Those Final Years
My sonnet version70 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Wow, jaybird. 98 and still sharing your lovely poems about life's memories with us. I'm glad, though your feet are painful, you are still stumbling on. Cheers
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Wow, jaybird. 98 and still sharing your lovely poems about life's memories with us. I'm glad, though your feet are painful, you are still stumbling on. Cheers
Comment Written 11-May-2022
Comment from C2
Jaybird1,
The best recipe for a successful poem is to make the unflinching truth beautiful. You've done that here. Wow, what a fantastic poem! The best I've read on the site in ages. Thanks so much for sharing it.
I hope the road left is longer than you think but not a foot further than you want. More than that, I hope the end--when you get there--finds those you've travelled with waiting for you.
A fellow poet,
C2
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Jaybird1,
The best recipe for a successful poem is to make the unflinching truth beautiful. You've done that here. Wow, what a fantastic poem! The best I've read on the site in ages. Thanks so much for sharing it.
I hope the road left is longer than you think but not a foot further than you want. More than that, I hope the end--when you get there--finds those you've travelled with waiting for you.
A fellow poet,
C2
Comment Written 11-May-2022
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You are doing well and your pen is still making strides on paper here as you record your ability to write poetry at 98 years old! Totally amazing and I am in awe of you, love Dolly x
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You are doing well and your pen is still making strides on paper here as you record your ability to write poetry at 98 years old! Totally amazing and I am in awe of you, love Dolly x
Comment Written 10-May-2022
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Ninety eight. Wow. And I feel aged at seventy four. Would congratulations be in order? Perhaps you don't feel that way, but imagine all the things you have experienced is in itself remarkable.
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Ninety eight. Wow. And I feel aged at seventy four. Would congratulations be in order? Perhaps you don't feel that way, but imagine all the things you have experienced is in itself remarkable.
Comment Written 10-May-2022
Comment from Whitewave
jaybird,
Thank you for your post.
Strong rhyme and rhythm in your verse but the energy of your message is so sad to me. 98 years of life is a gift very few people are given. I feel and understand your loneliness; it is a comfort in some ways but maybe not a good place to stay. Make music, hum, sing out loud and keep writing - you are connecting with others in this way.
Birthdays are gifts, wrapped up in disguise,
Value increasing as number rise.
Even now, you have so much to give through your writing, a smile, happy tales from yesteryear, and a wisdom that is not available to the young.
"Look on the bright side; there always is one.
There can't be a shadow without any sun."
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jaybird,
Thank you for your post.
Strong rhyme and rhythm in your verse but the energy of your message is so sad to me. 98 years of life is a gift very few people are given. I feel and understand your loneliness; it is a comfort in some ways but maybe not a good place to stay. Make music, hum, sing out loud and keep writing - you are connecting with others in this way.
Birthdays are gifts, wrapped up in disguise,
Value increasing as number rise.
Even now, you have so much to give through your writing, a smile, happy tales from yesteryear, and a wisdom that is not available to the young.
"Look on the bright side; there always is one.
There can't be a shadow without any sun."
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 10-May-2022
Comment from Donna G. (aka Sam Duck)
Wow! This is touching and sad and wise and insightful. I so often rush through everyday life, can't wait for the weekend, or vacation, or an anniversary or another special thing. Then I realize how quickly life is moving and that I need to enjoy every minute. Thank you for sharing this poem!
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Wow! This is touching and sad and wise and insightful. I so often rush through everyday life, can't wait for the weekend, or vacation, or an anniversary or another special thing. Then I realize how quickly life is moving and that I need to enjoy every minute. Thank you for sharing this poem!
Comment Written 10-May-2022
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
I admire your spirit and your skill with words. I hope that you are not always as lonely as you sometimes sound. Your words touch. Thank you for sharing your thoughts
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I admire your spirit and your skill with words. I hope that you are not always as lonely as you sometimes sound. Your words touch. Thank you for sharing your thoughts
Comment Written 10-May-2022
Comment from country ranch writer
you look good for youtn age my friend. my son even saud so zi showed him your pucture. He said slow walking is good fornyou that shows you are toughZ,
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you look good for youtn age my friend. my son even saud so zi showed him your pucture. He said slow walking is good fornyou that shows you are toughZ,
Comment Written 10-May-2022
Comment from royowen
Your long life is a blessing, I'm in my 80th year and sometimes wonder where all that Time has gone, but I guess it comes as a gift to those fortunate to enjoy the long weary ride, beautifully written my friend, well done, blessings Roy
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Your long life is a blessing, I'm in my 80th year and sometimes wonder where all that Time has gone, but I guess it comes as a gift to those fortunate to enjoy the long weary ride, beautifully written my friend, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-May-2022
Comment from Janice Canerdy
You never cease to amaze me with your wonderful poems! They always make me tear up AND smile. They so movingly express your loneliness for your wife and friends who have gone on, your innermost feelings.
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You never cease to amaze me with your wonderful poems! They always make me tear up AND smile. They so movingly express your loneliness for your wife and friends who have gone on, your innermost feelings.
Comment Written 10-May-2022
