Wind Chased
An 2-8-2 poem11 total reviews
Comment from Tom Horonzy
I like the essence of the piece however how does it read to you if you traded sparrows spooked to spooked sparrows, and trade Take for fast????
As birds stop and go on the flow of the wind.
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reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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I like the essence of the piece however how does it read to you if you traded sparrows spooked to spooked sparrows, and trade Take for fast????
As birds stop and go on the flow of the wind.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 15-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jun-2022
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I truly appreciate your suggestions, Tom, and will change "fast" to "Take."
Thank you!
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and spooked sparrows? Whatever u decide is fine. Because it reads better to me doesn't mean it is necessarily.
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I left the line as is because I want the emphasis to be on the action??spooked.?
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got it
