Comment from jessizero

Excellent

Congratulations on winning this contest! I can see why it won. This was a truly epic surprise. I hate to think of all the money that was wasted, though. Thanks for sharing!

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2022

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Well, who surprised who? I'm glad the guy didn't leave for the
airport. You did a good job with your story leading up to the
surprise ending. Congratulations on your win.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022

Thanks Jan. Planning on being the surpriser in a few months.
Geoff

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 17-Apr-2022

😊

reply by Jannypan (Jan) on 17-Apr-2022

😊

Comment from Bill Schott

Excellent

This eighty-words-or-less story, Surprise Visit, has the required word count and takes me by surprise as the tables were turned with a fun and happy ending.

 Comment Written 17-Apr-2022

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

A nice surprise! Coming up with a story that can be told in 80 words or less is challenging, but with all the surprises we encounter in life there is always lots of subject matter. Nice job here.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2022

Comment from LisaMay

Excellent

What a delightful result this would be... but also annoying because of the ticket that is now unnecessary. Some surprises create problems, but the joy of seeing family again after so long would outweigh the inconvenience. Your story is well written, setting the scene of anticipation, then the surprise arrives at the door of the one intending to do the surprising.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022

Thanks for your review. I plan on being the surpriser later this year. Unless they show up on my doorstep first of course!
Geoff

reply by LisaMay on 17-Apr-2022

That's something to look forward to!

Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell

Excellent

This is delightful. I like how you saved the surprise for the very end. I can only imagine this will do very well. I hope you have the opportunity for this to happen truly!

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2022

Comment from lyenochka

Excellent

So instead of the narrator going to Australia, her parents surprised her and showed up at her door? That really would be such a shock! This fits the challenge well. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022

Thanks for your review. I hope to be the one doing the surprising in a few months

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Oh dear! This is sometimes the problem with surprises! They backfire! I loved your sweet story and I have arranged a few surprises for others before and they can be disappointing at times, a fun post, you won my VOTE! love Dolly x

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022

Thanks for your review and of course your vote. I hope to be the one doing the surprising in a few months.

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

I thought I had chosen my selection to win this contest but not any longer. This was terrific. Let us know now if a true story or something made for a laugh and a giggle.

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022

Thanks for the review. I intend to be the surpriser later this year. Hopefully I won't be the one getting surprised.

Comment from Annmuma

Excellent

Meets all of the contest requirements and I loved the ending. It was indeed a surprise. I have not yet read all of the entries, but I'm guessing this one should do well. good luck. ann

 Comment Written 16-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022

Thanks very much for your review