Comment from Giddy Nielsen-Sweep

Exceptional

This poem is brilliant. I read it out to my husband and he enjoyed it too. It is long but it tells a story in a wonderful rhyming style with a sense of fun. Thanks for posting it - I look forward to reading more of your work, Giddy

 Comment Written 30-May-2022

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reply by the author on 30-May-2022

Thanks, Giddy. It might take a while, but Patrick will probably be back.

Comment from tfawcus

Excellent

I remember reading about this Irish reprobate before! Once again he has brought a smile to my lips, I enjoyed your description of God's summer sartorial dress sense. On balance, I hope Patrick is able to hold the job down. My blood runs cold at the prospect of the place being run by a politician!

 Comment Written 30-May-2022

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reply by the author on 30-May-2022

Thanks for the review. I think God had his eye on Andrew Cuomo.

Comment from leather

Exceptional

This was just fun to read. It looked pretty long at first glance but went by in no time. It just made me chuckle a lot. Now I wouldn't mind if it went on a little longer. Great job.

 Comment Written 29-May-2022

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reply by the author on 30-May-2022

Thanks, leather. Maybe we will bring Patrick back for an encore.

reply by leather on 30-May-2022

Yes, please do. I'd like to have an update on conditions down under.

Comment from Terry Broxson

Exceptional

Paul, a great entry for this contest, I think you have got a real contender with this one, good luck. You creative mind was working in overdrive. It is fun and very entertaining! Exceptional work! Terry.

 Comment Written 29-May-2022

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reply by the author on 30-May-2022

Thanks, Terry. It was a fun write. Maybe we will see Patrick again in the future.

Comment from Aussie

Exceptional

Absolutely brilliant Paul! If you don't win the contest I shall be most disappointed. You sure put a lot of thought into your tale of god visiting hell. And you can never trust Patrick McKee he's an Irish trickster. Wonder where he got the aircon. from? Hee, Hee, Pat McKee only god has the key! K xx

 Comment Written 29-May-2022

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reply by the author on 30-May-2022

Thanks, Aussie. I think we will see another installment when God checks up on Patrick in a month or two.

reply by Aussie on 02-Jun-2022

I can't wait! :-)

Comment from Carolyn Dooley

Excellent

This guy must be a bad person for God to let him take the Devil's place.
I know that Devil is on the loose. This world is getting worse than ever.
He obviously thinks he is the boss of people. The search I did on him does not paint a great picture. Thank you for the awareness.

 Comment Written 29-May-2022

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reply by the author on 30-May-2022

Thanks for the review, Carolyn. I think the devil came to Earth after his retirement. I wonder if God might see that it might be a problem having him here.

Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig

Excellent

This is a good poem. Basically, the rhyme scheme works throughout the poem, but there are places it feels a bit forced. The idea hell is turned over to Pat Mckee is cleverly done. Would like to know where Satan has run. Lastly, putting a full stop period in the middle of a line breaks the rhythm of the poem such as in this line ~He was stymied. He just sensed it. Perhaps better written as~He was stymied and just sensed it. Overall, well written. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 29-May-2022

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reply by the author on 30-May-2022

Thanks, Sandra. We might have to have another poem to find out what the devil is up to.

reply by Sandra Nelms-Ludwig on 30-May-2022

You are welcome.

Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell

Excellent

I must go and look for the others, this was such a fun poem with God getting Pat to sign a contract. What a fabulous idea. Lol. The rhyming was spot on with amazing flow. This must be a winner, I can't see anyone beating this. Very well done, and good luck in the contest. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 29-May-2022

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reply by the author on 29-May-2022

Thanks, Sandra. I hope you find the other three poems in my portfolio. Patrick is quite a character.

Comment from Cindy Decker 2

Exceptional

Paul, this is such a fantastic poem! I loved the rhyme and meter//it marched on to a great beat while building suspense. I loved everything you put into this poem!
Exceptional work, Paul,
Blessings,
though I still believe he'll is a horrible place.ð???
Cindy

 Comment Written 29-May-2022

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reply by the author on 29-May-2022

Thanks, Cindy. Let's see what happens in the next installment. I'm sure that God would like to see something a little different than what Pat has planned.

Comment from karenina

Excellent

I will make it a point to double back and kick myself for missing Pat in previous poems!

This is long but reads "short"--so entertaining was the tale, and with rhymes that had me smiling.

I'm sure there will be stiff competition, but God in Oakley Shades, with a " Cure Aids" tee-shirt???

This is going to be tough to beat! More McKee poems please!

Karenina

 Comment Written 28-May-2022

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reply by the author on 29-May-2022

Thanks, Karenina. You should be able to get Pat in three other poems in my portfolio. Hew might be back in the future.

reply by karenina on 30-May-2022

It took me a bit to find the fourth one, but just reviewed it. I'm caught up on Patrick...

Please sir! I want more!

:)

reply by the author on 30-May-2022

It takes some time to write these, but I will try for another one in the future.

reply by karenina on 30-May-2022

No hurry... Just hoping the muse gives Patrick M. a few more adventures...