Pieces
When your world falls apart7 total reviews
Comment from LyndaS
Dear author,
There were a couple other contenders in this contest, but this entry blew me away and I voted for you. This flows very well and your message is most powerful. The art you chose to go with this is perfect. Thank you for sharing this. A brave post. Really loved it. Good luck to you in the vote. Well done! Lynda
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
Dear author,
There were a couple other contenders in this contest, but this entry blew me away and I voted for you. This flows very well and your message is most powerful. The art you chose to go with this is perfect. Thank you for sharing this. A brave post. Really loved it. Good luck to you in the vote. Well done! Lynda
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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Thank you for your time in reading and commenting It's sincerely appreciated.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
A sad tale indeed. The victim of a worthless, uncaring individual. One observation.
5th stanza, 3rd line: I think 'breathe' should be 'breath'
I hope you finally freed yourself from this individual's strangle hold. If you don't the last two lines of your piece may come true.
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
A sad tale indeed. The victim of a worthless, uncaring individual. One observation.
5th stanza, 3rd line: I think 'breathe' should be 'breath'
I hope you finally freed yourself from this individual's strangle hold. If you don't the last two lines of your piece may come true.
Comment Written 14-May-2022
reply by the author on 14-May-2022
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thank you so much for reading and commenting. Your time is really appreciated. It was a hard piece to write but my stuff is generally on the darker side. Ty again
Comment from royowen
Oh yes indeed I think I've tasted every way one can suffer, some ofbthe worst things are infected by close friends or family, fortunately we have access to wisdom, if we allow hurts to get the better of us, it's a downward spiral, beautifully written, a strongly worded post, articulate and expressive, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
Oh yes indeed I think I've tasted every way one can suffer, some ofbthe worst things are infected by close friends or family, fortunately we have access to wisdom, if we allow hurts to get the better of us, it's a downward spiral, beautifully written, a strongly worded post, articulate and expressive, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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/thank you so much for your time and the lovely words
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Most welcome
Comment from Sandra Nelms-Ludwig
A well-written piece about domestic abuse and how it shreds one's self-esteem. I wish you gave more descriptive sensory details. You tell us about the slap and hair pulling, but if you used metaphors or similes to describe them, I feel the piece would be richer. But it is a good poem. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
A well-written piece about domestic abuse and how it shreds one's self-esteem. I wish you gave more descriptive sensory details. You tell us about the slap and hair pulling, but if you used metaphors or similes to describe them, I feel the piece would be richer. But it is a good poem. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you for your time and the critique. Its appreciated.
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You are most welcome. I enjoyed your writing.
Comment from Haylee Hemphill
Hello!
This happens more often than none and it is very sad. I myself have gone through a lot of similar situations. I was "trapped" for six whole years. I am proud of myself and forever grateful that I got out. Thank you for sharing!
One Love
Haylee
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
Hello!
This happens more often than none and it is very sad. I myself have gone through a lot of similar situations. I was "trapped" for six whole years. I am proud of myself and forever grateful that I got out. Thank you for sharing!
One Love
Haylee
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you very much for your time in reading and commenting. And you should be very proud of yourself.
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
A touching poem, hard to read as I've also known someone in this situation and you go between sadness that she has to endure this and rage that he continues to degrade and physically abuse her. Good luck with this contest. In the last line, do you mean to say, "I'll be no more"?
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
A touching poem, hard to read as I've also known someone in this situation and you go between sadness that she has to endure this and rage that he continues to degrade and physically abuse her. Good luck with this contest. In the last line, do you mean to say, "I'll be no more"?
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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/thank you for reading and commenting. And its very difficult to watch and not be able to help. I'm going to double check that.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
Wow, yeah. This definitely fits the bill for the Sad Poems contest. It's very personal and I'm sure it will be relatable to many readers who have been in complicated relationships.
Thanks for sharing.
Erika
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
Wow, yeah. This definitely fits the bill for the Sad Poems contest. It's very personal and I'm sure it will be relatable to many readers who have been in complicated relationships.
Thanks for sharing.
Erika
Comment Written 13-May-2022
reply by the author on 13-May-2022
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Thank you so very much for reading and commenting.