Comment from K.L. Rockquemore

Excellent

I enjoyed this flash, as this is one of my favorite genres to read and write. They tend to read awkwardly due to the word restrictions, however this does not.
You have told a complete story in 75 words, not an easy feat, well done! Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 13-Jun-2022

Thank you for your review and the comments. I appreciate hearing that the story does not read as if it came out of a machine gun-in awkward spurts. As you said, it is not easy to do these flash stories. I Had to spend a lot of time reworking it. Your comments make me feel that the time it took was well worth it. Thank you again.

Comment from Shirley McLain

Excellent

Your son's explanation makes perfect sense and gave me a good chuckle as well. You did a great job with this Flash Fiction. Enjoy your evening. Shirley

 Comment Written 12-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Jun-2022

Thanks so much, Shirley. I appreciate the stars and comments.

My son did that jelly bean trick. He was a very selfish little guy.

I just got through reviewing one of your works. May you also enjoy your evening.

Comment from Ric Myworld

Excellent

ROFL! "Kids do the darndest things," oh, yes they do. This reminds me of when I was a little boy and my mother would give me a candy bar and tell me to split it with my little brother. I would break it in half. But of course, the two halves were never equal. So, I'd bite off the longer one to make them the same size before giving my brother his piece. Thanks for sharing.

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022

Well, you were a little stinker, weren't you? Did your brother ever catch on?

Thanks so much for the review and rating.

reply by Ric Myworld on 12-Jun-2022

My brother was four years younger, but I finally figured out it was wrong and stopped doing it. Hope you're having a great weekend!

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Haha, eeww! What a fun contest entry, Leather.
This sounded just like something a young kid
would do. You did a great job telling this little
story in the space allowed.
Best wishes in the contest, Jan

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022

Thanks, Jan, for your review, all the stars, and the comments. These flash stories are a considerable challenge for me. Glad to hear that it came out okay.

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

This short story gave me a good chuckle. That sounds like something a kid might do. The artwork you added is perfect for the subject of your wiirting. I wish you worlds of luck in the contest. Nicely done.

 Comment Written 11-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022

Thank you so much for the review, ratings, and comments. Thanks also for the good wishes.

Comment from jessizero

Excellent

This was such a sweet, funny story! I can easily imagine one of my nieces or my nephew doing this. Kids are really something. Thanks for sharing this!

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 Comment Written 11-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022

Thank you for the review and comments. Kids can be a never-ending surprise for sure.

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

Lol! I was anticipating something like that but I didn't know who the culprit would be! You used your allotment of 75 words well to set the scene, create curiosity and deliver the punchline! Best wishes in the contest!

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 Comment Written 11-Jun-2022

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reply by the author on 11-Jun-2022

Thank you, Iyenochka, for your review, comments, and good wishes. Flash fiction cuts out a lot of verbiage but still offers a major challenge. Thanks again.