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A Penny for you Fought

Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Family Way (No - THE Family)"
Dragon Dance Chronicles Book 2

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Comment from N.K. Wagner
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**********************************************Roz and Uncle Don? There's a match made in Heaven. The power landscape slowly clears. Can't wait to meet your next nefarious citizen. :) Nancy *************************************

 Comment Written 28-May-2022


reply by the author on 28-May-2022
    Our Rozlyn knows a lot of nefarious types! She may have to get out of town for their next adventure ...

    Mike
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
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This is an interesting story, and your sarcasm and comparisons are quite amusing. You mention I might manage to catch chapters 3 and 4. Which chapter is this? You write well and my attention was captured so, if there were errors, I didn't catch them.

 Comment Written 27-May-2022


reply by the author on 28-May-2022
    Thank you, Carol :-). This one's chapter 5, and 6 is up now as well. I'm really glad you liked it. This story is a lot of fun to write.

    Mike
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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I have taken quite a liking of Terrence! He's the one I'd want on my side, lol. I wonder who this other rich, killer is, and will Roz be able to corner him? Roz comes up with some pretty impressive 'compliments' sometimes, I like her a lot, too. Onward we go! Well done, Mike, I really enjoyed this part. :)) Sandra xx

 Comment Written 26-May-2022


reply by the author on 26-May-2022
    Yeah, Roz certainly has a colourful past and it has a habit of catching up with her :-). Terence is a handy character - I can use him to cut to the chase!

    Mike
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I enjoyed reading this addition to your story.

"Fine," he sighed (TRY - "Fine." He sighed.)

"ROZ, COME QUICK, I NEED YOU." Roared a voice directly into my brain. (comma after 'YOU" & lower case 'r' on 'roared')

 Comment Written 25-May-2022


reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Thank you, Barbara :-). Your eagle editing eye is much appreciated! I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter.

    Mike
Comment from Beri Bee
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YES YES YES! You did it! This is perfect! (Alas! I have no more 6 stars at the moment.) The swing and flow are working so well. It's grounded in place and gives just the right amount of background and info while the story still moves along at a swift pace. No sacrifice to wit. Well done! Thanks!

 Comment Written 25-May-2022


reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Aww, thank you :-). I'll take the spiritual sixer! It felt good to have a more action-orientated chapter (still with lots of talking, of course!). I'm thrilled you're still enjoying it.

    Mike
reply by Beri Bee on 25-May-2022
    Yes, I am!
Comment from Wayne Fowler
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Nice story goin' on. Good writing, too. Well done.
Rozy sounds like a tough one!
Uncle Don needs to be in your list of characters.
Best wishes and good luck with the book.

 Comment Written 25-May-2022


reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Thank you, Wayne :-). Roz is tough, indeed, and she'll need to be...

    Mike
Comment from royowen
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This is the first time I've read of them moving, Roslyn leading the barbarian Terence into a nest of trouble, but ending up in a fairly neutral position. But I suspect there's definitely some plan afoot with the company, and now we've got Lindon telepathically communicating, with Roz, and both having nosebleeds, beautifully written Mike, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 25-May-2022


reply by the author on 25-May-2022
    Thanks so much, Roy :-). Yes, we're in the transition point from words to actions!

    Mike
reply by royowen on 25-May-2022
    Well done