Quiet Lawyer
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Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
Thanks for sharing the semblance of a picnic with us; it is such an exhilarating piece of work, most especially, the array of flowers and animals illuminated in it.
It is more so of a picnic for Alexandra, who like her Mom appears to enjoy both the company of Cord, Rosa, Jim and the burgeoning array of flowers and animals.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes reminiscent of life spent in a livestock farm; with slight manoeuvres into horticulture.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thanks for sharing the semblance of a picnic with us; it is such an exhilarating piece of work, most especially, the array of flowers and animals illuminated in it.
It is more so of a picnic for Alexandra, who like her Mom appears to enjoy both the company of Cord, Rosa, Jim and the burgeoning array of flowers and animals.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of anecdotes reminiscent of life spent in a livestock farm; with slight manoeuvres into horticulture.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the encouragement.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love the sprinklings of Spanish, Barbara, it's been 8 years since I lived in Spain, so it's good to know I can still read the language.
I don't think Jorge is very happy with Cord. Of course, he's going to feel angry, he's been a hard worker all his life, and to be warned about his health doesn't sit well with him. I enjoyed the ride out with Rosa and Ali, it sounds such a pretty place. Another lovely chapter, my friend. :) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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I love the sprinklings of Spanish, Barbara, it's been 8 years since I lived in Spain, so it's good to know I can still read the language.
I don't think Jorge is very happy with Cord. Of course, he's going to feel angry, he's been a hard worker all his life, and to be warned about his health doesn't sit well with him. I enjoyed the ride out with Rosa and Ali, it sounds such a pretty place. Another lovely chapter, my friend. :) Sandra xx
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Jay Squires
I'm starting to detect a bit of pridefulness in Jorge. He wants to make sure that Cord accepts his (Jorge's) preeminence in the household. Machismo!
Cord grabbed her, blocking her fall. [Consider prefacing this with some mention that Cord was there. Especially after Rosa saying she would be there if Ali needed help ... all of a sudden Cord is there]
"Cord, what's blessed in Spanish?" [might want to italicize "blessed". I thought he meant what sort of things are blessed in Spanish.]
Add anything, I forgot. [Don't need the comma after "anything".]
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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I'm starting to detect a bit of pridefulness in Jorge. He wants to make sure that Cord accepts his (Jorge's) preeminence in the household. Machismo!
Cord grabbed her, blocking her fall. [Consider prefacing this with some mention that Cord was there. Especially after Rosa saying she would be there if Ali needed help ... all of a sudden Cord is there]
"Cord, what's blessed in Spanish?" [might want to italicize "blessed". I thought he meant what sort of things are blessed in Spanish.]
Add anything, I forgot. [Don't need the comma after "anything".]
Comment Written 11-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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The changes are made. Thank you for the eagle eye. I appreciate it.
Comment from nomi338
This story is proving to be as much fun as the prior story "Football." I am so pleased that not only have you retained your touch, your creative hand is steady and you are providing as much entertaining reading as ever. Please continue to do so.
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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This story is proving to be as much fun as the prior story "Football." I am so pleased that not only have you retained your touch, your creative hand is steady and you are providing as much entertaining reading as ever. Please continue to do so.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Ahhh, thank you for the encouragement. You're sweet.
Comment from Shirley McLain
Your six for the week, Madam. You did a great job, and I can feel it heating up between Codero and Alex, but at this point they are in denial. Enjoy the rest of your Sunday. Shirley
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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Your six for the week, Madam. You did a great job, and I can feel it heating up between Codero and Alex, but at this point they are in denial. Enjoy the rest of your Sunday. Shirley
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 11-Apr-2022
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They remain in denial for a while. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Another great chapter. Still a good read. Always looking forward to where this is all going. Were you or are you fluent in Spanish? If you remember Sasha, I talk to the folks who were looking after her in Mexico. Thanks to Google Translate. No spags.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Another great chapter. Still a good read. Always looking forward to where this is all going. Were you or are you fluent in Spanish? If you remember Sasha, I talk to the folks who were looking after her in Mexico. Thanks to Google Translate. No spags.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Sasha passed away a few years ago.
Thank you for the kind review.
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Yeah, I knew that. Still in contact with her carers in Mexico.
Comment from dellsworthpoet
The story is going well. The pace is good. The characters are becoming more full. The language is appropriate to the setting. The images are crisp.
Thanks for a good read.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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The story is going well. The pace is good. The characters are becoming more full. The language is appropriate to the setting. The images are crisp.
Thanks for a good read.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome.
Comment from royowen
Jorge sounds like an incredibly proud man, but life and health tend to walk hand in hand with life, and have an affect on one eventually, as Jorge will find out. Rosa discovers that Alexandra blushes every-time she mention Cord, beautifully written Barbara, , blessings Roy
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Jorge sounds like an incredibly proud man, but life and health tend to walk hand in hand with life, and have an affect on one eventually, as Jorge will find out. Rosa discovers that Alexandra blushes every-time she mention Cord, beautifully written Barbara, , blessings Roy
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Jorge is very proud.
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Most welcome
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, I liked this chapter a lot, and, of course, it being about horses I was taken in at once.
Only one little, but important thing. As the foal is a she, it cannot be Bendecido. It has to be the feminine form, Bendecida. It's just plain grammar in the Spanish language. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Hi Barbara, I liked this chapter a lot, and, of course, it being about horses I was taken in at once.
Only one little, but important thing. As the foal is a she, it cannot be Bendecido. It has to be the feminine form, Bendecida. It's just plain grammar in the Spanish language. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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You are 100% correct. I will correct that. I messed it up. Thank you for the catch.
Comment from Anne Johnston
You have moved the story along very well with dialogue. I like the part:
"Thank you, but your mom and I've discussed that I need to learn to get on and off a horse by myself."
He shook his head. "Darn. I was enjoying helping you."
Guess he's been found out.
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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You have moved the story along very well with dialogue. I like the part:
"Thank you, but your mom and I've discussed that I need to learn to get on and off a horse by myself."
He shook his head. "Darn. I was enjoying helping you."
Guess he's been found out.
Comment Written 10-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 10-Apr-2022
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Yes, he'd been found out. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome
