Help Along The Way
We're all in it together.15 total reviews
Comment from rspoet
Hello Lisa,
This is an marvelous poem with excellent rhymes
and a strong theme that is much needed in this stressful world.
We are indeed all in this together, and together we can all see a way though
when we help each other..
Well done.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
Robert
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Hello Lisa,
This is an marvelous poem with excellent rhymes
and a strong theme that is much needed in this stressful world.
We are indeed all in this together, and together we can all see a way though
when we help each other..
Well done.
Best wishes and good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
Comment from Sarah Tummey
There are lots of great lines here, but my favourite is the last. So many people nowadays say things like: "Life's what you make it", but sometimes life's just out of our control, through no fault of ours. I think it's a compassionate way of looking at depression - to see a person who's struggling because life hasn't worked out and who needs support.
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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There are lots of great lines here, but my favourite is the last. So many people nowadays say things like: "Life's what you make it", but sometimes life's just out of our control, through no fault of ours. I think it's a compassionate way of looking at depression - to see a person who's struggling because life hasn't worked out and who needs support.
Comment Written 17-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jun-2022
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Thanks for this awesome review. You made my day with such a high rating.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
This is such an excellent, expressive poem. You have vividly described the mindset of one who feels she's "going down for the third time" and needs lifting up.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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This is such an excellent, expressive poem. You have vividly described the mindset of one who feels she's "going down for the third time" and needs lifting up.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your comments. We never know what's going on in others' lives, so we should be kind to everyone.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Life can throw us a hard ball at times and some people have a hard time and we should always have some empathy for others. A well rhymed and metered writ Lisa, albeit sad, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Life can throw us a hard ball at times and some people have a hard time and we should always have some empathy for others. A well rhymed and metered writ Lisa, albeit sad, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Thanks for bestowing such a high rating on this one Dolly!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Lisa May helps along the way and says it well in this composition that the better way to rid yourself of turmoil is to be involved in service work which is so rewarding the troubled one is lifted from their mire.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Lisa May helps along the way and says it well in this composition that the better way to rid yourself of turmoil is to be involved in service work which is so rewarding the troubled one is lifted from their mire.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your comments Tom.
I help a lot with volunteering - I agree it is very rewarding, but sometimes can feel overwhelming when there is so much to do and not enough other volunteers.
Comment from nancy_e_davis
When I hear someone say unkind things about another persons behavior I wonder who gave them the right to judge? We can find many forms of pain in this world if we just listen and reach out with tenderness and understanding to behavior we don't understand. That person is probably in real pain and is reaching out for help. Well done, Lisa. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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When I hear someone say unkind things about another persons behavior I wonder who gave them the right to judge? We can find many forms of pain in this world if we just listen and reach out with tenderness and understanding to behavior we don't understand. That person is probably in real pain and is reaching out for help. Well done, Lisa. Nancy:)
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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You understood the poem exactly. Thank you for your empathy.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
You have a great story, and the picture goes hand in hand. It is like being in prison or jail. The only difference is there are doors unlocked, but you can not get the strength to walk past them. Many will relate to this one. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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You have a great story, and the picture goes hand in hand. It is like being in prison or jail. The only difference is there are doors unlocked, but you can not get the strength to walk past them. Many will relate to this one. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your comments. We never know what's going on in others' lives, so we should be kind to everyone.
Comment from robyn corum
LisaMay,
This is a brilliant piece on the horrible effects of depression. I had no idea you knew anything about it. But either you or someone near you certainly does. I'm so sorry. But you have used the most clever phrases to describe the issue! And ending by reminding folks to reach out is just right. Thank you!
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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LisaMay,
This is a brilliant piece on the horrible effects of depression. I had no idea you knew anything about it. But either you or someone near you certainly does. I'm so sorry. But you have used the most clever phrases to describe the issue! And ending by reminding folks to reach out is just right. Thank you!
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Thanks for bestowing such a high rating on this one Robyn! It cheered me up. Yes, I sink a bit low at times - I wouldn't call it depression, just sick of having to run my entire life and make all my decisions myself. Easier to stay in bed and read a book some days, not have a shower, not answer the phone. It's just me. I always look like I'm coping and everyone else has their own problems anyway or too busy with their families.
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Maybe we could switch lives for a day or two a week. Mine is FILLED with constant STIMULATION - kids,activity, kids, people, stuff, pregnant girl who complains constantly (she's the only person who's ever been pregnant, btw - it's a medical miracle!), on and on!) Your silence and solitude sound a bit heavenly...
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Absolutely brilliant in rhyme and message. We often are envious of the "perfect" people, not taking the time to realize that it may be a mask.
Using cliches like half full, riding high, and bats in the belfry draws your reader into the familiar. Terms they use and hear often without thought.
Here is my last six.
Best wishes,
Mary
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Absolutely brilliant in rhyme and message. We often are envious of the "perfect" people, not taking the time to realize that it may be a mask.
Using cliches like half full, riding high, and bats in the belfry draws your reader into the familiar. Terms they use and hear often without thought.
Here is my last six.
Best wishes,
Mary
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your comments. I very much appreciate the high rating. We never know what's going on in others' lives, so we should be kind to everyone.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Lisa,
This is such an awesome poem! Your rhyme is perfect, and you purposely use cliches to a positive effect. Very nice!
I am the woman you're talking about in the poem. Sometimes, anyway.
You give great advice in the last stanza. I, myself, find those who've been profoundly hurt in life make the best counselors and listeners.
Blessings and good luck.
Cindy
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Lisa,
This is such an awesome poem! Your rhyme is perfect, and you purposely use cliches to a positive effect. Very nice!
I am the woman you're talking about in the poem. Sometimes, anyway.
You give great advice in the last stanza. I, myself, find those who've been profoundly hurt in life make the best counselors and listeners.
Blessings and good luck.
Cindy
Comment Written 16-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Thanks for your comments. I truly appreciate the high rating you gave the poem.
We never know what's going on in others' lives, so we should be kind to everyone. Thank you for your empathy - I initially wrote this poem in first-person because it echoes my life sometimes, just as you picked up how you could be the person in the poem.
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You?re welcome, Lisa.
Your poetry is really great.
Cindy
