Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Sankey
This was, once again, a wonderful read. Full of emotion and personal feelings and all that. Just a couple of spags this time around. they prepared to say (a)prayer
"Are you[r] talking about the bruises
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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This was, once again, a wonderful read. Full of emotion and personal feelings and all that. Just a couple of spags this time around. they prepared to say (a)prayer
"Are you[r] talking about the bruises
Comment Written 08-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Correction made. I appreciate the support.
Comment from eliz100
You have moved the story along nicely. You have created a realistic, early love story between Ali and Cordero. Is this really the end? It seems like there are a couple loose ends, the round up and the relationship, just my perspective.
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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You have moved the story along nicely. You have created a realistic, early love story between Ali and Cordero. Is this really the end? It seems like there are a couple loose ends, the round up and the relationship, just my perspective.
Comment Written 08-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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This only the end of this chapter. There are many more chapters coming. Thank you for the kind review.
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OK
Comment from royowen
The relationship is "hotting" up, but the thing I really like about your stories is the physical encounters are always appropriate, and in not in modern propensity of consummating the encounter, which in modern expectations bring unfounded criticism, I approve of your writing is the truth about relationships. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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The relationship is "hotting" up, but the thing I really like about your stories is the physical encounters are always appropriate, and in not in modern propensity of consummating the encounter, which in modern expectations bring unfounded criticism, I approve of your writing is the truth about relationships. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Thank you for the support. I often need reaffirming. I get a lot of flak about not following the modern ideas.
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Well done
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed this chapter as much as the others I have read.
As always this is well written, composed and presented.
Your use of descriptive language places me smack dab in the middle of the scene. Thanks for sharing your talent.
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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I enjoyed this chapter as much as the others I have read.
As always this is well written, composed and presented.
Your use of descriptive language places me smack dab in the middle of the scene. Thanks for sharing your talent.
Comment Written 08-May-2022
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from John Ciarmello
Well, now I know what Ali looks like! They make a beautiful couple. I'm happy they have it all worked out and Cord apologized pronto. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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Well, now I know what Ali looks like! They make a beautiful couple. I'm happy they have it all worked out and Cord apologized pronto. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 08-May-2022
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from nomi338
Ah yes. The romantic person I am inside is well pleased by the developments so far. I can easily see myself reacting much like Cordero is conducting himself. Far too many men mess up by rushing a woman who is not ready for some of the things the man is unwilling to wait for. This is a very well tought out , developed, and written story.
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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Ah yes. The romantic person I am inside is well pleased by the developments so far. I can easily see myself reacting much like Cordero is conducting himself. Far too many men mess up by rushing a woman who is not ready for some of the things the man is unwilling to wait for. This is a very well tought out , developed, and written story.
Comment Written 08-May-2022
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I know I'm going to take a hit from a certain reviewer who thought they should've already been in bed.
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Patience is the key. The great thing about being the author is, you get to control the narrative.
Comment from BethShelby
IF you go over your stories that much and still find stuff to correct, I understand now why mine still have errors. Two or three times isn't enough. I love the way this story is going. It sound like they are falling in love but I can't blame her for the reaction to being called stupid. Cord tends to speak before he thinks.
and tripped into trough. (into the trough)
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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IF you go over your stories that much and still find stuff to correct, I understand now why mine still have errors. Two or three times isn't enough. I love the way this story is going. It sound like they are falling in love but I can't blame her for the reaction to being called stupid. Cord tends to speak before he thinks.
and tripped into trough. (into the trough)
Comment Written 08-May-2022
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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I never get the story exactly the way I want it. Even when I read books I've already published I find errors, that editors and publishers miss. I doubt it's possible to get perfect. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Judy Lawless
It seems Cordero and Alexandra are always miscommunicating, but I think maybe this time they're finally on the same page. I enjoyed reading this chapter, Barbara.
One little thing: "I tried to get out and tripped into (the) trough."
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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It seems Cordero and Alexandra are always miscommunicating, but I think maybe this time they're finally on the same page. I enjoyed reading this chapter, Barbara.
One little thing: "I tried to get out and tripped into (the) trough."
Comment Written 08-May-2022
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I have made the correction.
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You're most welcome, Barbara.
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
Para 16, 3rd line: 'tripped into trough' I think should be 'tripped into THE trough'.
In your after notes, the 1st sentence under #####, you call the town 'Alpine' and then you call it 'Alphine?'
Character list
Alexandra Black: 'is junior partner; I think there should be an 'a' between 'is' and 'junior'.
Jim: 'ranch foreman's' should be 'ranch foremen.' The same way you did for 'Bob.'
Pat Rogers: 'bank owner' the word 'bank' should be capitalized.
Maggie Bentson: The word 'an' should be capitalized.
Very reminiscent of the current television show 'Yellowstone' which happens to be one of our favorites. It sounds like this story is going to be every bit as engaging as Yellowstone. Thanks for the read.
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reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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Para 16, 3rd line: 'tripped into trough' I think should be 'tripped into THE trough'.
In your after notes, the 1st sentence under #####, you call the town 'Alpine' and then you call it 'Alphine?'
Character list
Alexandra Black: 'is junior partner; I think there should be an 'a' between 'is' and 'junior'.
Jim: 'ranch foreman's' should be 'ranch foremen.' The same way you did for 'Bob.'
Pat Rogers: 'bank owner' the word 'bank' should be capitalized.
Maggie Bentson: The word 'an' should be capitalized.
Very reminiscent of the current television show 'Yellowstone' which happens to be one of our favorites. It sounds like this story is going to be every bit as engaging as Yellowstone. Thanks for the read.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 08-May-2022
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. I have never watched Yellowstone. I have heard about it on Facebook. I don't watch TV. I have added the missing word.
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You are very welcome. I enjoyed the read and was pleased to review it positively.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm glad that's been sorted before Cord had to go. Now they have more or less told each other how they feel, it won't be long before they DO get that first real long kiss. Just make sure Samson isn't around!! Excellent chapter, Barbara, I really enjoyed it. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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I'm glad that's been sorted before Cord had to go. Now they have more or less told each other how they feel, it won't be long before they DO get that first real long kiss. Just make sure Samson isn't around!! Excellent chapter, Barbara, I really enjoyed it. Well done. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 08-May-2022
reply by the author on 08-May-2022
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Samson is a character. That kiss needs to come at exactly the right moment. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
