The Heart Deceives
Your emotions aren't reliable.16 total reviews
Comment from C.A.Currie
I might have carried it one step further. Perhaps: Instill restraint upon your heart until the danger's passed. I was looking for the 'I' and I wasn't expecting that 'R'.
Still a great poem!
Thanks so much for sharing!
Hugs and Lollipops from my heart to yours!
~ Christine ~
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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I might have carried it one step further. Perhaps: Instill restraint upon your heart until the danger's passed. I was looking for the 'I' and I wasn't expecting that 'R'.
Still a great poem!
Thanks so much for sharing!
Hugs and Lollipops from my heart to yours!
~ Christine ~
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the review. The rules say four letter in succession and the last one is any other letter of the alphabet. I would have loved to use and "i" there but I got the impression it was against the rules.
Beth
Comment from Ric Myworld
You've said a whole lot in these few short words, and they about hit home with every one of us I'm sure. We just need to keep in control about as much as we can. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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You've said a whole lot in these few short words, and they about hit home with every one of us I'm sure. We just need to keep in control about as much as we can. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the review and comments. I'm good about handing out advice but not so good at following my own. LOL
Beth
Comment from Iza Deleanu
I like the offered advices offered in the last line:"Restrain your heart until the danger's passed" it's hard to contain our panic in front of danger:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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I like the offered advices offered in the last line:"Restrain your heart until the danger's passed" it's hard to contain our panic in front of danger:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much Iza. I appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from royowen
I just woke up from a dream, a reality that's consigned to the past, but in my working days of a younger me, worries that we're handled well, but this reminded me of grasping the realities of now, which I can live in well. Beautifully written Beth, loved the theme, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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I just woke up from a dream, a reality that's consigned to the past, but in my working days of a younger me, worries that we're handled well, but this reminded me of grasping the realities of now, which I can live in well. Beautifully written Beth, loved the theme, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thank you so much Roy. I really appreciate your reviews.
Beth
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Most welcome
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"You're emotions" should be Your emotions.
Suggest making "Feeling" Feelings since you used "Emotions".
Good ABC poem.
First line draws readers in with a this is going to be good opening.
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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"You're emotions" should be Your emotions.
Suggest making "Feeling" Feelings since you used "Emotions".
Good ABC poem.
First line draws readers in with a this is going to be good opening.
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Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the review and for pointing out the corrections.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
This is very wise advice. It's like that passage in Jeremiah that warns us about the deceitfulness of the human heart. We do need the Spirit to guide and control our emotions! Best wishes in the contest!
You're emotions aren't reliable. (Your)
Feeling seldom reflect reality. (Feelings)
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reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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This is very wise advice. It's like that passage in Jeremiah that warns us about the deceitfulness of the human heart. We do need the Spirit to guide and control our emotions! Best wishes in the contest!
You're emotions aren't reliable. (Your)
Feeling seldom reflect reality. (Feelings)
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Comment Written 09-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2022
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Thank you for the review of my poem. I appreciate you noticing the two errors.
Beth
