Daybreak
Ode to Autumn12 total reviews
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your words plus art paint a great nature picture, Zanya.
I enjoyed reading your poem. There's smooth flow and
you created great imagery for readers. Great job with the
syllable count per line, too.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Your words plus art paint a great nature picture, Zanya.
I enjoyed reading your poem. There's smooth flow and
you created great imagery for readers. Great job with the
syllable count per line, too.
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 06-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thanks for reading and reviewing zanya
Comment from jessizero
This is a work of beauty, although the picture makes me nervous (spider...). You did a good job with your Ode to Autumn. Thanks for sharing it here. Best wishes.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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This is a work of beauty, although the picture makes me nervous (spider...). You did a good job with your Ode to Autumn. Thanks for sharing it here. Best wishes.
Comment Written 05-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Great review zanya
Comment from harmony13
The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last
line put the poem all together. I remember those chilling
autumn mornings when I loved in New York. The artwork is
awesome and compliments the words and theme of this poem.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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The first two lines of this poem flow and connect well. The last
line put the poem all together. I remember those chilling
autumn mornings when I loved in New York. The artwork is
awesome and compliments the words and theme of this poem.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Thanks for a superb review zanya
Comment from E. Denison
Really great work here, mystery writer. Knowing full well that you will likely get a bit of avoidance from the arachnophobes on this site, I will speak for them that if they could look at the image you've provided, they would find some really beautiful work here. First, the sun hitting dew drops on a web is one of the most beautiful sites of fall. I love this notion that the web, itself, is quivering, whether from the spider or from the drops hitting the intricate weaving. Second, chill or crisp autumn mornings are so refreshing, and I think you really captured that essence in this brief work. Thank you for sharing. Best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Really great work here, mystery writer. Knowing full well that you will likely get a bit of avoidance from the arachnophobes on this site, I will speak for them that if they could look at the image you've provided, they would find some really beautiful work here. First, the sun hitting dew drops on a web is one of the most beautiful sites of fall. I love this notion that the web, itself, is quivering, whether from the spider or from the drops hitting the intricate weaving. Second, chill or crisp autumn mornings are so refreshing, and I think you really captured that essence in this brief work. Thank you for sharing. Best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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A superb review zanya
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
One wouldn't think of a spider's web as a sign of autumn, but you are right. On those cold autumn mornings, if one is lucky enough to see a spider's web, it will "quiver."
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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One wouldn't think of a spider's web as a sign of autumn, but you are right. On those cold autumn mornings, if one is lucky enough to see a spider's web, it will "quiver."
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 06-Jun-2022
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Great reveiw zanya
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Lines one and two are sublime. Line three doesn't do it for me even though it has five syllables. idk/ We all write differently. The loci is fine but perhaps something like "chilly autumn morns flows fluidly. Good luck.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Lines one and two are sublime. Line three doesn't do it for me even though it has five syllables. idk/ We all write differently. The loci is fine but perhaps something like "chilly autumn morns flows fluidly. Good luck.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Thanks for reading & sharing zanya
Comment from jaded831
Your poem is unique, it was a pleasant change from the usual autumn poem. I really enjoyed the read. The picture compliments your poem. Together they make a wonderful presentation. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Your poem is unique, it was a pleasant change from the usual autumn poem. I really enjoyed the read. The picture compliments your poem. Together they make a wonderful presentation. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Great reveiw zanya
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet, you have your first vote.
Autumn is my favourite season , I love the vivid hues . All entries ( except three ) praised this aspect.
Your entry was creative , original and stood out from the crowd.
I love watching a spider weave its webs
After a drizzle, it resembles a pearl necklace.
Webs that quiver are beautiful too .
The spider catches on quickly that the movement is not because a meal has been caught in its sticky web and needs to be wrapped in its silky thread.
Love your artwork choice too.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Ciao poet, you have your first vote.
Autumn is my favourite season , I love the vivid hues . All entries ( except three ) praised this aspect.
Your entry was creative , original and stood out from the crowd.
I love watching a spider weave its webs
After a drizzle, it resembles a pearl necklace.
Webs that quiver are beautiful too .
The spider catches on quickly that the movement is not because a meal has been caught in its sticky web and needs to be wrapped in its silky thread.
Love your artwork choice too.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Superb review & thanks for that vote- much appreciated zanya
Comment from Theodore McDowell
Great for the prompt. A virtual six. I long this image: spider web quivers
with raindrops. I can picture this description so clearly. Well done and good luck with the prompt.
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Great for the prompt. A virtual six. I long this image: spider web quivers
with raindrops. I can picture this description so clearly. Well done and good luck with the prompt.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Thanks for the virtual 6 -much appreciated zanya
Comment from royowen
That's very interesting, about the the rain, I never thought of that, so it's a variable to the dangers of successful operations for a web weaving spider. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, in the contest, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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That's very interesting, about the the rain, I never thought of that, so it's a variable to the dangers of successful operations for a web weaving spider. Beautifully written my friend, good luck, in the contest, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jun-2022
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Great review zanya
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Bless you
