Interpretations For Consideration
Viewing comments for Chapter 21 "Lips"An Ekphrastic Poetry Collection for NaPoWriMo 2022
14 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a good use of the 15 words allowed in this contest. Good description of the spark of love and passion. This is a good ekphrastic poem for the artwork chosen.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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This is a good use of the 15 words allowed in this contest. Good description of the spark of love and passion. This is a good ekphrastic poem for the artwork chosen.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 12-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Joan :) I appreciate your lovely feedback and message of congratulations! Placing in the contest was a nice surprise :)
Best wishes, Debra
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Don't mention it, Debra.
Joan
Comment from MissMerri
Congratulations on this prize-winning poem Debra. I think it is beautifully done and a most worthy winner of the prize. You have relatable emotion, touching the senses and also perfect meter and rhyme. Good job! I enjoyed it. MM
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Congratulations on this prize-winning poem Debra. I think it is beautifully done and a most worthy winner of the prize. You have relatable emotion, touching the senses and also perfect meter and rhyme. Good job! I enjoyed it. MM
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you so much, MissMerri, for your lovely feedback and generous star rating - I appreciate both, along with your message of congratulations :)
Best wishes, Debra x
Comment from LisaMay
Congratulations on placing 2nd in the contest with your finely-tuned 15 syllables, offering a sensual glimpse of the power of lips to awaken the spark of romance. The addition of rhyme enhances the poetic appeal.
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Congratulations on placing 2nd in the contest with your finely-tuned 15 syllables, offering a sensual glimpse of the power of lips to awaken the spark of romance. The addition of rhyme enhances the poetic appeal.
Comment Written 11-May-2022
reply by the author on 12-May-2022
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Thank you so much, LisaMay, for your kind feedback and message of congratulations :) I appreciate both!
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Debra,
Fire!!! Call 911!!!
This should be a contender in the 15-syllable contest. Nice artwork to go along with it!
I especially like the alliteration of,
"strikes the smallest spark"
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Hi Debra,
Fire!!! Call 911!!!
This should be a contender in the 15-syllable contest. Nice artwork to go along with it!
I especially like the alliteration of,
"strikes the smallest spark"
Good Luck in the contest!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 25-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thanks so much, Kimbob!
I appreciate your kind feedback - romance and all that isn't my usual, but thought I'd give it a whirl!
Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from karenina
Again and again, I come to your poetry expecting to be wowed. You do not disappoint! I've read sonnets that do not capture the sweet moment as you have in fifteen syllables! That proverbial "way with words?" You have it! Love this, Debra.
Karenina
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Again and again, I come to your poetry expecting to be wowed. You do not disappoint! I've read sonnets that do not capture the sweet moment as you have in fifteen syllables! That proverbial "way with words?" You have it! Love this, Debra.
Karenina
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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You are too kind, Karenina... thank you so much for your generous feedback. I appreciate you. Best wishes as always, Debra x
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And always, best wishes to you as well!
Comment from Sally Law
Marvelous romantic poetry and within a strict syllable count. A six for sure for this masterful work. Brava! Methinks you scored the contest.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxo's
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Marvelous romantic poetry and within a strict syllable count. A six for sure for this masterful work. Brava! Methinks you scored the contest.
Sending you my best today as always,
Sal xoxo's
Comment Written 24-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 24-Apr-2022
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Hello Sal 😊
Thank you so much for your lovely feedback and generous star rating. I really appreciate both!
Best wishes as always, Debra xx
Comment from Val Crisson
Lovely, and very erotic without being "gross" I really enjoyed reading this little piece. You used the alliteration of "s" very well, sometimes alteration can be overdone. Yet, this works quite well in this case. Love the black white theme. It holds everything together, for lack of a better word.
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Lovely, and very erotic without being "gross" I really enjoyed reading this little piece. You used the alliteration of "s" very well, sometimes alteration can be overdone. Yet, this works quite well in this case. Love the black white theme. It holds everything together, for lack of a better word.
Comment Written 21-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Val.
Your kind and constructive feedback is always appreciated :)
Best wishes, Debra
Comment from Gloria ....
A perfect entry into this contest. An understated sensual write that lights all the right lights.
A complete and most poetic thought in just 15 syllables. Not an easy thing to do.
Wishing you all the best with the Committee. :)
Gloria
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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A perfect entry into this contest. An understated sensual write that lights all the right lights.
A complete and most poetic thought in just 15 syllables. Not an easy thing to do.
Wishing you all the best with the Committee. :)
Gloria
Comment Written 21-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 22-Apr-2022
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Thank you so much, Gloria :) I appreciate your kind and encouraging feedback.
Best wishes as always, Debra
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
The first line of your poem is a clear description of your illustration, fullfillng the requirement of an ekphrastic poem. Furthermore, the line-end rhyme lifts the poem convincingly. Keep up the good work, Kate xx
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2022
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The first line of your poem is a clear description of your illustration, fullfillng the requirement of an ekphrastic poem. Furthermore, the line-end rhyme lifts the poem convincingly. Keep up the good work, Kate xx
Comment Written 21-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2022
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Hello Kate, Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it :) Best wishes as always, Debra x
Comment from juliaSjames
The artwork and your lovely alliteration/ consonance of ess sounds in the delicate words create a magical entry, Debra. Scintillatingly superb!
One alternative for consideration is to use "strikes" instead of "lights" for the shock of connection inside and for its contrast with that tender outer touch.
But whichever way you go this is definitely a contender
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2022
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The artwork and your lovely alliteration/ consonance of ess sounds in the delicate words create a magical entry, Debra. Scintillatingly superb!
One alternative for consideration is to use "strikes" instead of "lights" for the shock of connection inside and for its contrast with that tender outer touch.
But whichever way you go this is definitely a contender
Stay safe and blessed
Julia
Comment Written 21-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2022
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Oooh, Julia!! I love your suggestion and will implement it straight away! :) (Big smile!)
Thank you so much xx
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Go for it, girl. Best of luck!
