Comment from Debi Pick Marquette

Excellent

This is a lovely piece of poetry in 5-7-5 form. Your lovely photo is perfect, as I love how it shows the mama and baby, who are the closest to the human emotion, when it comes to caring for their young. Actually the elephant has healing powers when it comes to the mother child relationship!

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022

Debi,

Thank you for your review and comments. Yes, the watercolor is really lovely. Check out her site in my notes.

Mark

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

Well, Karenina is a very talented poet indeed. I love her work. And this poem is a successful collaboration! Pachyderms at the spa - did they have cucumber slices on their eyes? What a fun image! I liked this one.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022

June,

Hopefully there is someone there to place the cucumber slices on their eyes. I can?t see how the elephants can do that by themselves LOL

It was great fun working with Karenina on this post. We will do it again.

Mark

Comment from Janet Foor

Exceptional

A cleaver, creative and fun three line poem the contest. I love the alliteration and the idea of an elephant mud spa soak. . Original and a pleasure to read.

Well done.
Blessings
Janet

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022

Janet,

Thank you for your blessings on this poem collaboration. The elephants get a free soak whenever they want. What animal would challenge them? LOL

Mark

Comment from LateBloomer

Excellent

Hello Mark, a fun three-line poem with great alliteration.

I especially liked:
summer spa mud soak
(And an "au naturel" one. Cost $000.00. Memories a lifetime, especially if you're an elephant. Thank you, Mother Nature.)

Fantastic artwork choice. As this is a contest entry, I wish you good luck. LateBloomer

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022

It is a small world we live in. My wife, as a teenager, had visited a family during her Christmas New Year break. After a 50 year hiatus, she got in touch with one of the two brothers who she met. The watercolor artist is the wife of that friend. Unbeknownst then, but now known, the husband is distantly related to me!

Mark

reply by LateBloomer on 12-Apr-2022

Small world indeed. Sounds like you need to do an Ancestry DNA test. My husband found three brothers through Ancestry. It all turned out very good. They are solid citizens.
LateBloomer

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I enjoyed the idea and the vision of this poem. I think elephants having a spa day is a great thing. Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I want to wish you luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022

Thanks Barbara!

My guess you have never had a soak or mud day with an elephant! LOL

Mark

reply by barbara.wilkey on 12-Apr-2022

LOL

Comment from Bridge

Excellent

I'll admit I don't know the meaning of pachyderm but I intend to look it up. However I feel your flows well and I especially liked your last line. All the best in the contest.
With regards

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022

Bridge,

Thanks for your review. I guess you will not be too surprised with your lookup of pachyderm (-;

Mark

Comment from the13thpoet

Excellent

Hello Mark D.R. a good day to you. I hope this finds you well. I liked your 3 line poem entry, your three lines describe the scene (or potential of the scene) so well. Great job and good luck!

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022

Thanks for those compliments and good wishes. The collaboration in writing this was truly a great experience.

Mark

Comment from John Ciarmello

Excellent

All your words brought imagery as well as sensation to this well written and well thought out piece. I wish you much success with the contest and thank you for sharing.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022

John,

Thank you for your compliments on this post. My collaborative effort with another FS poet was the best part of this particular writing experience.

Mark

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

"plodding pachyderm
wallowing at water hole ~
summer spa mud soak"
Nice picture you have chosen and your words accurately describe it. Good entry for the contest.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022

Thanks Anne! The watercolor was the inspiration for the poem. Normally, it is the reverse for me.

Mark

reply by Anne Johnston on 12-Apr-2022

You are welcome.

Comment from Tom Horonzy

Excellent

I don't know how to critique so few words. Does it meet the requirements? I suppose with five-seven-five poems, yes. Does it make sense? Surely, it does. Bravo being sent for the attempt at trying various gebres.

 Comment Written 12-Apr-2022

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reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022

Tom,

My only poetry niche is the short poem, predominately 5-7-5. Funny, I can?t write longer verses and rarely critique the same (-;

Mark

reply by Tom Horonzy on 12-Apr-2022

Some like tea straight up. Others add sugar. Still, another wants cream or the worst would be wanting cream and sugar. I understand. I am the opposite though occasionally I try the shorter challenges,