Follow-up to First Date, Scene 3
The beginning of a romance20 total reviews
Comment from dmt1967
This is another good act. I usually like action stuff but your script is keeping me entertained. Thank you for sharing and have a great day. This script kept my attention.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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This is another good act. I usually like action stuff but your script is keeping me entertained. Thank you for sharing and have a great day. This script kept my attention.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you much for another great review. I know there isn't a lot of action and that is because it isn't really fiction. I thought it would be easier to tell the story if I use my own first date and I can't seem to keep from telling it like it really happened. Maybe one day I'll learn to write fiction. LOL
Beth
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
What a charming, beautiful story, Beth, and it reminds us what life was like for kids back in those days. We weren't nearly as forward as they are today. We really knew nothing. I enjoyed reading this, it was lighthearted, and so believable. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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What a charming, beautiful story, Beth, and it reminds us what life was like for kids back in those days. We weren't nearly as forward as they are today. We really knew nothing. I enjoyed reading this, it was lighthearted, and so believable. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much Sandra. I'm so pleased that you read all three of them. I started meaning to write only the first, but people kept telling me they wanted more and I needed more scripts to get recognized.
Beth
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You have done an excellent job with this script, I wouldn't know where to start. I'm glad you're now a ranked script writer. :)) xx
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This script in continuation , this scene 3 follows up to first date, states the dramatic scene about beginning of romance in between 17 year old high school senior girl and young man of early twenties, they are going to enjoy the movie; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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This script in continuation , this scene 3 follows up to first date, states the dramatic scene about beginning of romance in between 17 year old high school senior girl and young man of early twenties, they are going to enjoy the movie; well said, well done, post god speed more, share post not 4 self-joy-pride but 4 God and readers worldwide Alcreator Litt Dear (DR)
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for following this script so faithfully. I really appreciate it.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
I'll have to chase down the prior scenes. This script is charming--dialog is spot-on--masterful setting of scene and tantalizing ending will make for a good show!
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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I'll have to chase down the prior scenes. This script is charming--dialog is spot-on--masterful setting of scene and tantalizing ending will make for a good show!
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you Liz, I'm not good a fiction writing. I was just going to do one script for the contest so I based it on my own first date. People have kept pushing me to continue it and if I make it really interesting I'll have to write fiction. I hope you will review Scene 2 because I only have 14 and it is still paying for a few more hours.
Beth
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By the time I got to it, you already had the ribbon!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I have read all three scenes of this date series. They are interesting, but perhaps a trifle static for dates. I would have expected young people to like more action, even as long ago as the 50's, we certainly did in Europe. Betsy seems to have led a very sheltered life (never been to a drive-in). Will she really be able to hold the interest of a well-travelled 26-year old. I think you could have made more of the differences that separate them. Kate xx
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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I have read all three scenes of this date series. They are interesting, but perhaps a trifle static for dates. I would have expected young people to like more action, even as long ago as the 50's, we certainly did in Europe. Betsy seems to have led a very sheltered life (never been to a drive-in). Will she really be able to hold the interest of a well-travelled 26-year old. I think you could have made more of the differences that separate them. Kate xx
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you Kate, I've listed this as fiction but the only thing fiction is the name changes. It is my life. I'm not really a fiction writer. I had led a sheltered life. I held his interest and married him a year later. We were together for a wonderful 61 years. He died 4 years ago.
Beth
Comment from Spitfire
Since Matt is much older than Betsy, I'm thinking you are modeling him after your late husband. If he is obviously much older, I think Lucy should react! You need to redirect this to add a big conflict.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Since Matt is much older than Betsy, I'm thinking you are modeling him after your late husband. If he is obviously much older, I think Lucy should react! You need to redirect this to add a big conflict.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank for the review. Did you mean to give me just four stars? It is my own first date story just the way it happened. I'm not good at writing fiction. LOL
Beth
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Interesting then that your mother did not react to the age difference. For me, anything in the way of a script needs conflict-- hence the four stars. I read the requirements of The First Date and I guess that isn't the case for this post so I'll change the rating.
Affectionately,
Shari
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No problem, I thought it might have been accident.
My mother's father was twenty years older than her mother and my dad's father was 10 years older than his mother. Dad was five years older that mother. Even was nine year older than me, but my girls have all been older that their mates. You're older than your guy. LOL
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I sure am. But my husband was 4 and a half years older than me.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
i'm enjoying your scripts about your first date,
Beth. You write in the script genre well. I like
the dialogue that tells the story.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
What about your dad.(?) Is he here?
I'm reasonly sure he's not (reasonably_
Have you had supper.(?)
she)she's)got to feed everybody who walks though that door.
Why don't you move over a little closer.(?)
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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i'm enjoying your scripts about your first date,
Beth. You write in the script genre well. I like
the dialogue that tells the story.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
What about your dad.(?) Is he here?
I'm reasonly sure he's not (reasonably_
Have you had supper.(?)
she)she's)got to feed everybody who walks though that door.
Why don't you move over a little closer.(?)
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thank Jan, I'm so glad you enjoyed this. I appreciate you saying I write scrips well. It is something I've not really wanted to do, but it is nice to know that I can. Thank you for pointing out things I've missed.
Beth
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Comment from Ulla
Oh, Beth, Betsy is now on her first date and I do hope he will treat her kindly. I'm sure his father would have a fit if he knew. I can't wait to be reading on.
Twenty miles to get her = here
Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Oh, Beth, Betsy is now on her first date and I do hope he will treat her kindly. I'm sure his father would have a fit if he knew. I can't wait to be reading on.
Twenty miles to get her = here
Ulla:)))
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thank you Ulla. I appreciate your interest in this script.
Beth
Comment from Ric Myworld
Uh, oh, I sense trouble coming. Young boys' minds have a tendency to drift off into to area where maybe they shouldn't with everyone. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Uh, oh, I sense trouble coming. Young boys' minds have a tendency to drift off into to area where maybe they shouldn't with everyone. LOL. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thank you Ric, This isn't a young boy. He a man of 26 which does me he's incapable of letting his mind drift into areas where it shouldn't go. I hadn't planned to go further with this story, but we'll see. I have to tell you, it is basically about me, with the names changed. The guy is a good guy in spite of his age. We will marry in another year and have a good life, until his death four years ago. So now, I've spoiled the ending. LOL. I'm not script writer and apparently not a fiction writer either. I have to know my characters, and how better to know them than to be one of them.
Beth
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Yes, Beth, I knew he was in his twenties, but according to science, humans don't actually start nearing maturity until at least the age of 27. Fact: well, according to science. LOL. Yes, from everything I've read from you, you found one of those few good men. I'm happy you all had a great life together, and sorry for your loss of him going on before you. Thankfully, the good Lord says that we will know each other in Heaven as we are here on earth. So, the good times are coming for you all again. It's always a pleasure to read your posts!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Hah! Your helpful hint about the length of the piece doesn't appear until after finishing reading. lol
Nice story going on. Realistic dialogue.
Good work.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Hah! Your helpful hint about the length of the piece doesn't appear until after finishing reading. lol
Nice story going on. Realistic dialogue.
Good work.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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I'm sorry about that. I didn't know how to put it up front. You read it anyway so thank you. I'm pleased you liked it.
Beth
