Unease? ... Oh, please!
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Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Wendy,
Congratulations on winning the contest! Uneasy? Lots of things keep me awake at night. One night this past winter, we had a cougar walking along behind the house around 3am. And the past 2 weeks, there have been black bear sightings in the neighborhood. Last night, not long before dark, we actually saw one walking through Carvell's Field. It makes one feel a bit timid about going outside at night. And we have 3 granddaughters.
Of course, there's the war in Ukraine and madman Putin. What's his deal? He's caused the price of gas and groceries to skyrocket, and I'm in Canada! I bought gas last week for $1.91/liter!!!
And we can't forget about Covid-19 yet. People are still passing away from it. We're still getting boosters. We're still wearing masks.
It's easy to feel uneasy during the night. Bad thoughts surface like submarines.
I hate to say it, Wendy, but your meter wasn't steady. And accented first syllables spoiled iambic. There was also some forced rhyme. But hey, you won the contest. So what do I know?
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Hi Wendy,
Congratulations on winning the contest! Uneasy? Lots of things keep me awake at night. One night this past winter, we had a cougar walking along behind the house around 3am. And the past 2 weeks, there have been black bear sightings in the neighborhood. Last night, not long before dark, we actually saw one walking through Carvell's Field. It makes one feel a bit timid about going outside at night. And we have 3 granddaughters.
Of course, there's the war in Ukraine and madman Putin. What's his deal? He's caused the price of gas and groceries to skyrocket, and I'm in Canada! I bought gas last week for $1.91/liter!!!
And we can't forget about Covid-19 yet. People are still passing away from it. We're still getting boosters. We're still wearing masks.
It's easy to feel uneasy during the night. Bad thoughts surface like submarines.
I hate to say it, Wendy, but your meter wasn't steady. And accented first syllables spoiled iambic. There was also some forced rhyme. But hey, you won the contest. So what do I know?
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Ah you should have entered. Nobody could beat a cougar and bears. Yes, I would have very strong feelings of unease in that situation! I know my metre isn?t steady. I confess to you that I have never had a single lesson in writing poetry so I don?t really know what I?m aiming at. Just write my thoughts and try to check syllables and flow, but as for the rest ? ah I?m a dummy.
Thanks for reviewing. I always appreciate your thoughts.
Wendy
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Wendy, a timely poem. The world is in chaos. So, it's only natural to worry. Main Street is no longer safe, so it's dfficult for people to feel at ease. As mothers, we are cheerleaders for our children. We try to ease their fears just like when they were young children--it's only natural.
Your poem reads and flows well, and has good rhyming within.
Well chosen artwork. A pleasure to read. This is a poem that many
can/will relate to. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Hello Wendy, a timely poem. The world is in chaos. So, it's only natural to worry. Main Street is no longer safe, so it's dfficult for people to feel at ease. As mothers, we are cheerleaders for our children. We try to ease their fears just like when they were young children--it's only natural.
Your poem reads and flows well, and has good rhyming within.
Well chosen artwork. A pleasure to read. This is a poem that many
can/will relate to. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Thank you very much! I appreciate your thoughtful review. Yes, you are absolutely right.
Wendy
Comment from royowen
I must admit there aren't many things that put me I'll at ease, my weakness is being annoyed at not doing things that should be common sense, it's not very common, beautifully written. But no you shouldn't be ill at ease because of your writing, you're a fine writer, I used to feel that way. Beautifully written Wendy, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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I must admit there aren't many things that put me I'll at ease, my weakness is being annoyed at not doing things that should be common sense, it's not very common, beautifully written. But no you shouldn't be ill at ease because of your writing, you're a fine writer, I used to feel that way. Beautifully written Wendy, blessings Roy
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Thanks so much Roy. I appreciate your kind words and encouragement!
Wendy
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Most welcome Wendy
Comment from Anne Johnston
Well done on this poem for the "Uneasy" contest. You have mentioned a lot of things that one could be uneasy about. I didn't even try this one, actually, I felt uneasy about it. Hope you do well in the contest
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Well done on this poem for the "Uneasy" contest. You have mentioned a lot of things that one could be uneasy about. I didn't even try this one, actually, I felt uneasy about it. Hope you do well in the contest
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Thank you very much Anne. I also felt uneasy about it and wasn?t going to enter, so this one was a fairly quick effort not far from the deadline. I appreciate your lovely review.
Wendy
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Thank you very much Anne. I also felt uneasy about it and wasn?t going to enter, so this one was a fairly quick effort not far from the deadline. I appreciate your lovely review.
