School Daze
A Typical School Day From A Kid's Perspective29 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem is a good review of what happens to most in grammar school. It was the same in both public and Catholic school. I like how you emphasized the commands and the emotion at the end.
Congrats on placing third in the conetest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2022
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This poem is a good review of what happens to most in grammar school. It was the same in both public and Catholic school. I like how you emphasized the commands and the emotion at the end.
Congrats on placing third in the conetest.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 06-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 06-Apr-2022
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Thank you, dragonpoet. I appreciate your perspective and words of encouragement.
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You're welcome on both accounts, Seville.
Joan
Comment from karenina
1-5-5-9 syllables, right on the mark with the contest directions. Loved the photo with your words... My grandkids seem to have the same experience as I did all those years ago. A lot has changed. The fundamentals seem to have remained the same.
Karenina
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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1-5-5-9 syllables, right on the mark with the contest directions. Loved the photo with your words... My grandkids seem to have the same experience as I did all those years ago. A lot has changed. The fundamentals seem to have remained the same.
Karenina
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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Thank you, karenina. I came upon this photo of my daughter's first day of school many years ago. It immediately triggered my memories of a typical school day. Thanks for sharing your experience. I appreciate your reading, reviewing and rating of my work.
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My pleasure, Seville. What a lovely name!
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Thank you!
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
LOL!!! Although you said a thousand words with very little, you stayed creative. And the humor(because it's true we all felt this way, when in school), was through the roof. Keep Writing. And stay connected
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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LOL!!! Although you said a thousand words with very little, you stayed creative. And the humor(because it's true we all felt this way, when in school), was through the roof. Keep Writing. And stay connected
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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Thank you very much. My memories of elementary school were immediately triggered when I came across this photo of my daughter's first day of school. Thanks for sharing your account and perspective.
Comment from Verna Cole Mitchell
This is an excellent poem for this contest, and the picture is perfect. I was a teacher for too many years to count, and this made me think of what a teacher's day holds.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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This is an excellent poem for this contest, and the picture is perfect. I was a teacher for too many years to count, and this made me think of what a teacher's day holds.
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Verna. I came across this photo of my daughter's first day of school. It immediately triggered memories of elementary school. Thanks for your reading, reviewing and rating of my work!
Comment from Tom Horonzy
What makes anything a poem? Must it rhyme? I was DQ'd by a committee for writing free verse once in a poetry challenge. They reasoned it didn't rhyme. Then I was DQ'd from a free verse poem when it did. The reason I am asking these questions is if a four line poem should rhyme?
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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What makes anything a poem? Must it rhyme? I was DQ'd by a committee for writing free verse once in a poetry challenge. They reasoned it didn't rhyme. Then I was DQ'd from a free verse poem when it did. The reason I am asking these questions is if a four line poem should rhyme?
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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Tom, I appreciate your commentary here. Unless it is stated within the contest rules, I assume it does not have to rhyme. Thanks for reading, reviewing and rating my work.
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Sure
Comment from Wendy G
That sounds like the perfect system to turn children off learning and enjoying school. Your staccato format suits the theme very well. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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That sounds like the perfect system to turn children off learning and enjoying school. Your staccato format suits the theme very well. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 02-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Wendy. My daughter's photo triggered my memories of a school day. I appreciate your thoughtful review and kind comments.
Comment from mermaids
Your use of words captures the feel of being in school. In few words, you describe the process of being in school and the routine that takes place. I am sure children can relate to your poem.
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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Your use of words captures the feel of being in school. In few words, you describe the process of being in school and the routine that takes place. I am sure children can relate to your poem.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 02-Apr-2022
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Thank you, mermaids. My memories of school were triggered when I came across this photo of my daughter. Thanks for reading, reviewing and rating my work.
Comment from Jenifer Bellott
As someone who was once a child, I can say that this is exactly what went through my mind in school. I loved the repetition of the word "ring" which signified the beginning and ending of the school day as well as the beginning and ending of your poem. The bold words made me think of how strict and militant some of the teachers were. Your use of onomatopoeias made me feel like I could hear the shushing and the clock as I waited for school to end. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2022
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As someone who was once a child, I can say that this is exactly what went through my mind in school. I loved the repetition of the word "ring" which signified the beginning and ending of the school day as well as the beginning and ending of your poem. The bold words made me think of how strict and militant some of the teachers were. Your use of onomatopoeias made me feel like I could hear the shushing and the clock as I waited for school to end. Nicely done!
Comment Written 01-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Jenifer. It's a lot of information to pack into such a format. I appreciate your thoughtful comments and insight. It's funny to think that many schools still function like this. I believe it was part of the indoctrination and conditioning, especially within the public school system. It was the way students were being conditioned to work in an industrial economy by the powers that be. Thanks for reading, reviewing and rating my work.
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
Those were the days. For me, many days ago. The same old, same old.
The picture was a perfect pick for this poem. You have a story with a few words in a poem that speak volumes. Thank you for posting.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2022
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Those were the days. For me, many days ago. The same old, same old.
The picture was a perfect pick for this poem. You have a story with a few words in a poem that speak volumes. Thank you for posting.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2022
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Thank you, Carolyn. I appreciate your perspective. Thanks for reading, reviewing and rating this work.
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You are welcome.
Comment from dmt1967
This poem reminds me of my school days. Last one in and first one out lol. This is a wonderfully well written poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2022
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This poem reminds me of my school days. Last one in and first one out lol. This is a wonderfully well written poem. Good luck in the contest and thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 01-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 01-Apr-2022
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Thank you, dmt1967. I appreciate your thoughtful commentary and kind remarks.
