Nature's Elixir
Spring rains, summers swimming42 total reviews
Comment from Averil Drummond
An almost impossible task, makes a Haiku sound long winded, so well done, and I've got nothing else to add so will just ramble on, (getting to 150 characters.)
reply by the author on 31-May-2022
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An almost impossible task, makes a Haiku sound long winded, so well done, and I've got nothing else to add so will just ramble on, (getting to 150 characters.)
Comment Written 31-May-2022
reply by the author on 31-May-2022
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Averil,. thank you for your review and comment.
Comment from tempeste
Ciao poet!
The vivid hues drew me in.
I'm not a big lover of Summer heat .
To cool off I have often dangled my feet in the lake water and after when we moved up the mount at 700 m. I dipped them in mountain streams.
Very refreshing.
I may have swam 3/4 times in my life but I still enjoyed your reminiscing of summer swimming.
Was it in the ocean , sea or in your swimming pool?
reply by the author on 31-May-2022
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Ciao poet!
The vivid hues drew me in.
I'm not a big lover of Summer heat .
To cool off I have often dangled my feet in the lake water and after when we moved up the mount at 700 m. I dipped them in mountain streams.
Very refreshing.
I may have swam 3/4 times in my life but I still enjoyed your reminiscing of summer swimming.
Was it in the ocean , sea or in your swimming pool?
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 31-May-2022
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Yes, each at one time or another, however, like you ... nothing bests a frigid mountain stream splash on a hot day of climbing.
Comment from E. Denison
Perfect entry here for the 6 word contest, JLR. Your choice of alliteration was a good one, and I like the way sprinkles can be interpreted in multiple ways (either sprinkles is the literal rain, or spring "sprinkles" (verb), bringing in the splendid summers). It may just be the way it presents on my monitor, but it appears the last line is slightly larger than the rest. I'm not certain if that is accurate or intentional, but either way, I think it works for the poem. You have a great build up with the symmetry and the alliteration and if you start your poem focusing on the rain, and end it focusing on swimming, it seems like you have built to a satisfactory conclusion. Great paired image as well - I like the movement of it. Thank you for sharing; good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Perfect entry here for the 6 word contest, JLR. Your choice of alliteration was a good one, and I like the way sprinkles can be interpreted in multiple ways (either sprinkles is the literal rain, or spring "sprinkles" (verb), bringing in the splendid summers). It may just be the way it presents on my monitor, but it appears the last line is slightly larger than the rest. I'm not certain if that is accurate or intentional, but either way, I think it works for the poem. You have a great build up with the symmetry and the alliteration and if you start your poem focusing on the rain, and end it focusing on swimming, it seems like you have built to a satisfactory conclusion. Great paired image as well - I like the movement of it. Thank you for sharing; good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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E. Thank you for this wonderful validation and good wishes.
Comment from Fleedleflump
I love this - a simply stunning susurrus of silky-smooth Spring and Summer stylings, spent sending super ... thoughts! Darn it, ran out. Love the wry humour of swimming - referencing the rain (I like in the UK, so raining Springs and Summers are a given) as well as thr genuine joy of swimming.
Mike
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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I love this - a simply stunning susurrus of silky-smooth Spring and Summer stylings, spent sending super ... thoughts! Darn it, ran out. Love the wry humour of swimming - referencing the rain (I like in the UK, so raining Springs and Summers are a given) as well as thr genuine joy of swimming.
Mike
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Sssssssmiling back!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Some lovely aliteration in this poem, and your six words have given us a picture of fun in the water through the warm summer months. Very well done, and goo luck in the contest!! :)) Sandra xx
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Some lovely aliteration in this poem, and your six words have given us a picture of fun in the water through the warm summer months. Very well done, and goo luck in the contest!! :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thanks for the good wishes Sandra.
Comment from C2
JLR...I love the great alliteration you have used in the short piece. The spring rains fill the lakes to ensure summer swimming joys! Nice story in a very short, constricted structure.
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JLR...I love the great alliteration you have used in the short piece. The spring rains fill the lakes to ensure summer swimming joys! Nice story in a very short, constricted structure.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
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Thank you, ssssssssmiling back!
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written six word poem. I love the repetitive use of s. Very Beautiful artwork to compliment your words. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a nicely written six word poem. I love the repetitive use of s. Very Beautiful artwork to compliment your words. Nicely done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Thanks so much, Joanne!
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Your welcome 🙂
Comment from LisaMay
I think it is a good idea to go for some point of difference in presenting a six-word poem, and your decision to opt for effective alliteration makes this offering just a bit unusual.
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I think it is a good idea to go for some point of difference in presenting a six-word poem, and your decision to opt for effective alliteration makes this offering just a bit unusual.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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LisaMay, it certainly is not pedestrian in any manner. Thanks for the nod of hope in a win.
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Nature's Elizir', is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. With a minimum of words this talented poet tells it as it is. I look forward to seeing your next post, Good luck with the contest. My fingers are crossed for you!
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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'Nature's Elizir', is short, succinct and delightfully descriptive. With a minimum of words this talented poet tells it as it is. I look forward to seeing your next post, Good luck with the contest. My fingers are crossed for you!
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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Hi friend, THANK YOU! I apprecitte the good wishes,
You certainly deserve the good wishes.
Comment from leather
What an interesting image-even with a little movement. Nice six-word poem to go with it. It's amazing how so few words can have such an impact. Best wishes.
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What an interesting image-even with a little movement. Nice six-word poem to go with it. It's amazing how so few words can have such an impact. Best wishes.
Comment Written 30-May-2022
reply by the author on 30-May-2022
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leather, short and simple!
