Loss
An unexpected loss.6 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Hello! I wanted to offer a return review and when I came to your portfolio I thought it would be best to start at your first "Milestone" post! This brought up so many emotions for me. Sept 3rd is the anniversary of my Mother's death and it's been a rough weekend. She's been gone 36 years--and yet as I visited her grave I somehow still felt like an orphan. When your words can reach out and touch someone as this poem did? You're in the right place!
Karenina
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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Hello! I wanted to offer a return review and when I came to your portfolio I thought it would be best to start at your first "Milestone" post! This brought up so many emotions for me. Sept 3rd is the anniversary of my Mother's death and it's been a rough weekend. She's been gone 36 years--and yet as I visited her grave I somehow still felt like an orphan. When your words can reach out and touch someone as this poem did? You're in the right place!
Karenina
Comment Written 05-Sep-2023
reply by the author on 05-Sep-2023
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Wow. Thank you for that. It's a post I often don't think about but when the name is brought up it's something I can't forget. My grandpa passed away when I was in 7th grade and the whole situation was a mess as I had people visiting. And as much as I had wanted to go back to Taiwan given my grandpa found himself in the hospital and situations didn't seem to be getting any better, my school was starting again after break in a couple days so I was told it was best to stay home (and go to school). My mom went back for a while before having to come back as I found myself busy all over again. And soon after I'd find myself filing in for independent study. He had passed away. And being the first funeral I ever attended and the way they did things in Taiwan, I could only wish I was a better writer back then and would be better able to describe the feelings I felt, but the impact he had on my life was just something else. And what the mind does to you, the thoughts you have with someone's passing, is just infinitely hard to describe.
But if anything, thanks for the review.
And im sorry for your loss.
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The miracle of writing is not only do you impact others...you also get a real opportunity to revisit your own feelings and perceptions. Your post is a rare gem because it's so honest and real!
Comment from Rachel Jamerson1
I really relate to the story behind your words. I too lost someone very close, and I also wrote about it. I am sorry for your pain but keep writing you have a lot to say.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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I really relate to the story behind your words. I too lost someone very close, and I also wrote about it. I am sorry for your pain but keep writing you have a lot to say.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for the comment! I am so sorry for your loss. I will definitely take the time to check out your writing as well when time permits. Thanks again!
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Thanks - look for Ultimate Loss
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your heartfelt, descriptive poem captures the wild mix of emotions one feels in the wake of a loss--devastation, grief, confusion. Not comprehending the REASON can compound the depth of misery.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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Your heartfelt, descriptive poem captures the wild mix of emotions one feels in the wake of a loss--devastation, grief, confusion. Not comprehending the REASON can compound the depth of misery.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much!
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
A really nice first post here. I liked the simplicity of your thoughts, and the last line was sad and clever at the same time. Hope you enjoy posting here as we'll enjoy reading your work.
Only suggestion - use a picture to help tell your stories. The words may speak for themselves, but a picture always captures the reader's attention first.
Take care.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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A really nice first post here. I liked the simplicity of your thoughts, and the last line was sad and clever at the same time. Hope you enjoy posting here as we'll enjoy reading your work.
Only suggestion - use a picture to help tell your stories. The words may speak for themselves, but a picture always captures the reader's attention first.
Take care.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much for the feedback! And I'm so glad to be able to share on here as well. Looking forward to reading some of your work when I have the time! Also, thank you so much for the advice. It will definitely come in handy down the road.
Comment from in777wr#
Your poem was well crafted. The loss of a loved one is difficult. Your poem gives vivid descriptions of this. I liked the consistent rhyming scheme throughout the poem. Congratulations on your first post.
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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Your poem was well crafted. The loss of a loved one is difficult. Your poem gives vivid descriptions of this. I liked the consistent rhyming scheme throughout the poem. Congratulations on your first post.
Comment Written 31-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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Thank you so much!
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You're welcome.
Comment from jaded831
You captured losing someone dear beautifully. Especially when that person commits suicide and you had no idea something was wrong. The guilt and unresolved feelings. You look up at the sky and ask "why".
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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You captured losing someone dear beautifully. Especially when that person commits suicide and you had no idea something was wrong. The guilt and unresolved feelings. You look up at the sky and ask "why".
Comment Written 31-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 31-Mar-2022
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Thank you so, so much for the feedback! I just remember being told as a younger self to make a wish upon a star in the night's sky so I felt like the sky was a friend that was always there for me. Thanks again!
