Awkward conversations
A social commentary.42 total reviews
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
In the first two stanzas/verses the interaction is clearly presented. For me the last two stanzas are a bit unclearly presented/ the message or interaction is obscure. I wish your intentions were as clear in the latter stanzas as the first two. Perhaps, that was your intentions.
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In the first two stanzas/verses the interaction is clearly presented. For me the last two stanzas are a bit unclearly presented/ the message or interaction is obscure. I wish your intentions were as clear in the latter stanzas as the first two. Perhaps, that was your intentions.
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Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from Wendy G
A beautiful image. Your poem is thought-provoking, and it has relevance to all. After that initial flurry of conversation when friends or acquaintances meet again, and the conversation pauses, is it a companionable silence or is it the awkwardness of the mutual realisation that the relationship has nothing left to offer, or that you are not in tune with each other.
Wendy
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A beautiful image. Your poem is thought-provoking, and it has relevance to all. After that initial flurry of conversation when friends or acquaintances meet again, and the conversation pauses, is it a companionable silence or is it the awkwardness of the mutual realisation that the relationship has nothing left to offer, or that you are not in tune with each other.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from lyenochka
Your poem is always full of deep sensitivity and perceptiveness because you are a sincere person who expects reciprocal sincerity. I was particularly touched by:
"Each time they get together
Awareness gathers dust"
Without saying anything directly, you show us what is missing when people are not fully open and cannot clear the air. But the friendship will remain, I'm sure.
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Your poem is always full of deep sensitivity and perceptiveness because you are a sincere person who expects reciprocal sincerity. I was particularly touched by:
"Each time they get together
Awareness gathers dust"
Without saying anything directly, you show us what is missing when people are not fully open and cannot clear the air. But the friendship will remain, I'm sure.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Wow, Helen, you nailed it with me and my sensitivity issues. Being a sincere person I expect sincerity back and when it doesn't happen I don't know what to do with my feelings. When a friend is not fully open and cannot clear the air there is always another chance at regaining their trust and shared openness. Our friendship remains as he is always ready to try again!
Thank you for your caring and sensitivity.
Jesse
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Thanks for being so open and honest with us and yourself!! 💖
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Thanks, Helen. I am honored by your words!
Jesse
Comment from C T Curtis
What an interesting poem - yet I'm grateful for your author's notes on it as well. I'm puzzled by the choice of the picture accompanying it. From what little I know, I think it is very well written. Well done!
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What an interesting poem - yet I'm grateful for your author's notes on it as well. I'm puzzled by the choice of the picture accompanying it. From what little I know, I think it is very well written. Well done!
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from LateBloomer
Hi Jesse, I'm sorry your conversation did not end well, but on the positive side, each of you know where you stand. A person can deal with a Yes
or a No, but a maybe or an I Don't Know just leaves a person in limbo. Awkward conversations are difficult, but you bravely faced the situation.
Look to the future. Thank you for sharing. I am sure that many people can/will relate to this writing. Sincerely, LateBloomer
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Hi Jesse, I'm sorry your conversation did not end well, but on the positive side, each of you know where you stand. A person can deal with a Yes
or a No, but a maybe or an I Don't Know just leaves a person in limbo. Awkward conversations are difficult, but you bravely faced the situation.
Look to the future. Thank you for sharing. I am sure that many people can/will relate to this writing. Sincerely, LateBloomer
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from Irish Rain
Very interesting poem on these awkward
situations.
They happen.
Sometimes too, you'll have much to talk
about...and then nothing.
Nothing in common, beyond what's been said.
Very astute observations!!
Blessings...
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Very interesting poem on these awkward
situations.
They happen.
Sometimes too, you'll have much to talk
about...and then nothing.
Nothing in common, beyond what's been said.
Very astute observations!!
Blessings...
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 05-Jun-2022
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Thank you, Judy, for your witty and insightful review! I appreciate your exceptional rating and review, my friend!
Your kindness and encouraging ways are always there for me and you help me be the best person I can be!
Jesse
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You have always been the best! No surprises there! Have a lovely week!!
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Wow, I am honored!
Thank you, my friend!
Jesse
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Sometimes we build up grand expectations of ourselves--and others--before a much-anticipated conversation. We might even plan exact words we're going to say. Then, when things go awry, we can feel SO let down. Your poem is expressive and moving.
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Sometimes we build up grand expectations of ourselves--and others--before a much-anticipated conversation. We might even plan exact words we're going to say. Then, when things go awry, we can feel SO let down. Your poem is expressive and moving.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
There are a lot of us who can relate to this. I have found that as time passes, and we see less of old friends, these occasional conversations become more and more awkward.
Nicely thought out and written.
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There are a lot of us who can relate to this. I have found that as time passes, and we see less of old friends, these occasional conversations become more and more awkward.
Nicely thought out and written.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your words and picture pair nicely, Jesse. Those words
are well chosen and fit the circumstances well. Your poem
has smooth flow and great imagery. I believe you are saying
the two friends, at times, make chit-chat to relieve the
silence between them. There are times when friends can
just enjoy being in each other's company without speaking,
Thanks for sharing, Jan
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Your words and picture pair nicely, Jesse. Those words
are well chosen and fit the circumstances well. Your poem
has smooth flow and great imagery. I believe you are saying
the two friends, at times, make chit-chat to relieve the
silence between them. There are times when friends can
just enjoy being in each other's company without speaking,
Thanks for sharing, Jan
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
Comment from leather
The image you chose for this poem is just phenomenal. It looks like a scene from my imagined heaven. So many times, in the time after a conversation I have wished I could change or erase things I said. Best wishes.
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The image you chose for this poem is just phenomenal. It looks like a scene from my imagined heaven. So many times, in the time after a conversation I have wished I could change or erase things I said. Best wishes.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2022
