Unexpected
Sometimes people are not who we wish them to be.8 total reviews
Comment from jessizero
This was quite a surprise you wrote! I didn't see it coming, which means that you accomplished your goal (to surprise). Thanks for sharing, and best wishes.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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This was quite a surprise you wrote! I didn't see it coming, which means that you accomplished your goal (to surprise). Thanks for sharing, and best wishes.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Thanks for reading and providing feedback.
Comment from Anne Johnston
Well done on this, easy to read and you kept us in suspense until the very end, and then the big surprise. This is a great entry for the contest. Hope you do well.
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Well done on this, easy to read and you kept us in suspense until the very end, and then the big surprise. This is a great entry for the contest. Hope you do well.
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and provide feedback.
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You are welcome
Comment from Bridge
A very good story. Very well written. I loved the twist at the end. It answered the prompt perfectly. Thanks for sharing. All the best to you.
With regards
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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A very good story. Very well written. I loved the twist at the end. It answered the prompt perfectly. Thanks for sharing. All the best to you.
With regards
Comment Written 17-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 17-Apr-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and provide feedback.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This was really a fun entry, probably a great deal more for me than for the man who thought he'd made a new conquest. The last sentence if really a surprise! (Love too, should be Love to.)
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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This was really a fun entry, probably a great deal more for me than for the man who thought he'd made a new conquest. The last sentence if really a surprise! (Love too, should be Love to.)
Comment Written 16-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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Thanks for the careful read and the catch. Much appreciated.
Comment from Annmuma
Oh, and what a story it tells!!!! Perhaps the one it implies is even more intriguing. Great work and good contest entry. I haven't read them all yet, this post has got to be a contender. Good luck. ann
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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Oh, and what a story it tells!!!! Perhaps the one it implies is even more intriguing. Great work and good contest entry. I haven't read them all yet, this post has got to be a contender. Good luck. ann
Comment Written 16-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read, review and comment. Much appreciate the encouragement.
Comment from Debi Pick Marquette
Fun fun fun!! I love this poem, and I can't think of a thing I would change.
It was not only a shocking surprise for the guy at her door, it was also a fun surprise for the reader! (but because humor is my favorite type of poetry, so if mine aren't spiritual, I try to keep them light and humorous) So I thought to myself,
I would put that kind of spin on it. And you did just that and ended it perfectly!!
After all, laughter is the best medicine. Great job! You my friend have my vote!!!!!
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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Fun fun fun!! I love this poem, and I can't think of a thing I would change.
It was not only a shocking surprise for the guy at her door, it was also a fun surprise for the reader! (but because humor is my favorite type of poetry, so if mine aren't spiritual, I try to keep them light and humorous) So I thought to myself,
I would put that kind of spin on it. And you did just that and ended it perfectly!!
After all, laughter is the best medicine. Great job! You my friend have my vote!!!!!
Comment Written 16-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 16-Apr-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read and providing encouraging feedback. Much appreciated.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice image for your story.
-You tell a good story with a very good surprise.
-I like how you set it up as if they were
meeting for the first time.
-Good use of dialogue and detail.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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-Nice image for your story.
-You tell a good story with a very good surprise.
-I like how you set it up as if they were
meeting for the first time.
-Good use of dialogue and detail.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read, review and comment. Much appreciated.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A threesome? Or this guy is just unlucky in love! You made me smile with this fine flash fiction of 80 words and you created a little bit of humour here too, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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A threesome? Or this guy is just unlucky in love! You made me smile with this fine flash fiction of 80 words and you created a little bit of humour here too, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 15-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Dolly, for the read, review and comments. Not so sure he was expecting a threesome, but what the heck.
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I was just being a bit naughty here, ignore me x x x
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I like naughty, can' you tell?
