Rise from the Fall
Viewing comments for Chapter 15 "Daggers"From one life to another
5 total reviews
Comment from R. Marc Goodson
Good read, engaging. I hope to see the earlier parts of the work at some point. I did find a couple of things that I wondered about: 'We have orders to fill," the Smith stands, "If we don't meet...' Would this work better with a period after 'fill,' rather than a comma?
'...and skill, the tangs come loose...' I'm not sure what 'tangs' are, but perhaps these were described in initial parts of the story.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Good read, engaging. I hope to see the earlier parts of the work at some point. I did find a couple of things that I wondered about: 'We have orders to fill," the Smith stands, "If we don't meet...' Would this work better with a period after 'fill,' rather than a comma?
'...and skill, the tangs come loose...' I'm not sure what 'tangs' are, but perhaps these were described in initial parts of the story.
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Thanks for taking the time to read my work. To elaborate, a tang is part of a blade inside the handle.
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
The objective correlative of your work reminisces a war torn community with convalescing Sophia; empathic Colton; riled up Becka and an array of close relatives making their way back home from the doldrums.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of reconciliatory anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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The objective correlative of your work reminisces a war torn community with convalescing Sophia; empathic Colton; riled up Becka and an array of close relatives making their way back home from the doldrums.
The work earns its texture through its effective use of reconciliatory anecdotes.
Excellent work. Bravo.
Comment Written 05-May-2022
reply by the author on 05-May-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read my work.
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
Excellent piece indeed my friend! The storyline was captivating and held my attention throughout the piece and the characters bounced off each other nicely;-) The imagery is spot on!
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-)
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Excellent piece indeed my friend! The storyline was captivating and held my attention throughout the piece and the characters bounced off each other nicely;-) The imagery is spot on!
Thank you for sharing and may God bless you and your family;-)
Comment Written 28-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read my work.
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading the second part of the chapter. I did a review for the first part and mentioned that your dialogue is well written as it is here. I like your use of descriptive language it kept me engaged.
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022
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I enjoyed reading the second part of the chapter. I did a review for the first part and mentioned that your dialogue is well written as it is here. I like your use of descriptive language it kept me engaged.
Comment Written 23-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2022
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Thank you for taking the time to read my work.
Comment from prettybluebirds
I really can't find much of anything wrong with this chapter and I went through it very carefully. The dialogue is marvelous and carries the story forward in a nice manner. The descriptions and emotions are evident in each paragraph. I think the chapter is fine as it is.
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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I really can't find much of anything wrong with this chapter and I went through it very carefully. The dialogue is marvelous and carries the story forward in a nice manner. The descriptions and emotions are evident in each paragraph. I think the chapter is fine as it is.
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thank you, prettybluebirds.
