Basic Human Need
Bonding with those of like mind gives life meaning.17 total reviews
Comment from Theodore McDowell
a very nice poem for the contest emphasizes the important bond of friendship and community, which often serves as a lifeline of support and guidance. Very nice, Beth.
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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a very nice poem for the contest emphasizes the important bond of friendship and community, which often serves as a lifeline of support and guidance. Very nice, Beth.
Comment Written 26-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 26-Jun-2022
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Thank you Ted, I really appreciate the review. I don't usually write short poems and I don't know if I ever did a cinquain before, so If I did it correctly, I'm pleased.
Beth
Comment from June Sargent
You are so right! There is strength in a bond formed between those who have similar interests and values. Loyalty and respect are qualities that are rare these days. If we have friends that possess these traits - hold onto them! They are a lifeline in times of need.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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You are so right! There is strength in a bond formed between those who have similar interests and values. Loyalty and respect are qualities that are rare these days. If we have friends that possess these traits - hold onto them! They are a lifeline in times of need.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thank you June. I really appreciate your review and excellent comments.
Beth
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are lovely, meaningful, descriptive, and creative. I
agree with this author's message of this poem. Like minded people
are so important in my life. The poem flows and connects well. The
artwork goes well with the words and theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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The author's words are lovely, meaningful, descriptive, and creative. I
agree with this author's message of this poem. Like minded people
are so important in my life. The poem flows and connects well. The
artwork goes well with the words and theme of this poem.
Comment Written 25-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 25-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for this review. I really appreciate it.
Beth
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I agree 100% with this premise. Shared ideals and visions help bond people together. I love the title and the line above it. Both of them drew me in to read this Cinquain. This is a thoughtful and effective use of a limited amount of words and syllables.
Thanks for sharing this prophetic poem.
Jesse
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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I agree 100% with this premise. Shared ideals and visions help bond people together. I love the title and the line above it. Both of them drew me in to read this Cinquain. This is a thoughtful and effective use of a limited amount of words and syllables.
Thanks for sharing this prophetic poem.
Jesse
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thank you Jesse. I really appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Raul1
This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning a contest. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. It is clear and concise. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It has a very good chance of winning a contest. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. It is clear and concise. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I really enjoyed your endearing words here as human beings need all these things in life to live well and make a success of life, A poignant write Beth, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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I really enjoyed your endearing words here as human beings need all these things in life to live well and make a success of life, A poignant write Beth, love Dolly x
Comment Written 24-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much Dolly. I really appreciate the review and especially your five stars. Those always make my day go better.
Beth
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image and presentation, Beth.
-A good topic and description of friendship.
-Loyalty and support are important, as well
as being unbiased.
-A good concluding line.
-Just a note about syllables and the note.
I don't think the committee takes notes into consideration.
Syllables follow rules. You have 10 syllables in the 8 syllable line.
If you want to change anything, rhymezone.com is a great place for synonyms.
mu-tu-al
i-de-als
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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-Nice image and presentation, Beth.
-A good topic and description of friendship.
-Loyalty and support are important, as well
as being unbiased.
-A good concluding line.
-Just a note about syllables and the note.
I don't think the committee takes notes into consideration.
Syllables follow rules. You have 10 syllables in the 8 syllable line.
If you want to change anything, rhymezone.com is a great place for synonyms.
mu-tu-al
i-de-als
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 24-Jun-2022
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Thank you Pam. I really appreciate the review and heads up with the syllables. I changed them.
Beth
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You are very welcome. I am glad it was appreciated.
Comment from royowen
I think we all have a need to be accepted, to be received, and to be a useful member of the the society we live in, this is perceptive, and sensitive, I don't think there's anyone more so than you Beth, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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I think we all have a need to be accepted, to be received, and to be a useful member of the the society we live in, this is perceptive, and sensitive, I don't think there's anyone more so than you Beth, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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Roy, Thank you for a great review. I always appreciate you approval and comments.
Beth
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Most welcome Beth
Comment from lyenochka
Absolutely agree and I think each of the first four lines describes a loving relationship which is a "lifeline" for every human being. Great job with your cinquain. Best wishes in the contest.
You might want to add a note that you pronounce "mutual" as two syllables and not three as some might pronounce it.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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Absolutely agree and I think each of the first four lines describes a loving relationship which is a "lifeline" for every human being. Great job with your cinquain. Best wishes in the contest.
You might want to add a note that you pronounce "mutual" as two syllables and not three as some might pronounce it.
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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Thank you for a great review. I guess my southern accent makes me pronounce mutual with two syllables. I will make a note of for those who speak more correctly.
Beth
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No one can speak more "correctly." Everyone's own accent is correct. 😊💖
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I'm not sure about that. Southerners are bad about totally mispronouncing words.
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By the way, did you post Scene 3 of your screenplay yet? I thought I saw it.
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I was working on it and it wasn't finished but it accidently got out. I wait till tomorrow to post it. People probably won't be notified.
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Well, you could copy it to another script with a new name and delete the other one, especially if you didn't get reviews on the prematurely posted one.
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This is a good idea. Thank you.
Comment from Spitfire
This is so true. Friends who are not family who have to be loyal can be lifelines. Sharing ideals is important too as well as mutual respect. I'll use this as criteria to select those who profess to care about me!
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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This is so true. Friends who are not family who have to be loyal can be lifelines. Sharing ideals is important too as well as mutual respect. I'll use this as criteria to select those who profess to care about me!
Comment Written 23-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much. I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
