meia xx
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
Comment from the13thpoet
Hello Jesse James a good day to you sir. I hope all is well with you and yours. As a big rhymer myself of course I loved them, I also liked the format and simplicity you went with. Short and sweet, Good job!
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Hello Jesse James a good day to you sir. I hope all is well with you and yours. As a big rhymer myself of course I loved them, I also liked the format and simplicity you went with. Short and sweet, Good job!
Comment Written 29-Jun-2022
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
The kids of today seem to feel their parents or grandparents owe them a living. They take advantage of them. Or whoever takes them in their home. I went through this for some time until I felt used. It is a shame. Thank you for sharing. Have a great evening.
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The kids of today seem to feel their parents or grandparents owe them a living. They take advantage of them. Or whoever takes them in their home. I went through this for some time until I felt used. It is a shame. Thank you for sharing. Have a great evening.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2022
