Private I
The world will never know our private selves.16 total reviews
Comment from T B Botts
Well done on your poem author. Very few people dare to expose themselves as they really are. I think at times, if we're honest, we are embarrassed by the way we are and we certainly don't want everyone else to know our darkest secrets. Good luck in the contest.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Well done on your poem author. Very few people dare to expose themselves as they really are. I think at times, if we're honest, we are embarrassed by the way we are and we certainly don't want everyone else to know our darkest secrets. Good luck in the contest.
Have a blessed evening.
Tom
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and rating it. I agree with your comments. Please take time to check out other poems in my portfolio. Thanks
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Author,
Your essence poem, in just a few words, gives me several images of who you are. Are you a recluse? A loner? Or are you misunderstood?
I identify with your poem because, in a way, I am all of the above, in my town anyway.
Excellent photo and honest words.
Good luck with this one!
Best wishes with all of your writing.
Blessings,
Cindy
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Author,
Your essence poem, in just a few words, gives me several images of who you are. Are you a recluse? A loner? Or are you misunderstood?
I identify with your poem because, in a way, I am all of the above, in my town anyway.
Excellent photo and honest words.
Good luck with this one!
Best wishes with all of your writing.
Blessings,
Cindy
Comment Written 24-May-2022
reply by the author on 24-May-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and rating it. To answer your questions_ if I didn't have a pushy friend, I would be a recluse. The other 2~Yes, with neon lights surrounding it. If you like look in my portfolio and read the poem_ Back Away from the Brink. Thanks
Comment from leather
You picked a fantastic image to go with your two-line poem. We are actors and actresses all as we pick our way through this journey on Earth. Very nice. Short and sweet.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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You picked a fantastic image to go with your two-line poem. We are actors and actresses all as we pick our way through this journey on Earth. Very nice. Short and sweet.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and rating it.
Comment from Carol Clark2
Good thought in your poem, and lovely artwork to accompany your words. I think you still need an internal rhyme for the essence poem. You might check the example, as the statements given in the contest announcement sometimes don't have all the instructions. Otherwise, nicely done.
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Good thought in your poem, and lovely artwork to accompany your words. I think you still need an internal rhyme for the essence poem. You might check the example, as the statements given in the contest announcement sometimes don't have all the instructions. Otherwise, nicely done.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem. I could not find the example. Please tell me how to find it. Thanks
Comment from Bill Schott
This essence poem, Private I, has an internal rhyme in one regard, but not what I have seen as the model. The internal rhyme is typically between the two lines. ___X__Y
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reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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This essence poem, Private I, has an internal rhyme in one regard, but not what I have seen as the model. The internal rhyme is typically between the two lines. ___X__Y
___X__Y
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Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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That is only one location it may be. The requirement for internal rhyming words is that they appear in the body of the line. There's no particular spot. The location in the example is what that poet decided the location would be. Hickory, Dickory dock is internal rhyme with both at the front. I'm a retired MS and HS English teacher who has taught many poetry units. I do appreciate your input and appreciate you reading my poem.
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When in Rome and wanting to win a contest, one writes essence poems the way Romans do. If you wish to win, the format to follow is having the internal words of lines one and two rhyme, as well as the end words of each. Otherwise, you will perish on this mountain of "I taught English". Who hasn*t.
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Thank you I will review my poem and take your sage advice. Where is the example located? I did not see it.
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Essence is a rhyming hexasyllabic couplet with internal rhyme with a twist. Normally in English prosody ?internal rhyme? refers to a word within the line rhyming with the end word of that line or the end word of the previous line. However, in this verse form internal rhyme refers to words from somewhere within the line rhyming internally within the next line:
Joe shucks his history,
and inducts mystery.
People note my mistakes,
quoting fools and fakes.
Note: I wrote these on the fly, so forgive their being sucky.
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Thanks! Truth be told the prompt directions suck, and an example is not posted. I will stay in the contest and see what happens.
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If the contest is member voted, then you may win because people just vote for what they like. The shadowy judges may DQ it for form, but you'll never be told that. Sometimes they will, just before they review, to allow you to revise. Sometimes not.
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Thank you for the acknowledgement!
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Hi there! I agree. Showing our real selves is a rare thing. In fact, I'm not sure that I know who my real self is. It tends to change depending upon who I'm with. This is a cool idea in a restricted poetry form, and you have done it justice!
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reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Hi there! I agree. Showing our real selves is a rare thing. In fact, I'm not sure that I know who my real self is. It tends to change depending upon who I'm with. This is a cool idea in a restricted poetry form, and you have done it justice!
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Comment Written 23-May-2022
reply by the author on 23-May-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and for rating it.
