My Cerebrum's Glum
Interesting exercise...11 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This A-less poem, My Cerebrum's Glum, allows the readers to witness how you took on the challenge and survived without the aid of the letter A. Fun.
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This A-less poem, My Cerebrum's Glum, allows the readers to witness how you took on the challenge and survived without the aid of the letter A. Fun.
Comment Written 23-May-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You managed to write a story of the missing letter 'A' without using any words here with an 'A' in them, very clever and interesting, you met the challenge head on here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
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You managed to write a story of the missing letter 'A' without using any words here with an 'A' in them, very clever and interesting, you met the challenge head on here, good luck with the contest, love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-May-2022
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Your addition to the list of stories causes me concern only since it is better than you may think. Two others are in the running for my vote. Good luck. I only have one more to read.
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Your addition to the list of stories causes me concern only since it is better than you may think. Two others are in the running for my vote. Good luck. I only have one more to read.
Comment Written 22-May-2022
Comment from Beri Bee
It did deliver a lot of fun! A lot! This is so sweet and sunny and clever. I can't see a darned thing to improve. "Contorting my words on the run," is so fun! You've written a real winner, imho! Thanks!
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It did deliver a lot of fun! A lot! This is so sweet and sunny and clever. I can't see a darned thing to improve. "Contorting my words on the run," is so fun! You've written a real winner, imho! Thanks!
Comment Written 22-May-2022
Comment from Sugarray77
Haha... so fun! Well done, mystery writer, in accomplishing this exercise and doing a fine job answering the prompt. I enjoyed reading it!
Melissa
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Haha... so fun! Well done, mystery writer, in accomplishing this exercise and doing a fine job answering the prompt. I enjoyed reading it!
Melissa
Comment Written 22-May-2022
Comment from Wendy G
Yes it delivered some fun. Your poem expressed well the things I could not, which is why I offer you this review for your cleverness combined with skill - impossible for me. Up to now I've left "it"out of my review. I send my best wishes for your entry, together with hopes of full recovery for your cerebrum.
Wendy
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Yes it delivered some fun. Your poem expressed well the things I could not, which is why I offer you this review for your cleverness combined with skill - impossible for me. Up to now I've left "it"out of my review. I send my best wishes for your entry, together with hopes of full recovery for your cerebrum.
Wendy
Comment Written 22-May-2022
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
You have Fan Story written in your poem. I do not think they will allow this. You need to find out before they disqualify this. You have a great poem here. I wish you good luck. The picture is great. Have a great weekend.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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You have Fan Story written in your poem. I do not think they will allow this. You need to find out before they disqualify this. You have a great poem here. I wish you good luck. The picture is great. Have a great weekend.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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What's wrong with having FanStory written in? I've never seen anything to say we can't name this site in a poem or story.
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The A, a.
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Ask someone, I would hate to see them turn your post down.
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hahahahahaha.... how easily I overlooked those darn A-s's
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No need to ask - it is clearly wrong as it has a's in it. I added it after i finished the poem to make its rhythm better and plum forgot about the no 'a' rule.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
Well, this entry did provide this reader with some fun. I think it is brave of you to tackle a rhyming poem with the constraint imposed. And you succeeded. great stuff!
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Well, this entry did provide this reader with some fun. I think it is brave of you to tackle a rhyming poem with the constraint imposed. And you succeeded. great stuff!
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Thanks Kate - it was an enjoyable challenge.
Comment from Sarah Tummey
It is fun to try to write something without the letter a, and to read over all of the entries. You managed to use a lot of words without it - well done.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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It is fun to try to write something without the letter a, and to read over all of the entries. You managed to use a lot of words without it - well done.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Thank you - I enjoyed the challenge. It made me think more sharply.
Comment from Whitewave
Yes, it delivered some fun; lots of fun, in fact. Without that missing letter, which I dare not mention, you delivered the goods and followed the rule, proving yourself to be no fool.
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reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Yes, it delivered some fun; lots of fun, in fact. Without that missing letter, which I dare not mention, you delivered the goods and followed the rule, proving yourself to be no fool.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Thanks for reviewing. Just wondering if you have any advice for improving my poem?
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The poem is your creation and I like it as it is. However, you might find some help in the following suggestions which are about small changes to maintain a smoother rhythm.
contorting my words - rather than to contort
just total debris
top nominee
Hope this might help.
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Thanks for those suggestions. The rhythm of the poem is all over the show, not a regular beat at all at the moment.
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Thanks for the nudge to change a few things. I've revisited the poem and made several other changes now.
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Then again, you could argue that a little broken rhythm is attributable to a glum cerebrum, caused totally by a missing 'you know what' and is therefore meant to be. ??
Over to you - no right or wrong.
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I'm leaving some broken just to show that very thing.
