Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I ran out of sixes on the first day!! This is a wonderful poem about a man's 'love affair' with his computer. The awful thing is, it truly is happening! I hate being away from my laptop, but I think I would survive ... just! You're author's notes about what Zuckerberg wants to create, I can see him doing it, too! This was really entertaining to read, and a bit scary! Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 27-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your support of this dark humored little piece about our relationship with technology. I like to make people think...estory

Comment from Jasmine Girl

Excellent

Haha. We are getting there. I don't like metaverse. I still like real things and travel to real places. Even though I have many friends in Fanstory, you are one of my virtual friends, I still think someday we should all meet. I might visit Helen when I'm in Seattle. I'm not sure when I will be in NC.

It's not healthy. But we are going there. According to Elon Musk, we might already living in the simulated world.

Well done.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

Thanks for your excellent review and your support and perspective on this little dark humored piece. About the only thing I really like about technology is being able to share creative writing with like minded people on Fanstory. estory

Comment from Ulla

Excellent

Yes, estory, I could identify with this. I suppose many have become like this and I was almost the same. I now have a brand new computer and I hardly use it.I lived your poem. Ulla:)))

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and your perspective on the poem. We have to keep our distance from these machines. We have to keep them in perspective. estory

Comment from mermaids

Excellent

Your poem emphasizes how technology plays too much of a part in our lives. The metaverse is not appealing to me, we need to get back out in nature. Your poem shows how bonded some are to their computer.

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

Thanks so much for the excellent review and i am glad you identified with the concepts I was trying to get across. back to the simple life I say too. estory

Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Excellent

Author,
You make such an excellent point. People have lost the art of socializing, due in part, with our obsession of a cold machine that keeps people apart.
Great work.
Good luck in the contest,
Blessings,
Cindy

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and your support of the premise behind the poem here estory

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

It is certainly a different world, and the love for one's computer can certainly develop into an obsession, and when this becomes widespread and impacts human relationships, the outcome is disastrous. Well written.
Wendy
Typo:"inseparable" (last line)

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and the support for the premise behind the poem here estory

Comment from tfawcus

Exceptional

A splendidly constructed poem with some ingenious half-rhymes in the second and fourth lines of each verse. These darned machines sometimes do seem to get more attention than our human loved ones. I once wrote a poem on much the same lines about the mobile phone.
Just one nit in the last line - inseperable/inseparable

 Comment Written 26-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

Thanks again for the sixer and all the support for my work over all the years...estory

Comment from Gloria ....

Excellent

Man's relationship with his/her tech is a strange on indeed. You have captured the obsession, and the cool and non-human emotionless "universe" on the other side.

I think Zuckerberg's Metaverse is a huge disaster waiting to happen, especially when no one is guarding the coop.

A most enjoyable read today. :))

Gloria

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and for your support for the premise I laid out here. We have to keep these machines in perspective. estory

Comment from Irish Rain

Excellent

Oh wow.
I know people who are actually like this.
Lonely and sad, but they refuse to see the
truth of why.
Machines are a poor substitute for humans.
I'm reading a book right now called 'The
Passengers'...about self-driving cars.
Quite frightening.
Wonderful post, perhaps someone will recognize
themselves, and break free.
Blessings...

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

Thanks so much for the excellent review and for your support of this piece. I want to go back to the simple, in person life. estory

reply by Irish Rain on 27-Jun-2022

It's SOOOO much easier! And happier I think. Have a nice SIMPLE week!!!

Comment from dellsworthpoet

Excellent

A strange enigma, or is it. It just follows cars, stereos, other toys.

The poem flows well. The images are clear. The progression and conclusion fit well. The language is clear and touched with irony.

Thanks for a good read.

 Comment Written 25-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 27-Jun-2022

Thanks for the excellent review and I am glad the poem made so many people think about how technology shapes their life. estory

reply by dellsworthpoet on 27-Jun-2022

You are welcome.