Strain on the Brain
Trinet Entry9 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This trinet, Strain on the Brain, has the proper formatting and has the reader follow the speaker through the progression of pain to insanity. Take two aspirin.
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This trinet, Strain on the Brain, has the proper formatting and has the reader follow the speaker through the progression of pain to insanity. Take two aspirin.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
Comment from Tom Horonzy
Have you gone to seek medical advice? Advil, aspirin or Excedrin might help or if it psychological perhaps a visit to a psychologist or a physicist physician. ;-)
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Have you gone to seek medical advice? Advil, aspirin or Excedrin might help or if it psychological perhaps a visit to a psychologist or a physicist physician. ;-)
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
Comment from JLR
Technically spot on! Poet, constructing a Trinet to deliver with a strong poetic feeling is not an easy feat. You have delivered a worthy entry to the contest, and I wish you the best in all future writings.
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Technically spot on! Poet, constructing a Trinet to deliver with a strong poetic feeling is not an easy feat. You have delivered a worthy entry to the contest, and I wish you the best in all future writings.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
Comment from Sarah Tummey
As someone who's had migraines, I can relate to this! I like the rhyming you've used, making the first 2, the 6-word lines, and then the last 3 rhyme with each other - very well done.
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As someone who's had migraines, I can relate to this! I like the rhyming you've used, making the first 2, the 6-word lines, and then the last 3 rhyme with each other - very well done.
Comment Written 22-Apr-2022
Comment from Bridge
Wonderfully creative poem. I'm a little jealous of your creativity. I thoroughly enjoyed the humour. All the best in the contest. Good to check out the competition
With regards
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Wonderfully creative poem. I'm a little jealous of your creativity. I thoroughly enjoyed the humour. All the best in the contest. Good to check out the competition
With regards
Comment Written 20-Apr-2022
Comment from jessizero
It sounds like a migraine or a hangover. Either way, nothing pleasant. Good luck in the contest! You seem to have followed the guidelines well. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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It sounds like a migraine or a hangover. Either way, nothing pleasant. Good luck in the contest! You seem to have followed the guidelines well. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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No hangover although somehow I wish it had been. Thanks for your review.
Comment from LisaMay
Oh dear - you have my sympathy! Even the poem has turned into a thumping rhythm of distress as you describe this migraine headache in graphic terms.
Having to think about writing poetry probably doesn't help... lie down in a dark room and think about strolling in a forest beside a stream.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Oh dear - you have my sympathy! Even the poem has turned into a thumping rhythm of distress as you describe this migraine headache in graphic terms.
Having to think about writing poetry probably doesn't help... lie down in a dark room and think about strolling in a forest beside a stream.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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The result of a year-long concussion symptoms. Not but choice but grin and bear it.
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I'm so sorry for you having to suffer from that concussion.
Comment from Paul McFarland
This is a new form for me, but the headache is not. I don't have them, but my wife does. She says that I give them to her. If I do what she asks, they usually go away.
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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This is a new form for me, but the headache is not. I don't have them, but my wife does. She says that I give them to her. If I do what she asks, they usually go away.
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Why does what you're saying sound so familiar lol. A new form for me as well.
Comment from Erika Seshadri
This is a great entry for the contest. I like how you were able to make it rhyme even though that's not required (or is it? I've never heard of a trinet before.)
Best of luck in the contest!!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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This is a great entry for the contest. I like how you were able to make it rhyme even though that's not required (or is it? I've never heard of a trinet before.)
Best of luck in the contest!!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed.
