Ugly Duckling
Making the best of what you are.3 total reviews
Comment from Rena Smith
I like this story because it has a good moral and I can relate to it. It is a good story written with a valuable meaning. The poet did a good job. I love this story and stories like this that has a good moral to it.
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
I like this story because it has a good moral and I can relate to it. It is a good story written with a valuable meaning. The poet did a good job. I love this story and stories like this that has a good moral to it.
Comment Written 26-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 28-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your feedback!
Comment from Erika Seshadri
This is a lovely micro-story with a great I told-you-so moment and a very satisfying ending. It seems to meet the requirements for the contest. Best of luck.
I have one recommendation... If the first two paragraphs are supposed to reflect something that happened in her childhood, I would change the word "yesterday" or modify that sentence to better reflect a flashback. The use of the word "yesterday" makes it seem like something that just happened, so it's unclear at first when you jump ahead, how much time has passed.
I hope that makes sense?
Anyway, have a great day. I love the moral of this story.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
This is a lovely micro-story with a great I told-you-so moment and a very satisfying ending. It seems to meet the requirements for the contest. Best of luck.
I have one recommendation... If the first two paragraphs are supposed to reflect something that happened in her childhood, I would change the word "yesterday" or modify that sentence to better reflect a flashback. The use of the word "yesterday" makes it seem like something that just happened, so it's unclear at first when you jump ahead, how much time has passed.
I hope that makes sense?
Anyway, have a great day. I love the moral of this story.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thanks for your suggestion and review. Much appreciated.
Comment from jessizero
I love that your protagonist became a duck, so to speak. I liked your beginning, but the end was perfect. Thank you for sharing your work here. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
I love that your protagonist became a duck, so to speak. I liked your beginning, but the end was perfect. Thank you for sharing your work here. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 20-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 20-Mar-2022
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Thank you for your review!