Wendy
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You are welcome. Looks like a lot of other people like it, as you are at the top so far.
Comment from lyenochka
Lol. I think you did a great job with this and it brought to mind the verse that says that we should "set our minds on things above" because focusing on topics of unease is bad for our health! Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Lol. I think you did a great job with this and it brought to mind the verse that says that we should "set our minds on things above" because focusing on topics of unease is bad for our health! Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Absolutely! Most of it is greatly exaggerated. I like and keep a clean and tidy house (mostly!!), and try to show care and patience and compassion to friends who talk a lot of illness (no point in imagining any for me). The bit about computers is at least true! Lol. Thanks so much for reviewing. Greatly and always valued.
Wendy
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Absolutely! Most of it is greatly exaggerated. I like and keep a clean and tidy house (mostly!!), and try to show care and patience and compassion to friends who talk a lot of illness (no point in imagining any for me). The bit about computers is at least true! Lol. Thanks so much for reviewing. Greatly and always valued.
Wendy
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I think we have had these topics sent to our minds at one time or another. Like your writing. You write about topics that are very common and you make them less stressful. We know the feeling when the topics are trying.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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I think we have had these topics sent to our minds at one time or another. Like your writing. You write about topics that are very common and you make them less stressful. We know the feeling when the topics are trying.
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Thank you Rosemary! I am glad you could identify with these scenarios. I appreciate your kind review.
Wendy
Comment from K. Lang-Slattery
This is a fun poem that invites author reader interaction at the end. My favorite lines: "Unease I feel if home's not clean
Spiders may well lurk unseen!" Though it occasionally doesn't flow as well as your best work (but please don't worry and feel unease).... I'm simply going to list a couple of the things that cause me unease.
. Cruel words, especially when I say them.
. When I burn the dinner (not often, but still I know it means I was distracted, usually by something else that made me uneasy.)
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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This is a fun poem that invites author reader interaction at the end. My favorite lines: "Unease I feel if home's not clean
Spiders may well lurk unseen!" Though it occasionally doesn't flow as well as your best work (but please don't worry and feel unease).... I'm simply going to list a couple of the things that cause me unease.
. Cruel words, especially when I say them.
. When I burn the dinner (not often, but still I know it means I was distracted, usually by something else that made me uneasy.)
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Oh yes, cruel words and spoiling the dinner would definitely be up there with the rest of mine, (most of which are greatly exaggerated! I mostly have a clean and tidy house for example.)
No, it?s far from my best, and I did feel uneasy about entering it! But it was a quick write in order to meet the deadline. Maybe I should have added that.
Thanks so much for reviewing.
Wendy
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
I found your poem delightful, partly because so many of my own thoughts were expressed very well. I just entered a contest at another site about pain. I didn't want to think about it literally, so I wrote in idioms. I hope this rates high in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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I found your poem delightful, partly because so many of my own thoughts were expressed very well. I just entered a contest at another site about pain. I didn't want to think about it literally, so I wrote in idioms. I hope this rates high in the contest.
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Oh wow. How do you keep up with two writing sites! I admire you. Thank you so much for your very positive comments and good wishes. I?m glad it resonated.
Wendy
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The other one, I just enter once a week and review just a couple a week. (and build up a large portfolio of poems!)
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Mostly computers make me feel uneasy. Even though I use them every day, I am not comfortable with them.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I enjoyed reading. Mostly computers make me feel uneasy. Even though I use them every day, I am not comfortable with them.
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Thank you Barbara. Lovely review. We are very similar! A lot of the rest was exaggerated for poetic effect - but the computer bit is true. I am uneasy with them and hate it when something goes wrong!
Wendy
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I can identify with your words here Wendy, I feel uneasy if the housework is not done and I've forgotten to do something important. I list my jobs by priority not by how easy they are to do. In most cases I tackle the difficult jobs first. Your topic here is magical, and my advice is to just get on with the job and stop moaning! Ha ha ha, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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I can identify with your words here Wendy, I feel uneasy if the housework is not done and I've forgotten to do something important. I list my jobs by priority not by how easy they are to do. In most cases I tackle the difficult jobs first. Your topic here is magical, and my advice is to just get on with the job and stop moaning! Ha ha ha, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Lol. Some things here are greatly exaggerated. I am a list person too, and my house is both clean and tidy. Lol. As we get older more people talk about their medical issues, which requires both patience and compassion, but I don?t imagine any ills for myself. I just had a bit of fun here. Thanks so much for reviewing! A fun review.
Wendy
