Guilty Party
The weight of remorse6 total reviews
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Guilty party is a sort of a weird juxtaposition. Sometimes in the past it has become a hanging party. It would work well for pottery. I will add my English stuff too. Because the wording is broken it becomes a metaphor of the broken up condition of the guilty & the victim. Well done
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Guilty party is a sort of a weird juxtaposition. Sometimes in the past it has become a hanging party. It would work well for pottery. I will add my English stuff too. Because the wording is broken it becomes a metaphor of the broken up condition of the guilty & the victim. Well done
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you.
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***smile***
Comment from Pantygynt
As it is currently written, this three line poem takes up eight lines. I think it could well be disqualified. This would be a pity since there is nothing wrong with the content whatsoever, merely its presentation.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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As it is currently written, this three line poem takes up eight lines. I think it could well be disqualified. This would be a pity since there is nothing wrong with the content whatsoever, merely its presentation.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank could happen, but those are the chances you take.
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
The act of guiltiness feeling is internal and like shadow it goes and extends or enlarges and makes the heart bitten every moment of living; so it is damned every moment per conscience; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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The act of guiltiness feeling is internal and like shadow it goes and extends or enlarges and makes the heart bitten every moment of living; so it is damned every moment per conscience; well said, well done; post god speed more; positively encouraging editing, negatively not wording, forgiving errors of theist-good authors-writers. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR (D R)
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thank you
Comment from Beri Bee
This is a fantastic poem, in my opinion! It's so powerful! The visual of the words just makes it more so. It's not very often I hear "guilty be damned" but it sounds empowering. Thanks!
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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This is a fantastic poem, in my opinion! It's so powerful! The visual of the words just makes it more so. It's not very often I hear "guilty be damned" but it sounds empowering. Thanks!
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thank you
Comment from John Ciarmello
The effect you were going for worked quite well. I did have to stop for the Weighing word, but it was fine. A well-done piece. I wish you much success with the contest.
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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The effect you were going for worked quite well. I did have to stop for the Weighing word, but it was fine. A well-done piece. I wish you much success with the contest.
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thank you
Comment from jessizero
First of all, I like your three line poem. Second, the formatting served to emphasize certain words, and I think you handled it beautifully. Keep it up!
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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First of all, I like your three line poem. Second, the formatting served to emphasize certain words, and I think you handled it beautifully. Keep it up!
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 10-May-2022
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Thank you
