Flux and Flow
Writing, Reviewing, Responding ... Breathing7 total reviews
Comment from lyenochka
It's clear you love words. My favorite line was " pit of words I've papered in confusion." You used an abundance of alliteration and painted thick layers of words and I wonder if this is your experience writing and reviewing on Fanstory.
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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It's clear you love words. My favorite line was " pit of words I've papered in confusion." You used an abundance of alliteration and painted thick layers of words and I wonder if this is your experience writing and reviewing on Fanstory.
Comment Written 18-May-2022
reply by the author on 18-May-2022
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Thank you :-). I was inspired by a prompt I missed about letting the words just tumble out/stream of consciousness, so I did that then had to untie some of the knots I'd twisted myself into! Initially, this was about the twin sides of creativity - passion/calm as it were - but ended up more about the highs and lows and vulnerability of putting our words out to be admired or shot down.
I'm really glad you enjoyed it!
Mike
Comment from juliaSjames
Well this is clever. You certainly had fun playing with words. I'm sure it's immensely relaxing to swim in a river of alliteration but if you don't mind, I'll sit on the bank, swinging my legs and waving every time you come up for air. LOL
Stay safe and blessed, Julia
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Well this is clever. You certainly had fun playing with words. I'm sure it's immensely relaxing to swim in a river of alliteration but if you don't mind, I'll sit on the bank, swinging my legs and waving every time you come up for air. LOL
Stay safe and blessed, Julia
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Thanks so much, Julia :-). I just had to get this out of me because it was getting in the way of other writing!
Mike
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LOLOL
Comment from Frank Malley
"Flux and Flow" is a spate of polysyllabic words that purport to define the poet, who three times precedes a torrent of simile and metaphor with the statement, "I'm" (once), "I am" twice. It's quite a sleigh ride to ride through strings of adjectives and descriptive phrases. At the end, I really have no idea who this being is, just as I couldn't understand a complex landscape on a spinning top. It becomes a barrage that discourages my efforts to distill some center to it, something stable and graspable.
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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"Flux and Flow" is a spate of polysyllabic words that purport to define the poet, who three times precedes a torrent of simile and metaphor with the statement, "I'm" (once), "I am" twice. It's quite a sleigh ride to ride through strings of adjectives and descriptive phrases. At the end, I really have no idea who this being is, just as I couldn't understand a complex landscape on a spinning top. It becomes a barrage that discourages my efforts to distill some center to it, something stable and graspable.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Thank you, Frank. I certainly stretched sense to its limits with this one :-)
Mike
Comment from Teri7
Mike, This is a very interesting and very well written poem you have penned using great descriptive words and very good imagery with the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Mike, This is a very interesting and very well written poem you have penned using great descriptive words and very good imagery with the art work you chose. Thank you for sharing. Blessings, Teri
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Thanks, Teri. I'm really glad you enjoyed :-)
Mike
Comment from Beri Bee
Oh, how this captures the process here on FS! (Also, I'm full of suspicions about the catalyst for each reference.) And, to top it off, there comes an image of hiding behind screens that pairs up with what these alliterations do. Have I said too much? Naw! This is a wonderful poem that touches this reader. Thanks!
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Oh, how this captures the process here on FS! (Also, I'm full of suspicions about the catalyst for each reference.) And, to top it off, there comes an image of hiding behind screens that pairs up with what these alliterations do. Have I said too much? Naw! This is a wonderful poem that touches this reader. Thanks!
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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I love hearing the thought journeys my words inspire - wherever they may go :-)
Mike
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It's fun to read in what's there, or not
Comment from barbara.wilkey
The alliteration in this poem is excellent. I had to teach alliteration to my first graders, and it surprised me every year that they struggled with is. They kept trying to rhyme the words. I thought it would be easy, but it's not. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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The alliteration in this poem is excellent. I had to teach alliteration to my first graders, and it surprised me every year that they struggled with is. They kept trying to rhyme the words. I thought it would be easy, but it's not. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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I didn't get taught any figurative language until I was do my A-Levels (at 17 years old) when my English teacher realised none of us knew anything beyond rhyming, and took a week out of the curriculum to teach us. I've always been grateful he did!
Thanks so much for your words :-)
Comment from Pantygynt
This has to be classed as modern alliterative verse. Before the coming of rhyme, round about the fourteenth century, alliterative verse was all the rage. Medieval poets tied it in with metre on certain stressed syllables. This is given a much freer rein here hence the addition of 'modern'.
Great fun
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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This has to be classed as modern alliterative verse. Before the coming of rhyme, round about the fourteenth century, alliterative verse was all the rage. Medieval poets tied it in with metre on certain stressed syllables. This is given a much freer rein here hence the addition of 'modern'.
Great fun
Comment Written 17-May-2022
reply by the author on 17-May-2022
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Many thanks for the context and I'm thrilled you enjoyed it - much appreciated.
Mike
