Private I
The world will never know our private selves.16 total reviews
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Dear Sandra what a beautiful contradiction in your two lines: "For the whole world to see,
Not my goal; will not be." kind of to be or not be, but let it be:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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Dear Sandra what a beautiful contradiction in your two lines: "For the whole world to see,
Not my goal; will not be." kind of to be or not be, but let it be:) Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and rating my poem.
Comment from kahpot
Exactly, there is no need for the world to know of individuals private thoughts or ideas, an excellent short poem, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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Exactly, there is no need for the world to know of individuals private thoughts or ideas, an excellent short poem, very well written, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 20-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and rating my poem. This contest is closed, and it didn't place.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words are clear, interesting, descriptive and creative.
Thank you for the author's notes - I agree with the author's statement.
The internal rhyme was matched. The poem flows and connects well.
The artwork goes well with the theme and words of this poem.
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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The author's words are clear, interesting, descriptive and creative.
Thank you for the author's notes - I agree with the author's statement.
The internal rhyme was matched. The poem flows and connects well.
The artwork goes well with the theme and words of this poem.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and rating my poem.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Sandra.
-I like your new profile pic, too.
-I agree with your author note, as well.
-You have written a good poem with a good topic.
-It meets all of the requirements very well.
-I like the arrangement with the descriptive phrase first
and the phrase "will not be" at the end.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Sandra.
-I like your new profile pic, too.
-I agree with your author note, as well.
-You have written a good poem with a good topic.
-It meets all of the requirements very well.
-I like the arrangement with the descriptive phrase first
and the phrase "will not be" at the end.
-A very good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 19-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and rating my poem.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from R. Marc Goodson
Poem met the criteria, two lines, six syllables per line. It's a rather cryptic work, with the picture adding more mystery to it. Which is the 'real face?' The mask, or the physical representation of the woman. I, as one can tell, liked it.
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Poem met the criteria, two lines, six syllables per line. It's a rather cryptic work, with the picture adding more mystery to it. Which is the 'real face?' The mask, or the physical representation of the woman. I, as one can tell, liked it.
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and rating my poem. The exceptional score is appreciated.
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, Sandra.
You adhered to the rules perfectly. Your words were
well chosen and meaningful and true.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Sandra.
You adhered to the rules perfectly. Your words were
well chosen and meaningful and true.
Thanks for sharing and best wishes, Jan
Comment Written 18-Jun-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jun-2022
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Thank you for reading and rating my poem.
Comment from jessizero
I thought this was an excellent Essence poem. It fit the required formatting and rhyme scheme. You're right that people don't disclose everything about themselves. Thanks for sharing your poem here.
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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I thought this was an excellent Essence poem. It fit the required formatting and rhyme scheme. You're right that people don't disclose everything about themselves. Thanks for sharing your poem here.
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you for reading and rating it.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Hi, Sandra; this is quite a mysterious piece. There is so much hidden within the last line of this poem, and the artwork brings your words to another dimension. I love to look at the whole picture when I read short poems. I loved this one.
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Hi, Sandra; this is quite a mysterious piece. There is so much hidden within the last line of this poem, and the artwork brings your words to another dimension. I love to look at the whole picture when I read short poems. I loved this one.
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Comment from Wendy G
I like your poem and the theme spoken of - many of us are private people and have no desire to share our inner selves publicly.
Wendy
(I note that there is no internal rhyme, in the middle of each line as the prompt said, but it still obviously got past the committee, which I find a bit confusing.)
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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I like your poem and the theme spoken of - many of us are private people and have no desire to share our inner selves publicly.
Wendy
(I note that there is no internal rhyme, in the middle of each line as the prompt said, but it still obviously got past the committee, which I find a bit confusing.)
Comment Written 27-May-2022
reply by the author on 27-May-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and rating it. The committee explained the internal rhyme was between the two lines together. In the first line it is the word WHOLE and the rhyming word to whole in the second line was GOAL. Thanks!
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
You have met all the listed requirements, both internal and ending rhymes. Sounds like a public, private world, can be confusing but realistic. Nicely Done.
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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You have met all the listed requirements, both internal and ending rhymes. Sounds like a public, private world, can be confusing but realistic. Nicely Done.
Comment Written 26-May-2022
reply by the author on 26-May-2022
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Thank you for reading my poem and for rating it.
