A Summer's Rose
A sensual rhyme3 total reviews
Comment from Ricky1024
"A Summers Rose"
Was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
This brings me back to a time.
Long ago when my wife had just passed away.
And I wrote honorarium poem for her.
They said in the letter anything.
So I wrote this and it was put in a book called,
'Songs of Honor"
By Author House.
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"Only One Single Red Rose" ð??¹
Along the cold, cold, Wintern banks.
When the Rain of Spring no longer would flow.
Green stem Blackened and no longer in bloom.
As, she awaited patiently.
Ever patiently for her impending Doom.
...
But in the Early Spring.
When the river again would flow.
In the Spings mist and dew.
Only One Red Rose ð??¹
Will renew.
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Note: November 23rd, 2003 And only eight short months since the loss of our 18 year old son Jason. Yes, in a horrible car accident
My wife of 20 years.
Carolyn Ann Richmond Harbach Smrkovsky.
Committed suicide ð??".
Note: And if you know somebody severely depressed and suicidal.
Then please call the National Suicide Hotline at 988 or 9-11.
Carolyn Ann Richmond Harbach Smrkovsky
December 6th, 1952~
November 23rd, 2003.
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Jason Richard Smrkovsky
November 5th, 1984~
March 31st, 2003.
...
Organ's Graciously offered to save four Human beings on April 1st, 2003.
(April Fool's Day)
...
To learn more about this incredible opportunity of
'ORGAN-TISSUE DONATIONS?'
Simply contact my dearest friend.
Lara S.Moretti the L.S.W. with, "The Gift of Life!:
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania at 1-800-DONORS-1.
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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"A Summers Rose"
Was well written rich in theme and Imagery.
This brings me back to a time.
Long ago when my wife had just passed away.
And I wrote honorarium poem for her.
They said in the letter anything.
So I wrote this and it was put in a book called,
'Songs of Honor"
By Author House.
...
"Only One Single Red Rose" ð??¹
Along the cold, cold, Wintern banks.
When the Rain of Spring no longer would flow.
Green stem Blackened and no longer in bloom.
As, she awaited patiently.
Ever patiently for her impending Doom.
...
But in the Early Spring.
When the river again would flow.
In the Spings mist and dew.
Only One Red Rose ð??¹
Will renew.
...
Note: November 23rd, 2003 And only eight short months since the loss of our 18 year old son Jason. Yes, in a horrible car accident
My wife of 20 years.
Carolyn Ann Richmond Harbach Smrkovsky.
Committed suicide ð??".
Note: And if you know somebody severely depressed and suicidal.
Then please call the National Suicide Hotline at 988 or 9-11.
Carolyn Ann Richmond Harbach Smrkovsky
December 6th, 1952~
November 23rd, 2003.
...
Jason Richard Smrkovsky
November 5th, 1984~
March 31st, 2003.
...
Organ's Graciously offered to save four Human beings on April 1st, 2003.
(April Fool's Day)
...
To learn more about this incredible opportunity of
'ORGAN-TISSUE DONATIONS?'
Simply contact my dearest friend.
Lara S.Moretti the L.S.W. with, "The Gift of Life!:
Philadelphia, Pennsylvania at 1-800-DONORS-1.
Comment Written 02-Jan-2023
reply by the author on 18-Feb-2023
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Aww thank you so much!
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I reread your poem and am so touched by your story. We share birthdays, your wife and I
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I reread your poem and am so touched by your story. We share birthdays, your wife and I
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a beautiful poem about the rose and I really enjoyed the rhymes and rhythm here.
I struggled with the metre in these two lines, may I suggest the following:
"The sultry sighs of summer wind
(that) whisper songs from far away;"
I wasn't sure what molten meant here and these two lines are out of metre:
"Renewal forms in petals molten,
to satisfy man's natural need.
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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This is a beautiful poem about the rose and I really enjoyed the rhymes and rhythm here.
I struggled with the metre in these two lines, may I suggest the following:
"The sultry sighs of summer wind
(that) whisper songs from far away;"
I wasn't sure what molten meant here and these two lines are out of metre:
"Renewal forms in petals molten,
to satisfy man's natural need.
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thanks. I felt the meter was close enough. Look up molten in the dictionary. I bet you'll find a way to use it!
Comment from Paul McFarland
I don't remember seeing one of your poems before, but my memory is not very good. A nice rhyming poem with an outstanding picture. Just December 6?
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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I don't remember seeing one of your poems before, but my memory is not very good. A nice rhyming poem with an outstanding picture. Just December 6?
Comment Written 16-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 02-May-2022
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Thank you. I haven't been posting here much. Just so little time.
1957
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Ah, yes. Just a youngster.
