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Heart Crafted Poems - 2022

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Musings of an old man - 2022

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Comment from jake cosmos aller
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nice haiku about a caterpillar morphing into a butterfly once they are adults. I love butterflies and the morphing of caterpillars into butterflies that occur every spring

 Comment Written 14-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
    Jake, thank you! As I was writing this, I couldn't help but ponder the thought about our human transformations from birth to death and how much we morph just like all of nature.
Comment from Mary Vigasin
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This is a marvelous and creative haiku. Your image of a Caterpillar to butterfly is planted in your reader's vision. A story in so few words.
It is perfection.
Best wishes
Mary

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
    Thank you, Mary. For me, this is nature's example of how we humans are in a state of constant transition from birth to death.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
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'Metamorphose', is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
    Thank you, life is tossing up constant reminders of how we humans are in transition from birth to death. I am grateful for busy days and peaceful nights.
Comment from harmony13
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The first two line flow and connect well. The last line says it all as the
beauty of transition happens! I enjoyed the read of these words. I love
butterflies and this poem painted a great picture! The artwork is awesome and compliments these words.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 14-Jun-2022
    Thank you, harmony13. For me, this is nature's example of how we humans are in a state of constant transition from birth to death.
Comment from jessizero
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This was a great haiku. You got the syllable count right, and you painted the picture in the reader's mind. This was a lovely poem. Thank you for sharing this here, and best wishes to you.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
    Thank you Jesse.
Comment from nomi338
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How desirable it must be, to change from the ugly duckling into a beautiful swan, the creeping caterpillar into the graceful butterfly, the unsteady fawn that becomes the graceful and sleek but stalwart darting deer.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
    Hi Nomi, thank you. For your reflection on this poem. I agree fully!
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
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This is a delightful haiku with the perfect illustration. The meaning is clear, but I could not help but think of being carried to the grave as we are attaining our wings. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
    Yes, A host of angels prepared for our first flight in utter freedom, just imagine! 🙏🙏🙏🎶🎶🎶🎶
reply by Verna Cole Mitchell on 13-Jun-2022
    Smile!
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
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This is a great poem. You have told a story in only a few words. You painted a mental image vividly. I enjoyed reading how the body changes over time. Have a great day.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
    Thanks much! I was reflecting on the parallel of humanity and how we are ever in transition from birth to death and how very much like nature we are in a state of constant morphing.
    Your six is quite humbling, thank you 🙏🙏
reply by Carolyn Dooley on 13-Jun-2022
    You are welcome.
Comment from Fleedleflump
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Metamorphosis has always fascinating ated me - nature created a perfect metaphor for coming of age or just for reaching a level of self-understanding. This is a beautiful haiku - I very much enjoyed it.

Mike

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
    metamorphose - For me this is a reminder that that as humans we are in a constant stage of morphing, from birth to death just as all of nature is also doing daily. Thanks for your validation.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
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Wow, in just a few words you have described a major transition of life. And that picture is perfect. Well done - this should do well in this contest.

 Comment Written 13-Jun-2022


reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022
    Pam, thank you! Just as our subjective humanness is in transition from birth to death, nature shows us the beauty and mystery of life.