No No No No No
Many thanks to Kenzie, our granddaughter for her drawing49 total reviews
Comment from Lilly Flowers
This is such a charming poem. I think there's a very good message here and I like the whimsical way you wrote it. I should also add that the drawing is fantastic - she's certainly talented. Regards, Lilly
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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This is such a charming poem. I think there's a very good message here and I like the whimsical way you wrote it. I should also add that the drawing is fantastic - she's certainly talented. Regards, Lilly
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Thank you on behalf of my granddaughter. I send her screenshots of many of the compliments she gets on here. And thank you Lily for the lovely ones you have gifted me with. It is so very appreciated!
Comment from Bill Schott
This temptation poem, No No No No No, presented with twelve rhyming couplets, gives the readers a history of having to check oneself to ensure a pure heart. Once in a while, those temptation sneak in when we are sleeping. Fun poem.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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This temptation poem, No No No No No, presented with twelve rhyming couplets, gives the readers a history of having to check oneself to ensure a pure heart. Once in a while, those temptation sneak in when we are sleeping. Fun poem.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Thank you my awesome friend! You are right that I wanted to get a message out there without it being so serious. That's why I added that little risqué part at the end, to add some humor as well. After this contest is done, I would like to become a fan, so it reminds me to read more of the people who have been so great in reviewing mine. Yet I have to wait until it ends later today,
Lol, yet seriously at the same time, that little voice has been telling me yes yes yes about doing more of that. Thanks for the great review Bill, as I truly appreciate it.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very well done. Nice work.
And in the dream he said, "Drats, Drats, Drats!"
There's a lot of capitalization inconsistency.
Best wishes and good luck.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Very well done. Nice work.
And in the dream he said, "Drats, Drats, Drats!"
There's a lot of capitalization inconsistency.
Best wishes and good luck.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Hi Wayne, first of all, thank you for your very nice review and fun comments. I always appreciate them and your feedback as well. However, I need to tell you that I looked at my poem and saw that the only things I capitalized were the words I, God, Him (referring to God) and in the last line that says,
"Thankfully it was a dream, but still a no, No NO! Which were to emphasize how thankful I was a dream and the "no" getting louder with each one. I found it to be more creative that way and it's just my style. Yet if you look back there are no other words capitalized, which is really good for me, since learning the new way to write poetry, that would have given my college professor a heart attack. : ). But I do truly thank you my friend!
Comment from jaded831
Guilt keeps me in line too. Raised in a christian household, I always felt I was being watched. It does stop you from giving into temptation, but sometimes it is good to be bad. Your poem inspired me.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Guilt keeps me in line too. Raised in a christian household, I always felt I was being watched. It does stop you from giving into temptation, but sometimes it is good to be bad. Your poem inspired me.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Yes, I completely know what you are talking about, as it seems that everything that is fun or pleasing seems to be a sin. Yet as a Christian, I have found that I am so pleased with things like when God led me to this site to write my poetry. I ask God before I get up in the morning to lead me in the path that he wants me to be on, keep my family and me safe from harm and evil and let me be a blessing to everyone I am in contact with that day. God turned this one around, because I am so blessed by friends like you and so many others here, and LOL, I think that the only sin I'm committing is that I spend way too much time doing this because I love it so much!
Thank you my friend for the awesome review and your kind comments. They are all so appreciated.
Comment from Paul McFarland
A nice job on the temptation prompt. That last one is a tough one. I'm glad you were dreaming. If only Adam had said to Eve - no, no, no, no, no.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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A nice job on the temptation prompt. That last one is a tough one. I'm glad you were dreaming. If only Adam had said to Eve - no, no, no, no, no.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Hahaha! Paul, you are so funny! That last line for me was about as risqué as I get, but love to add a little humor to a serious topic. Thank you for the awesome review my friend
Comment from robi_mac
Yes you illustrate what an instilled law will always come to surface, though we may not always listen to what be said, but thankful this time the teachings once taught prevailed. thank you for sharing...Robi
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Yes you illustrate what an instilled law will always come to surface, though we may not always listen to what be said, but thankful this time the teachings once taught prevailed. thank you for sharing...Robi
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Robi, it's not always easy, but very rewarding. I find that the more loyal
I am to him, he rewards me tenfold. And I am not proud of the times I have told the voice, no by not listening. I like it God's way instead. : )
Thanks for the very kind review my friend!
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
You seem to be extremely strong-willed to resist all forms of temptation, like that. I am a wimp in comparison... My biggest problem is how time-eaters grab me, keeping me away from important priorities. I need a no, no, NO button.
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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You seem to be extremely strong-willed to resist all forms of temptation, like that. I am a wimp in comparison... My biggest problem is how time-eaters grab me, keeping me away from important priorities. I need a no, no, NO button.
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Katherine, thank you, but I have said no to the voice many times in my life when I ignore. So most important to me is to get back to God and try again.
Thank you again my dear friend for your lovely review.
Comment from Heather Burroughs
This is a great poem for this contest. It shows the innocence of a child to the innocence of an adult. Best of luck with your entry in the upcoming contest. Many blessings to you
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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This is a great poem for this contest. It shows the innocence of a child to the innocence of an adult. Best of luck with your entry in the upcoming contest. Many blessings to you
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Heather
I thank you for your lovely review. You are so very kind!
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
If we would follow our instincts we would be much better off. The world would be a better place. Our lives would be great. Thank you for sharing this poem.
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reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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If we would follow our instincts we would be much better off. The world would be a better place. Our lives would be great. Thank you for sharing this poem.
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Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Yes, I completely know what you are talking about, as it seems that everything that is fun or pleasing seems to be a sin. Yet as a Christian, I have found that I am so pleased with things like when God led me to this site to write my poetry. I ask God before I get up in the morning to lead me in the path that he wants me to be on, keep my family and me safe from harm and evil and let me be a blessing to everyone I am in contact with that day. God turned this one around, because I am so blessed by friends like you and so many others here, and LOL, I think that the only sin I'm committing is that I spend way too much time doing this because I love it so much!
Thank you my friend for the awesome review and your kind comments. They are all so appreciated.
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You are welcome and thank you for sharing your thoughts.
Comment from Cindy Decker 2
Author,
Kenzie's drawing is beautiful!
Your no-nonsense poem teaches us not to give in to temptation; I really believe with God's help this is possible.
Your rhyme is smooth. I really enjoyed this one.
Cindy
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Author,
Kenzie's drawing is beautiful!
Your no-nonsense poem teaches us not to give in to temptation; I really believe with God's help this is possible.
Your rhyme is smooth. I really enjoyed this one.
Cindy
Comment Written 21-May-2022
reply by the author on 21-May-2022
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Yes, I completely know what you are talking about, as it seems that everything that is fun or pleasing seems to be a sin. Yet as a Christian, I have found that I am so pleased with things like when God led me to this site to write my poetry. I ask God before I get up in the morning to lead me in the path that he wants me to be on, keep my family and me safe from harm and evil and let me be a blessing to everyone I am in contact with that day. God turned this one around, because I am so blessed by friends like you and so many others here, and LOL, I think that the only sin I'm committing is that I spend way too much time doing this because I love it so much!
Thank you my friend for the awesome review and your kind comments. They are all so appreciated.
