If I'm Worthy of a Smile
Saying goodbye while I'm living.16 total reviews
Comment from Pearl Edwards
This is a lovely free verse poem for this last line challenge. Though talking of death you write with a peaceful mind and leave the reader feeling the same. Lovely read. Cheers
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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This is a lovely free verse poem for this last line challenge. Though talking of death you write with a peaceful mind and leave the reader feeling the same. Lovely read. Cheers
Comment Written 28-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Pearl. :) I'm glad you enjoyed it. Death, to me, is just another phase of what we are. If nothing else we will sleep peacefully without the worries of the world.
Comment from Teri7
This is very beautiful what you have penned for the club entry "Last Words). You used very good heartfelt words and I like where you got it from - The declaration of Independence. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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This is very beautiful what you have penned for the club entry "Last Words). You used very good heartfelt words and I like where you got it from - The declaration of Independence. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 26-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 26-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Teri. :) I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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you are so welcome!
Comment from Sally Law
This is beautifully penned and illustrated poem for the last words prompt. The thing I love most about writing is the lasting impression and piece of me left behind. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge,
Sal XO
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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This is beautifully penned and illustrated poem for the last words prompt. The thing I love most about writing is the lasting impression and piece of me left behind. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the challenge,
Sal XO
Comment Written 22-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 22-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Sally. :) You made me smile.
Comment from Lulube
You put your soul into this poem. Caressing words of comfort, yet powerful enough to feel safe, using great imagery. You have one line that gave me the chills; THE ONE THAT CARESSES YOUR HAIR! Well I tell ya, I have felt that, fingers running through my hair, 2 times now. both times I was very upset, crying hard. I didn't think that that happened to others, thought it was my imagination. Your loved ones are lucky and fortunate to know this.
lulube
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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You put your soul into this poem. Caressing words of comfort, yet powerful enough to feel safe, using great imagery. You have one line that gave me the chills; THE ONE THAT CARESSES YOUR HAIR! Well I tell ya, I have felt that, fingers running through my hair, 2 times now. both times I was very upset, crying hard. I didn't think that that happened to others, thought it was my imagination. Your loved ones are lucky and fortunate to know this.
lulube
Comment Written 21-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Lulube. :) Don't be worried if fingers caress your hair. Someone loves you. Be afraid if hands start pulling you down. :) Thank you for the stars.
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thxs for sharing a little extra
lulube
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Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a beautifully written free verse. My last words as they pass by are engraved in a song from an old book the
Life, Sayings, and Words of Jesus. The book is coming apart from age.
Yet, they are part of my heart,
forMy soul feels heavenly bound."As I hear, the angels sing,coming for to carry me home."very good entry for the club entry last words.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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This is a beautifully written free verse. My last words as they pass by are engraved in a song from an old book the
Life, Sayings, and Words of Jesus. The book is coming apart from age.
Yet, they are part of my heart,
forMy soul feels heavenly bound."As I hear, the angels sing,coming for to carry me home."very good entry for the club entry last words.
Comment Written 21-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Joanne. :)
Comment from K.L. Rockquemore
I enjoyed reading your poem. The topic is relatable to most, I would think and your sentiment is heartfelt. Do you write different notes styles of poetry or do you prefer free verse?
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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I enjoyed reading your poem. The topic is relatable to most, I would think and your sentiment is heartfelt. Do you write different notes styles of poetry or do you prefer free verse?
Comment Written 21-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Thank you, K.L. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :) I write different meter styles of poetry.
Comment from Wendy G
All believers will be smiling when in Heaven, so that is something to be looking forward to. I enjoyed your interesting write on the last words of the closest book to you! Well done.
Wendy
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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All believers will be smiling when in Heaven, so that is something to be looking forward to. I enjoyed your interesting write on the last words of the closest book to you! Well done.
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Wendy. I'm glad you liked it.
Comment from aryr
The picture was beautiful-an apple with a maple tree leaf, Jose. I loved your poem it was definitely a free versers. If I recall Thomas Jefferson as a writer of the Declaration of Independence proclaimed the close sentiments to this.
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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The picture was beautiful-an apple with a maple tree leaf, Jose. I loved your poem it was definitely a free versers. If I recall Thomas Jefferson as a writer of the Declaration of Independence proclaimed the close sentiments to this.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Alie. :) I have a book by Thomas Jefferson but haven't read it. The book, Life, Sayings, and Words of Jesus is another that I've read a little off. It's old wrapped in wheat paper. I'm glad you like it.
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You are so welcome, Jose.
Comment from Sugarray77
Great job on this, Jose. Your points and the way that you portrayed them was very good and answered the prompt beautifully. I enjoyed reading your Freeverse.
Melissa
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Great job on this, Jose. Your points and the way that you portrayed them was very good and answered the prompt beautifully. I enjoyed reading your Freeverse.
Melissa
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Melissa. I'm glad you enjoyed it. :)
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I hope you're not planning to leave anytime soon? A fine last farewell for when the time comes, this is something I have never though to of writing, but I enjoyed your words here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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I hope you're not planning to leave anytime soon? A fine last farewell for when the time comes, this is something I have never though to of writing, but I enjoyed your words here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 21-Mar-2022
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Thank you, Dolly. :) I am kind of crazy and thought I would be canceled from FanStory. I was saying goodbye to all my friends. But I'm still here so you'll have to put up with me for a while longer.
