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Storm Fields

Noon Quiet

4 total reviews 
Comment from GARY MACLEAN
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I like it. Perfect satisfaction of the line and syllable count and the don't rhyme consideration, yet you tell an understandable story. Nicely done. Thank you.

 Comment Written 13-May-2022

reply by the author on 13-May-2022
    Thank you for reading.
reply by GARY MACLEAN on 13-May-2022
    You are welcome
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Storm Fields


Excellent entry for the Cinquain Tanka contest. Good syllables count. The connection between lines is pretty good, only the last line doesn't connect. You can put a dash at the end of the 4th line to pause.

Good luck!

 Comment Written 03-May-2022

reply by the author on 03-May-2022
    Thank you. I will do so.
Comment from Mark D. R.
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The idea is really good. It tells a story that we can easily visualize.

However, IMHO your initial caps for each line detracts from a Tanka type poem.

 Comment Written 02-May-2022

reply by the author on 02-May-2022
    I will change that. Thanks for telling me.
    C.G.
Comment from Bill Schott
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This cinquain, Storm Fields, has the right setup and creates a scene of styled activity within a landscape of motionless stalks and threatening skies.

 Comment Written 02-May-2022

reply by the author on 02-May-2022
    Thank you for reading; I hope you enjoyed it.