elephant enjoying spa
5-7-5 (plodding pachyderm)58 total reviews
Comment from Gina Schneller
Very cute poem. It's different and I like it a lot! I also love the artwork. Thank you so much for sharing with us all. Best of luck in the contest and in your writing journey.
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reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Very cute poem. It's different and I like it a lot! I also love the artwork. Thank you so much for sharing with us all. Best of luck in the contest and in your writing journey.
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Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 14-Apr-2022
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Gina,
Given your positive vibes for my post, I was looking for your negative element to improve on.
Mark
Comment from R.B.Bunn
This was a fun short poem. I liked how whimsical it was. The alliteration really helped lend to that feel. I also had forgotten the word pachyderm, so thanks for using it.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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This was a fun short poem. I liked how whimsical it was. The alliteration really helped lend to that feel. I also had forgotten the word pachyderm, so thanks for using it.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thanks RBB,
I appreciate your compliments. I slip in alliteration in most of my poems, which are predominantly in the 5-7-5 format.
Mark
Comment from Karen Alexandra
I really enjoyed this because for me it captured a moment and linked the animal kingdom as one. The symmetry in how we might choose to relax and that enjoyed by the elephants is lovely. The artwork is superb and captures the essence of the your written observations bringing it all together beautifully. Thank you for submitting this for review.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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I really enjoyed this because for me it captured a moment and linked the animal kingdom as one. The symmetry in how we might choose to relax and that enjoyed by the elephants is lovely. The artwork is superb and captures the essence of the your written observations bringing it all together beautifully. Thank you for submitting this for review.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Karen,
THANK YOU for your compliments. I agree that the illustration is superb. Check the link to the artist?s portfolio in my author?s notes. Pleased you enjoyed the total presentation.
Mark
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
I think the reason you went to dig in the archives for this is to let people know, that you have been doing this, not being new to the game. And your skills prove that. Keep Writing. And stay connected
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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I think the reason you went to dig in the archives for this is to let people know, that you have been doing this, not being new to the game. And your skills prove that. Keep Writing. And stay connected
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thanks for your review and stars. My poetry niche is just these short poems, predominantly 5-7-5. Pleased with your compliments.
Mark
Comment from moongirlwriter
I really like the poem. . .it flows well and is interesting. I REALLY enjoy the watercolor artwork you found to go with your writing. . .truly beautiful. The best of luck in the contest with this work.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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I really like the poem. . .it flows well and is interesting. I REALLY enjoy the watercolor artwork you found to go with your writing. . .truly beautiful. The best of luck in the contest with this work.
Comment Written 13-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thank you! We are in agreement that the watercolor is outstanding. Your comments and stars are appreciated.
Mark
Comment from Mary Vigasin
A very clever and creative 3 line poem. In just 3 lines, you have rich imagery and tell a story.
I enjoyed the read.
Good luck in the contest
Best regards
Mary
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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A very clever and creative 3 line poem. In just 3 lines, you have rich imagery and tell a story.
I enjoyed the read.
Good luck in the contest
Best regards
Mary
Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Thank you Mary for your compliments. Pleased the imagery worked for you.
Mark
Comment from Carolyn Dooley
This is great, and the picture is perfectly matched. They are taking free mud baths. Where us humans have to pay. This is an amazing picture of elephants in a group, as if they are in therapy. Thank you for the great post.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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This is great, and the picture is perfectly matched. They are taking free mud baths. Where us humans have to pay. This is an amazing picture of elephants in a group, as if they are in therapy. Thank you for the great post.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Carolyn,
Many reviewers agree with you about the illustration - it is a fantastic image.
Thank you too for your high level praise for this poem.
Mark
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You are welcome.
Comment from E. Denison
Great 3-line poem here, Mark. I like your use of alliteration; I'm not certain if that was a requirement of the contest, but it works to great effect here. Your paired image is also fitting, and the whole vibe of the poem is a fun moment. Thanks for sharing - best of luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Great 3-line poem here, Mark. I like your use of alliteration; I'm not certain if that was a requirement of the contest, but it works to great effect here. Your paired image is also fitting, and the whole vibe of the poem is a fun moment. Thanks for sharing - best of luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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ED,
THANK YOU for your compliment for the overall presentation of this contest entry. The alliterations were not a contest requirement but a poetic device I often infuse into my poems.
Mark
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
Working with Karenina is so enjoyable, your in excellent hands. This is a great example of a 3 line poem that creates mood, engages senses and tells a complete story. Well done! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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Working with Karenina is so enjoyable, your in excellent hands. This is a great example of a 3 line poem that creates mood, engages senses and tells a complete story. Well done! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 13-Apr-2022
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KLR,
It is a great joy to work with her. We agreed that we will continue to collaborate on future poems, but this time, she will post the poem and earn the brownie points. (-;
Mark
Comment from rspoet
Hello Mark,
You've written an excellent three line 5-7-5 poem
with good grammatical connection and nice use of alliteration.
Excellent satori line connecting nature and human nature.
Elephants do indeed enjoy a good mud bath
to protect their skin and help with insects.
Good choice of art work too.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022
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Hello Mark,
You've written an excellent three line 5-7-5 poem
with good grammatical connection and nice use of alliteration.
Excellent satori line connecting nature and human nature.
Elephants do indeed enjoy a good mud bath
to protect their skin and help with insects.
Good choice of art work too.
Well done.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 12-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 12-Apr-2022
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Thanks Robert for your compliments and stars. Pleased you liked the alliteration flourishes.
Mark
