The Wedding On The Hill
Looking to the future.10 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
This is quite beautiful, as is your accompanying image. You have incorporated the alliteration and rhyming very smoothly and well. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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This is quite beautiful, as is your accompanying image. You have incorporated the alliteration and rhyming very smoothly and well. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written romance poem. Beautuful photo to compliment your wires. Very nicely done. I Love this part we'll keep faith's fidelity.Boldly bonded, side-by-side,I am now your blushing bride.good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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This is a nicely written romance poem. Beautuful photo to compliment your wires. Very nicely done. I Love this part we'll keep faith's fidelity.Boldly bonded, side-by-side,I am now your blushing bride.good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thanks for your comments. I changed 'blushing' to 'beaming'. 'Blushing bride' was too predictable - a cliche.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your poem is excellent in every respect. First of all, it meets all of the guidelines. It is also vividly descriptive of a joyous memorable day as two are joined in marriage.
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Your poem is excellent in every respect. First of all, it meets all of the guidelines. It is also vividly descriptive of a joyous memorable day as two are joined in marriage.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thanks for your lovely comments.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A bright future in this loving union between man and wife and there is hope and happiness in these words, faithful vows of fidelity and long lasting bonds, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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A bright future in this loving union between man and wife and there is hope and happiness in these words, faithful vows of fidelity and long lasting bonds, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thanks for your lovely comments.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, the alliteration is there yet the flow is not so smooth. All cares shed is a bit ragged but the intent is surely there. I 'get' where you are coming from so I am saddened by the lack of reviews for this piece. I suppose it seems a bit unlike you to post something like this. Blushing brides and all that jazz!
Best wishes for the contest, my friend!
Jesse
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Well, the alliteration is there yet the flow is not so smooth. All cares shed is a bit ragged but the intent is surely there. I 'get' where you are coming from so I am saddened by the lack of reviews for this piece. I suppose it seems a bit unlike you to post something like this. Blushing brides and all that jazz!
Best wishes for the contest, my friend!
Jesse
Comment Written 29-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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I found the 7-syllable requirement a bit hard to get into a rhythm with.
I changed 'blushing bride' to 'beaming bride' so it wasn't such a predictable cliche.
Comment from oliver818
Nicely done, I enjoyed reading this poem. I like the way you start with fleecy fluff- it's a lovely image. Thanks for sharing this piece and have a really great day
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Nicely done, I enjoyed reading this poem. I like the way you start with fleecy fluff- it's a lovely image. Thanks for sharing this piece and have a really great day
Comment Written 29-May-2022
Comment from Mark Childs
Nicely done. Great job of fitting the alliterations to a cute story with a nice flow. To be young and in love again. The freshness of new love is invigorating.
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Nicely done. Great job of fitting the alliterations to a cute story with a nice flow. To be young and in love again. The freshness of new love is invigorating.
Comment Written 28-May-2022
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Thank you for sharing this poem. The picture is beautiful.
That would be a great wedding to attend under clear skies. On top of a mountain. Good luck. Have a great weekend.
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Thank you for sharing this poem. The picture is beautiful.
That would be a great wedding to attend under clear skies. On top of a mountain. Good luck. Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 28-May-2022
Comment from jessizero
You did a good job with the prompt. You supplied the requisite rhymes, syllables, and alliteration. The poem itself was lovely, with the wedding of two people in love (I hope). Thank you for sharing this here. Best wishes.
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You did a good job with the prompt. You supplied the requisite rhymes, syllables, and alliteration. The poem itself was lovely, with the wedding of two people in love (I hope). Thank you for sharing this here. Best wishes.
Comment Written 28-May-2022
Comment from Sarah Tummey
I didn't expect to read one of these about a wedding, but it worked well. Were the clouds on the day supposed to symbolise anything? Maybe the fact they cleared afterwards meant you see one another more clearly when you've been married awhile and know them better?
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I didn't expect to read one of these about a wedding, but it worked well. Were the clouds on the day supposed to symbolise anything? Maybe the fact they cleared afterwards meant you see one another more clearly when you've been married awhile and know them better?
Comment Written 28-May-2022
