Those Final Years
My sonnet version70 total reviews
Comment from giraffmang
Hi there,
I liked this one as well. it shows a life's journey, with regrets, longing and a sense of being done.
Theres no one here to hold my hand, - There's.
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Hi there,
I liked this one as well. it shows a life's journey, with regrets, longing and a sense of being done.
Theres no one here to hold my hand, - There's.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
Comment from Bridge
A beautiful poem. I could easily relate these emotions with my parents, though they are in their 80s. Thanks for sharing. All the best to you.
With regards
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A beautiful poem. I could easily relate these emotions with my parents, though they are in their 80s. Thanks for sharing. All the best to you.
With regards
Comment Written 12-May-2022
Comment from Fleedleflump
What a glorious mix of fondness and melancholy, just as any good sonnet should be. You've hit the iambic rhythm beautifully and I very much enjoyed reading this piece. No notes or room for improvement.
Mike
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What a glorious mix of fondness and melancholy, just as any good sonnet should be. You've hit the iambic rhythm beautifully and I very much enjoyed reading this piece. No notes or room for improvement.
Mike
Comment Written 12-May-2022
Comment from MissMerri
An excellent poem from every perspective Jay. I love your honesty and the wisdom living long has given you. You continue to be such a blessing to us here and I know the same must be true for all who know you. Your rhyme and meter are flawless and your words full of passion and meaning. I love this poem.
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An excellent poem from every perspective Jay. I love your honesty and the wisdom living long has given you. You continue to be such a blessing to us here and I know the same must be true for all who know you. Your rhyme and meter are flawless and your words full of passion and meaning. I love this poem.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Those Final Years', is an exceptionally well-written and deftly descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.
I look forward to seeing your next post.
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'Those Final Years', is an exceptionally well-written and deftly descriptive piece. It was a pleasure to both read and review this talented poet's work.
I look forward to seeing your next post.
Comment Written 12-May-2022
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Jaybird, as always, your poem is heartfelt. Of special note:
Theres no one here to hold my hand,
to hear regrets, or battles won,
or show me that they understand
(It is sad when no-one can or cares to relate to your stories of life, but here in FSland, we wait for your poems of life. We love them. We love your writing. Keep writing because we're interested and waiting to hear your pearly words of wisdom.)
Keep the blue waters flowing, and keep on going. LateBloomer
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Hello Jaybird, as always, your poem is heartfelt. Of special note:
Theres no one here to hold my hand,
to hear regrets, or battles won,
or show me that they understand
(It is sad when no-one can or cares to relate to your stories of life, but here in FSland, we wait for your poems of life. We love them. We love your writing. Keep writing because we're interested and waiting to hear your pearly words of wisdom.)
Keep the blue waters flowing, and keep on going. LateBloomer
Comment Written 12-May-2022
Comment from DeboraDyess
Jay, thank you for the wisdom you share with us. Yu're a little older than my folks would be. I always think of them as I read your work and am so grateful that we have you!
I love this bittersweet poem. I know it must be lonely. But God still has stuff for you to do here. I think we are part of your flock. :)
Blessings,
Deb
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Jay, thank you for the wisdom you share with us. Yu're a little older than my folks would be. I always think of them as I read your work and am so grateful that we have you!
I love this bittersweet poem. I know it must be lonely. But God still has stuff for you to do here. I think we are part of your flock. :)
Blessings,
Deb
Comment Written 12-May-2022
Comment from Goosey Gander
This poem is brilliant and so true. It sort of reminds me of my poem, "To Make it Home." You have done an amazing job with this, and I especially love the last line, "My road is short, not far to go."
-GG
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This poem is brilliant and so true. It sort of reminds me of my poem, "To Make it Home." You have done an amazing job with this, and I especially love the last line, "My road is short, not far to go."
-GG
Comment Written 11-May-2022
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
I feel you partner. My road is short also. I was born in 1949 so you should feel pretty fortunate. The Lord has given you your 70 years plus., plus. He has given me my 70 now I just wait.
The days of our years are threescore years and ten; and if by reason of strength they be fourscore years yet is their strength labor and sorrow; for it is soon cut off, and we fly away. Psalm 90:10
Sounds like a lonely lament though.
Good job.
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I feel you partner. My road is short also. I was born in 1949 so you should feel pretty fortunate. The Lord has given you your 70 years plus., plus. He has given me my 70 now I just wait.
The days of our years are threescore years and ten; and if by reason of strength they be fourscore years yet is their strength labor and sorrow; for it is soon cut off, and we fly away. Psalm 90:10
Sounds like a lonely lament though.
Good job.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
Comment from Mary Vigasin
Congratulations on reaching 98. This is a beautiful heartfelt poem to remember old friends you met along the way .
Your writing is always touching,inspiring, wise and touches your readers
Heart.
I look forward to many more of your words.
Blessings
Mary
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Congratulations on reaching 98. This is a beautiful heartfelt poem to remember old friends you met along the way .
Your writing is always touching,inspiring, wise and touches your readers
Heart.
I look forward to many more of your words.
Blessings
Mary
Comment Written 11-May-2022
