Twin Hearts
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Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Reading this story as though it were chapter one of your novel, I was impressed. No time to be bored. We can immediately imagine the age of Neveah and Henry, and their characters are already beginning to flesh out. BUT, this is a prologue. I think it is complicated when in a prologue you launch straight into the story. To me it is the space for the set-up, and I think it is easier if you write it once you are a few chapters in. Also, writing a whole novel in the present tense is tricky - I would reconsider this choice! Having said all that I enjoyed my read, and will try to pop in fr a while until you find your feet.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Reading this story as though it were chapter one of your novel, I was impressed. No time to be bored. We can immediately imagine the age of Neveah and Henry, and their characters are already beginning to flesh out. BUT, this is a prologue. I think it is complicated when in a prologue you launch straight into the story. To me it is the space for the set-up, and I think it is easier if you write it once you are a few chapters in. Also, writing a whole novel in the present tense is tricky - I would reconsider this choice! Having said all that I enjoyed my read, and will try to pop in fr a while until you find your feet.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Mark Childs
Well written, fast-paced piece that has a nice twist at the end. The erotica is done tastefully (pun intended) and you could certainly turn this into a coming of age novel.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Well written, fast-paced piece that has a nice twist at the end. The erotica is done tastefully (pun intended) and you could certainly turn this into a coming of age novel.
Comment Written 01-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2022
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Thank you!
