The Adventures of Justin Thyme
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "The Demise of Deputy Dan"Crime mystery fiction
6 total reviews
Comment from Bill Schott
This is quite the homespun detective tale that brings your characters to this gritty nineteenth century setting. The tone and final solution are all keeping with the mores of the day. Nice job bringing the readers along with a nice description of the areas, people, and action. Owe you a star.
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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This is quite the homespun detective tale that brings your characters to this gritty nineteenth century setting. The tone and final solution are all keeping with the mores of the day. Nice job bringing the readers along with a nice description of the areas, people, and action. Owe you a star.
Comment Written 23-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from JLR
Fully accomplished requirements of the stated contest rules while incorporating a very engaging prose offering. Very good dialogue and delivery of a story that is easy to read and interesting. Success to you in the voting booth!
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Fully accomplished requirements of the stated contest rules while incorporating a very engaging prose offering. Very good dialogue and delivery of a story that is easy to read and interesting. Success to you in the voting booth!
Comment Written 23-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 23-Apr-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Kim Kinakin Tuckey
There was so much I liked about this story. I loved that the main character was young. Young people are often underestimated and this fellow was great at holding his own. I also enjoyed the process he went through that enabled him to solve the crime. This was a really good story!
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2022
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There was so much I liked about this story. I loved that the main character was young. Young people are often underestimated and this fellow was great at holding his own. I also enjoyed the process he went through that enabled him to solve the crime. This was a really good story!
Comment Written 21-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 21-Apr-2022
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Thank you.
Comment from prettybluebirds
I wondered why it was so long and now I know. It is nicely written. The dialogue is clear and concise and the descriptions move the story forward in a great manner. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2022
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I wondered why it was so long and now I know. It is nicely written. The dialogue is clear and concise and the descriptions move the story forward in a great manner. I wish you the best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2022
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Thank you. I appreciate you.
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I thought I was reading a published novel. The character development is superb. Placing adult thoughts into a juvenile nearly always works, but this is a step beyond. great work.
"Della, go to do with Deputy Wilkens' murder?" - just curious, is 'go to do' a British colloquialism, or did you mean 'got'?
As an aside, I had a mind to enter the 'ring' story contest, but it could not have been finished before the deadline. After reading 'The Demise of Deputy Dan', I'm glad I didn't break my back on a wasted effort.
Best wishes and good luck.
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2022
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I thought I was reading a published novel. The character development is superb. Placing adult thoughts into a juvenile nearly always works, but this is a step beyond. great work.
"Della, go to do with Deputy Wilkens' murder?" - just curious, is 'go to do' a British colloquialism, or did you mean 'got'?
As an aside, I had a mind to enter the 'ring' story contest, but it could not have been finished before the deadline. After reading 'The Demise of Deputy Dan', I'm glad I didn't break my back on a wasted effort.
Best wishes and good luck.
Comment Written 20-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 20-Apr-2022
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Thank you for reading this long story. I know 5000+ words stories take a while.
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It was a pleasure, truly.
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is sensational. Justin is quite the man. It was captivating and enjoyable. I liked the fact that you the reader didn't figure out what he knew until he revealed it. Brilliant writing!
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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This is sensational. Justin is quite the man. It was captivating and enjoyable. I liked the fact that you the reader didn't figure out what he knew until he revealed it. Brilliant writing!
Comment Written 19-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 19-Apr-2022
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Thank you very much.
